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应pumpkinMM的要求把我考试时写的两片作文贴出来. 让大家看看, 其实6分作文真的不是很难. 另, 两片都没有做proofreading, 所以语法啦, 拼写错误在所难免, 大家读的时候将就点.
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Should the employees have full access to their own personal files, such as certain confidential materials? The problem seems to arouse controversy between different opinion groups. Whereas some may advocate that employees should be granted such free access to their own personal documents, other may strongly oppose that giving the employees full access to their personal files will bring about a possibility that the people supplying that information would not be likely to express their opinions candidly. Recognizing that a more proper solution to the question can only be achieved by incorporating all relevant aspects, I would like to advocate that employee should at least have the right to see their own personal document of the performance rating.
Firstly, I believe that when personal files, such as performance rating are kept away from the employees, these documents mean no more than waste paper to the employees. Giving the employees free access to their files of performance rating will give the employees a deeper understanding on works, their performance and themselves. Inconfident employees will realize they are actually not as incompetent as they thought, while complacent employees will be aware that they are still lacking in some aspects.
Secondly, performance reports can be used an efficient incentive to encourage the employees to make progress in their jobs. The employees’ salaries, their opportunities of promotions and raises can be established on the performance rating system. By giving the employees free access to their performance reviews, employers make it clear on which aspects the employers can make improvements.
Thirdly, granting employees free access to their performance rating will guard against the possibility of prejudice and unfairness from the side of the information-suppliers who make the performance rating. Seeing such files can clear out the employees' doubt that the reports on performance rating are personally-biased to the detriment of them. In my opinion, this realization of being treated fairly itself will boost the employees' interests in their jobs and help them to build up their confidence.
Some of my dissenters may contend that giving the employees access to their personal documents will exert an ill influence on the credibility of the information itself. Admittedly, it may be the case. However, since there is no need to keep the names of informants on the documents, the negative effects can be easily avoided.
In final analysis, because of the above-mentioned reasons, which probably interweave into an organic whole and become more compelling, we are safely arrived at the conclusion that the employees should at least have full access to their personal files such as performance rating.
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In this argument, the author makes a conclusion that the city should plant artificial flowers instead of real flowers in big decorative pot on Main Street. The author's line of reasoning is established on his assumption that by planting plastic flowers, the city can save money. To support such an assumption, the author cites three supportive examples: last year, the city contracted with Flower Power to plant a variety of flowers and to water them each, yet by midsummer many of the plants were wilted; although the initial cost for plastic flowers is twice as much as real plants, the city can save money after two years; finally, public reaction will definitely support the proposal. At the first glance, the argument seems to be somewhat convincing. However, a close and deep reflection reveals how groundless and problematic it is. In the following paragraphs, I should elaborate the main flaws in the argument.
In the first place, the author fails to explore the real underlying reasons for the death of the plants and flowers. Instead, he makes a gratuitous assumption that more frequent watering is needed. However, the author fails to substantiate his point. In no case can the mere fact that the flowers are wilted help to build up such an assumption flawlessly. It is possible that many of the plants were wilted because they required drier soils for survival and thriving. Unless the author can build up a causal correlation between the survival of the plants and more needed watering, the assumption remains questionable and open to discussion.
In the second place, the author mentions that planting plastic flowers means the saving of money in the long run. However, the credibility of such an assertion has yet to be established, especially since the author ignores to point out that most of the plastic plants will last for more than two years. One obvious rebuttal to the author's reasoning is that investigations show that a majority of plastic plants, if planted on the Main Street, can only last for at most two years without the protection from direct sunshine. In such a case, the author's assertion that planting plastic plants will save money is of dubious validity.
In the third place, the author believes that the public will certainly support his position, as over 1200 Gazette readers said that the city wastes money and should find ways to reduce spending. Yet, such a survey result is neither representative nor reliable. Actually, it is rather misleading, since the author lacks direct evidence to buoy his assumption that the viewpoint of the 1200 Gazette can largely reflects the opinion of the majority of the residents. Besides, even if most of the residents do favor for a reduced spending, they may not necessarily consider the author's suggestion a proper way of reduction in expenditure. Therefore, the author makes a hasty conclusion that the public will support his position for sure.
To sum up, because it is plagued with the above-stated fallacies, the argument is flawed. To buttress his argument, the author should provide more direct evidence indicating that planting plastic plants will be more money-saving than planting real flowers. Moreover, the feasibility of planting and maintaining the plastic plants should also be taken into consideration. Additionally, a more related and reliable survey showing the real support for the author's recommendation will also cement the author's position.
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