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发表于 2014-7-23 10:56:45 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
Woven basketscharacterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been foundonly in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea andtherefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently,however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos,an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is verydeep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat,and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Paleanbaskets were not uniquely Palean.
Based on theassumption that there is no evidence that ancient Paleans could own boats theirtransportation across the Brim River and they could only cross the river byboats, the author of the passage concluded that the Palean baskets which werenamed after the site they were found no longer belong to the unique tribes.However, this conclusion obviously lacks cogent evidence and substantialprocesses of demonstration, which leads to a seemingly reasonable which indeedis not. Thus, without further confirmation, the conclusion may not be true.
In the narrativesof the Brim River, the author suggests that the river is deep and wide thatpeople who want to cross the river may need a boat, which is not completelyvalid according to the geological formation of the region. One might question intothe problem that was the terrestrial condition similar to the present one ordid the river exist during same time the Palean people survived and made thebaskets? Clearly no evidence shows the answers to either above questions, whichindicates that it is irrational to say people who reach the other Lithos villagenecessitate a transportation such as a boat instead of simply walking. In thatsense, the existence of the river precludes the validity of the conclusion.
In addition, weare not fully aware of that whether the ancient village naming Lithos is not apart of Palean village once upon a time. If true, the uniqueness of the Paleanbaskets should not be discredited for since Lithos where the baskets were foundother than Palean was in fact Palean then the baskets undoubtedly belong toPalean, which certainly negates the conclusion.
Moreover, peoplein Palean could always use some alternative tools to cross the Brim River ifthe river did exist in the past. Boats might be the most reasonable option, butconsidering people back in ancient times lack the adequate skills to construct aboat, they might turn to animals they domesticate like a buffalo or a horseinstead. Otherwise they possess the skills to build something, they could makea bridge above the river for convenience. However, these suppositions remain tobe confirmed, they still are rational postulations.
To sum up, those evidencesand assumptions exposed to support the  arguments may be true unless some details are verifiedthrough convincing affirmation or the result concluded by the author may benothing but a false ratiocination.

是不是字数太少?第一次没经验请大神们指点迷津
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沙发
发表于 2014-7-23 12:32:39 | 只看该作者
整体还可以。语言运用挺好的,但也没有很多亮点。逻辑方面三个理由都不错
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2014-7-23 14:31:36 | 只看该作者
大约有多少分呢?
地板
发表于 2014-7-23 22:44:07 | 只看该作者
tedlavie 发表于 2014-7-23 14:31
大约有多少分呢?

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