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[作文互改] argument Garville vs. Waymarsh 求狠狠拍。。

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发表于 2012-5-19 15:06:14 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
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In thisargument, the arguer put forward a recommendation that Waymarsh should followthe traffic policy of Garville. Because it seems impossible to solve theproblem by building more roads, considering thehigh expense as well as the citizens probable complaints. To bolster his view,the arguer listed the fact that after Garville implemented the policy lastyear, pollution levels in Garville have dropped. He also stated that commutingtimes in the region have fallen considerably. Though it is reasonable at firstglance, there remain several uncompleted evidences provided by the speaker, sohis statement is unconvincing before takingthose specific evidences into mind.
First ofall, the speaker unfairly assumed that therecommendation from the council members will be against by the residentialneighborhoods without any survey. Maybe, it is likely that the neighborhoodswill be disrupted after building more roads, but special methods can be takento minimize the influences, such as using specific materials in building theroad and put forward a policy which forbids carsto whistle during their resting time. In a word,no evidence is provided to draw to the conclusion that the recommendation fromthe council will be reject by the citizens living nearby.
Additionally,there is no casual relationship between the rewarding policy and the droppedpollution levels and the fallen commuting times. Since it seems that morepeople would be willing to drive with the coupons which may cause an even heavierpollution and a more possibility of serious traffic jam. Therefore, without alucid illustration on the questions above, the argument is problematic. Furthermore,the author believed that the commuting times have fallen due to the people fromGarville who may be incredible. And whether the policy implemented in Garvillelast year still goes well this year. Those are all the problems waited to besubstantiate.
Finally,the speaker makes animproper comparison between the city Garville and Waymarsh. It is entirelypossible that Waymarsh is greatly different with Garville in many cases, forinstance, Garville is a large city that already has built sufficient roads,thus people can choose different route to the same destination, while Waymarshis a small city that has only one main road. So the arguer can hardly make therecommendation, that a policy like Garville’s should work equally well inWaymarsh.
To sumup, the evidence claimed by the arguer is not sound enough to convince me tobelieve that Waymarsh should follow the policy of Garville unless the problemsabove can be solved.
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发表于 2012-5-20 11:47:10 | 只看该作者
Because it seems impossible to solve theproblem by building more roads, considering thehigh expense as well as the citizens probable complaints.

这个句子非常突兀。。。。很少看到because作为新句子开头,作者可以分析一下这个句子的主谓宾结构和逻辑结构。
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