lmt2011 发表于 2013-8-19 21:36 ![]()
就在你楼上的那篇就是哦，我写成18 Aug了，应该是17号的·
不好意思之前一看见18号就没有往下细看。。。
蓝色部分是个人意见及建议
黄色高亮是好词好句
In the passage, the author is worried about the problems that caused by less reading on literature; while in the lecture, the speaker keeps totally different opinions.（反驳句好简洁！）
First of all, the passage contends that literature can provide best intellectual stimulation than any other books and it can also help people to develop their imagination. However, what stated in the lecture challenge the viewpoint. The speaker claims that other types of books, such as science and history, have high quality and can also stimulate readers' imaginations.
（在听力里面反驳的第一点是“a book doesn’t have to be literature to be intellectually stimulating.”意思是并不是只有文学作品才能够让人获益。想象力在这里是作为例子的一个“获益”的小点，和关键词稍微有点偏差）
Further, the passage believes that other books on lists of best sellers usually too superficial to benefit readers. What's more, the time wasting on various forms of entertainment can eventually lower the level of culture. Yet the speaker obviously disagrees with that. The speaker contradicts in the lecture that less time spent on books does not mean a lower level of culture. She points out that culture today is much different from it used to and there are many new feasible forms of expression other than book. For example, good movies and excellent music which can also benefit people in a different way. Therefore, less time on book does not equal to a waste of time.（这一点楼主已经将关键词全部指出来了。不过感觉有些太细？其实我不太确定综合写作的时候细化例子的这种程度合不合适……因为看那些满分范文全部都是点到为止。）
The last point showed on the passage declares that the lack of audience will cause decreasing support on talented writers and all the problems are caused by the readers due to their poor standards of reading. While the speaker refutes that it is the author's fault since the literature today are too difficult to understand and this is the key factor contributing to the reducing investment on the literature. （这一段该有的关键词已经全部写出来了，没什么大问题）
整体印象：
这篇文章的语言非常精准，有很多值得我去学习借鉴的地方啊。
全篇没什么大问题，一旦同学把每一个点都抓住，将会是一篇佳作
还请继续加油~
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下面附上来自无老师的满分范文：
The lecturer raises several arguments to counter the reading passage's strong criticism of the public's declining interest in reading literature.
The lecturer argues that literature is only one among many forms of reading genres from which the public can benefit intellectually. The public also benefits from reading works of science fiction and historical novels, among other reading genres. Therefore, the reading is wrong to claim that the public is suffering great losses by not reading literature.
Furthermore, the lecturer explains that even if it is true that the public is reading fewer books and watching more television and films instead, it does not necessarily mean that culture is in decline. Television and film are simply modern forms of cultural expression that are also intellectually stimulating and directly relevant to contemporary life.
Finally, the lecturer admits a decline in audience and support of literature in today's society, but she attributes it to the authors themselves, who have alienated themselves from the reading public by using overly complex language. The reading, however, blames the lowering standards of the public for the declining interest in reading great works of literature.
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