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照着模板套了第一篇文章,请大家看看是不是这个意思。

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楼主
发表于 2006-2-14 12:19:00 | 只看该作者

照着模板套了第一篇文章,请大家看看是不是这个意思。

5. “All groups and organizations should function as teams in which everyone makes decisions and shares responsibilities and duties. Giving one person central authority and responsibility for a project or task is not an effective way to get work done.”



Should everyone in a team makes decisions and shares responsibilities and duties, as the speaker contents? To some extent, I agree with her general view because a democratic circumstance is indispensable for a team. However, the speaker unnecessarily extends this broad assertion to an immutable extreme while ignores other compelling factors impacting this issue. On balance, my points of agreement and contention with the speaker involve the fundamental and deep analysis, as discussed below.



On the one hand, it is likely to admit that this statement, although suffers form some obvious drawbacks, possesses some merits primarily in some special cases in which the implicit rationale behind it accords with common sense and our everyday experience as human beings, hence, is partially indisputable. For example, in order to win a competitive advantage in a market, it is so important for an advertising company to collect all the brilliant ideas of its employees. Three heads are better than one, said a proverb. It is therefore no doubt that why advertising company gives high salary to employees and considers them a treasure.

On the other hand, recognizing that a more applicable statement must incorporate aspects of the issue as sufficient as possible, I have to point out my contention with the speaker who, while overstating the importance of the team members’ decision-making, dose not take into account some factors of paramount importance. For instance, as in army, subordinates should not and can not make decisions, partly because they do not know clearly the details behind an issue, and partly because such decisions are often life or death ones that the decision should be made by the most experienced leader. In some circumstances, a same and consentient morale among team members may be more important than the decision itself to win a battle.Thus, giving one person central authority and responsibility for a project or task is sure an effective way to get work done.



Coincidentally, a general investigation has been conducted by MANAGER, a magazine published in China, discovering that employees working in private company are tent to offer more of their own ideas and take their share of work done more responsively than those working in government segments. Thus, my claim is not a mere appeal but a fact verified by statistics.



In conclusion, the issue whether everyone in a team should make decisions and take duties is a complex one, requiring a case by case analysis. According to me, though in certain circumstances the team member should merely obey their leader, for many reasons it is a good idea to let the team member join the decision-making process and take share of his responsibility.




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沙发
发表于 2006-2-14 20:26:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用入画在2006-2-14 12:19:00的发言:

5. “All groups and organizations should function as teams in which everyone makes decisions and shares responsibilities and duties. Giving one person central authority and responsibility for a project or task is not an effective way to get work done.”



Should everyone in a team makes decisions and shares responsibilities and duties, as the speaker contents? To some extent, I agree with her general view because a democratic circumstance在下面没有得到证明 is indispensable for a team. However, the speaker unnecessarily extends this broad assertion to an immutable extreme while ignores other compelling factors哪些因素也没有在下面说 impacting this issue. On balance, my points of agreement and contention with the speaker involve the fundamental and deep analysis, as discussed below.



On the one hand, it is likely to admit that this statement, although suffers form some obvious drawbacks, 可以进一步说明possesses some merits primarily in some special cases in which the implicit rationale behind it accords with common sense and our everyday experience as human beings, hence, is partially indisputable. For example, in order to win a competitive advantage in a market, it is so important for an advertising company to collect all the brilliant ideas of its employees. Three heads are better than one, said a proverb. It is therefore no doubt that why advertising company gives high salary to employees and considers them a treasure. 这句话应该属于多余的.与你的理由无关.

此外你没有证明implicit rationale behind it accords with common sense and our everyday experience as human beings

On the other hand, recognizing that a more applicable statement must incorporate aspects of the issue as sufficient as possible, I have to point out my contention with the speaker who, while overstating the importance of the team members’ decision-making, dose not take into account some factors of paramount importance.这句话在下面没有被好好地证明.你这里说的因素,下面却介绍一些情况. For instance, as in army, subordinates should not and can not make decisions, partly because they do not know clearly the details behind an issue, and partly because such decisions are often life or death ones that the decision should be made by the most experienced leader. In some circumstances, a same and consentient morale among team members may be more important than the decision itself to win a battle.Thus, giving one person central authority and responsibility for a project or task is sure an effective way to get work done.



Coincidentally, a general investigation has been conducted by MANAGER, a magazine published in China, discovering that employees working in private company are tent to offer more of their own ideas and take their share of work done more responsively than those working in government segments. Thus, my claim is not a mere appeal but a fact verified by statistics. 这一段证明你的什么观点啊?这个调查与你的观点一致吗?



In conclusion, the issue whether everyone in a team should make decisions and take duties is a complex one, requiring a case by case analysis. According to me, though in certain circumstances the team member should merely obey their leader, for many reasons it is a good idea to let the team member join the decision-making process and take share of his responsibility.


总之不错,注意细节,问题不大.





板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2006-2-14 20:55:00 | 只看该作者

1。 说的及是。一堆废话,都是模版上的所谓长句子,已经删去一些了,拿来凑字数。我也不想用,可自己写不出更好的。功力不行。


2。Coincidentally, a general investigation has been conducted by MANAGER, a magazine published in LACE w:st="on">ChinaLACE>, discovering that employees working in private company are tent to offer more of their own ideas and take their share of work done more responsively than those working in government segments. Thus, my claim is not a mere appeal but a fact verified by statistics. 这一段证明你的什么观点啊?这个调查与你的观点一致吗?


是不太贴切。 如果一个调查证明出员工广泛参与决策提高了公司效益,是不是会好些?



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地板
发表于 2006-2-14 21:11:00 | 只看该作者


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