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Ykr · 发表于 2014-11-2 12:43:50

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Ykr · 发表于 2014-11-2 12:44:38

TPO7
The lecturer claims that it is necessary for American wood companies to get eco-certification, contradiction the idea mentioned by the author in the reading passage that three reasons support that it is not necessary for American wood companies to pursue eco-certification

For customer, the lecturer argues that he reading passage is too general in its statement that American consumers refuse advertising completely; also, the lecturer gives an example to prove his idea: Americans do not trust advertising claims for a product only when these claims are made by the company that sells the product, which opposes the author’s idea in the reading passage that American customers are exposed by too much advertisements.

For high price, the lecturer claims that certifies wood is only less than 5% more expensive than uncertified wood; also, the lecturer gives and example to prove his idea: consumers will tend to ignore the slightly price difference and choose the eco-friendly products, which reject the author’s idea in the reading passage that American consumers are likely to choose cheaper wood products without eco-certification.

For American wood company, the lecturer believes that having eco-certification will be good for American wood companies; also, the lecturer gives an example to prove his idea: American wood companies’ products, which have eco-certification, can compete against other products from foreign countries, which against the author’s idea in the reading passage that eco-certification is unnecessary because American customers are likely to be satisfied with their own products, though these products do not have eco-certification. (Words count: 253)

TPO17
The lecturer claims that the arguments used to support this claim are unconvincing, contradiction the idea mentioned by the author in the reading passage that there are three main reasons for the question that why the number of birds declined.

For human population and settlements, the lecturer argues that the growth of human population and settlements will not cause bird death; also, the lecturer gives an example to prove his idea: urban development actually provides better and larger habitats for other types, which opposes the author’s idea in the reading passage that the human population and settlements leads to birds’ reducing.

For agriculture, the lecturer claims that agriculture requirement will increase in the future, but not in the way assumed by the reading passage; also, the lecturer gives an example to prove his idea: because of new agriculture products less and less land is being used for agriculture every year, which rejects the author’s idea in the reading passage that as the agriculture requirement increase, the number of birds will decrease.

For pesticides, the lecturer claims that it’s incorrect to project this history into the future; also, the lecturer gives two examples to prove his idea: first, new and much less toxic pesticides have been developed. Second, there is a growing trend to develop more pest resistant crops, which against the author’s idea in the reading passage those pesticides are bad for birds. (Words count: 233)

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