Issue 51，请大家看看，一起交流，拓宽思路~

greenfish7 · 发表于 2012-9-27 20:10:49

51) Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.

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Young people, who are in an important stage where their values are being minted, are inevitably asked about their long-term goals as well as short-term ones. Should they be imparted with the notion that what they pursue be long-term, realistic goals instead of immediate fame and recognition? In my perspective, although for the young long-term goals are more favorable to their real success in the future, in some circumstances immediate achievements play an important role in terms of its help with confidence gaining and opportunities seizing.

Undoubtedly, it is important for the young to be provident about their future, which is, to a large extent, contingent upon what one does and how industrious one is when he/she is young. Frequently, it is the ones who set up their long-term goals that will persist and succeed eventually, which is resulting from their clear destination, thus freedom from temptation, and effective methodology. This clearness is also a boon to their awareness of developing their interests and capabilities that fit. Therefore, for a young person who wants to succeed in the future, setting long-term, realistic goals should be encouraged in the sense that this will render him/her determination, volition and efficiency.

Nevertheless, pursuing long-term goals does not follow that immediate fame and recognition can be ignored, especially for a young individual who is more likely to abandon the long goal, which seems too remote for him/her. Virtually, immediate fame and recognition, which can be deemed as the cornerstone for future success, sometimes are as important as long-term goals. First, they can render encouragement for the young on their ways pursuing the final goals. They need such prompt as birds need perch during journey. With the lack of short recognition, it is possible that they will oscillate around their abilities and thus whether their long-term goals fit them well, which may lead to their abandon.

Second, it cannot be denied that short fame is conducive to their realistic goals. On one hand, fame will bring them about more opportunities from the society; thereby they could obtain much from discourses with others, or just gain some help from them. These are important in that more often people cannot achieve his/her final goals by virtue of his/her own power. On the other hand, although what fame can render him/her is possibly conceit, it is also imaginable that it will broaden his/her ken, and thus a mind more thoughtful and comprehensible, the properties that one needs to achieve his/her goals.

On balance, considering that a young person may be immature enough to see as far as his/her long-term goals reach, pursuing immediate fame and recognition is not necessarily a bad policy. If a person is rational enough, short-term fame will even be more effective and realistic than long-term and invisible ones.

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-9-27 23:53:57

对短期利益的追逐的不好影响，感觉你刻意回避了，我觉得这是无法回避的，就这个题目而言，instruction中肯定有要求你对可能对你的观点相反的看法的说明或者反驳。
不过，你的语言表达和论述组织很好，继续努力，相信会写出更高水平的文章

greenfish7 · 发表于 2012-9-28 09:22:36

Enlightening!谢谢斑竹！

andyray2014 · 发表于 2012-9-29 21:27:18

你的观点缺乏有力的论据作为支撑。文章通篇都是空洞的阐释，没有具体的例子和深入的分析，希望你能补充些具体的例子使你的观点能够让人信服。

jijiyangyu · 发表于 2012-9-30 05:26:33

也写了一篇，第一次写，写了好久啊，学了不少词。

It is true that in this rapid changing world, with the wide spread of television, network media, people are more convenient to get fame in one night than any era in human being’s history. Undoubtedly, people are always eager to be famous and success, especially for young people, who are looking forward to fame and recognition when coming into the society.

Nevertheless, in my point of view, young people should not seek such a short path for fame. They should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals instead.

First of all, as a saying that life is a long journey, young people, who leave the collage and come into the society, are just at the beginning of their journeys, there are several decades waiting ahead. Therefore, it is important for the young to hold a long-term goal, which serves like a shinning beacon light in the night for a great voyage in a vast ocean. It is such a goal that makes people forge ahead and works as their faith. Great scientist, Albert Einstein, devoted his passion in research and worked as an officer in patent office until there was some outstanding outcome in his new theory instead of pursuing immediate fame in the early stage.

In addition, it is necessary that young people should have realistic goals rather than unpractical ambitions, which means that the goals could be broken down into objects and people could convert these objects into the effective actions. By doing so, people could move forward step by step and will be leaded to their final goals someday. On the other hand, with the progresses in the processes, these long goals will not seem to be too remote to reach for young people and they will not abandon on their halfway.

Although, it cannot be denied that short fame does play like a great party or a sweet candy that a person will enjoy or revel in. It is a joyful moment in a lifetime. However, most people will get loss in such a carnival, especially, those young people, it is difficult for them to keep a placid mind in front of the immediate success and fame. There are so many examples that a young person is ruined by the immediate success. It is also evidenced that the strong will, which helps one to success, is tempered by hardships and difficulties in one’s early years. If it is easy for the young to get fame and recognition, he or she will possibly lose the opportunity and experience, which is a part meaning of the life.

In sum, in spite of the fact there are some short paths for the young people to get fame and recognition, I hold an opinion that one should look for a long-term, realistic goal which will make one move forward in the journey of his or her life.

greenfish7 · 发表于 2012-9-30 08:28:47

嗯，我也有这种感觉，谢谢！

greenfish7 · 发表于 2012-9-30 08:38:13

rapid changing--> rapidly changing
你的语言表达挺好的，但是和我有类似的问题，缺乏论据支持观点，这样读起来会很空洞~有例子才能让人读得下去~

jijiyangyu · 发表于 2012-9-30 23:07:04

rapid changing--> rapidly changing
你的语言表达挺好的，但是和我有类似的问题，缺乏论据支持观点，这样读起来会很空洞~有例子才能让人读得下去~

-- by 会员 greenfish7 (2012/9/30 8:38:13)

但是, 从小就只能用中文举例, 英文的话牵涉太多人名, 故事不好讲啊.

greenfish7 · 发表于 2012-10-1 20:39:06

不需要讲很复杂吧，把道理说明白就行，名字什么的也可以随便编的~

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