Issue 124 求指点！！！！！

2010202461 · 发表于 2012-5-17 16:48:14

Issue 124 题目：
　　All college and university students would benefit from spending at least one semester studying in a foreign country.

　　Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
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The speaker claims that all students of colleges or universities would benefit from exchange semesters in foreign countries. This claim seems right, however, from my perspective, it depends on many factors. For instance, the scale of universities, the majors they are in and the countries they will go strongly impact whether they should spend their semesters.

What college or university you are in really matters in this issue. As we know, universities and colleges can be divided into two groups, large and famous colleges and bad colleges. An exchange from a relatively less famous college to a well-known university in the world is indeed beneficial to the students. This kind of exchange will no doubt broaden students' horizon and learn more about the spirits of the university. But on the contrary, a student in a top university like Harvard and Princeton, who will spend at least one semester in a college with bad fame, would acquire few things he is looking for. Many opponents will argue that this kind of exchange will also learn much more knowledge and more things about a totally different culture. Admitted that this assertion is true, but it may also lead to students' getting used to the bad ethos in the college. Considering those bad effects, claims concerning benefiting from spending years outside the country is definitely tenuous.

Considering another problem about the major one exchange student studies, whether an exchange program should be chosen is difficult. Some subjects like mathematics, chemistry, finance or computer science, which are just difference in the development of those disciplines, do not matter where you will learn. And even more, students majoring in such subjects will benefit from the exchanging program for their knowing more about the best research fruits. However, imagine this, a student who is majoring in Spanish, as exchange to Spain is good, while an exchange to countries whose mother tongue are not Spanish, like Japan, will cause many problems. He will learn even less Spanish in Japan then in America without an exchange. If he doesn't spend the semester in Japan, he can be in touch with more people who speak in Spanish than in Japan, and as a consequence, he can be more successful in Spanish.

Additionally, what country one will go has to be thought about. Two countries with totally different society or ideology, for an extreme example, America and North Korea, will hamper the progress of students' future. Regardless of the countries' collisions with each other, the faith totally in Marxism and faith in any kinds of religions, particularly Christian, differs too much. Granted that a student majoring in mathematics believes in Christian, his exchanging to North Korea will result in both bad influences to himself and North Korea. In this way, this exchange program has to be abandoned.

To sum up, the speaker's claim about benefits from spending at least one semester in foreign countries is unconvincing. Latent problems like majors, university scales and ideology of countries have to be considered comprehensively. Only in this way can we conclude that the exchange might be beneficial to the student.

普渡哥 · 发表于 2012-5-17 19:03:40

For instance, the scale of universities, the majors they are in and the countries they will go strongly impact whether they should spend their semesters.

最后换成：whether it is worthy for them to go 更好。

2010202461 · 发表于 2012-5-17 21:12:03

谢普渡哥~~

guominhuhu · 发表于 2012-5-17 23:17:25

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淡淡飞过 · 发表于 2012-5-18 09:44:35

For instance, the scale of universities, the majors they are in and the countries they will go strongly impact whether they should spend their semesters.

I don't know the exact GRE grammar rules. If it is strict enough, "the majors they are in and the countries they will go" is grammatically wrong. You need to at least say "the major they choose and the countries where they will go"

I hope it make sense, you need conjunctional words.

淡淡飞过 · 发表于 2012-5-18 09:46:23

"What college or university you are in really matters in this issue"

The same grammatical error.

淡淡飞过 · 发表于 2012-5-18 09:50:35

As we know, universities and colleges can be divided into two groups, large and famous colleges and bad colleges

Please do not use the word "bad" to modify college.

What is your definition of "bad" college? Only a large college is good? I don't think it is right to say so.

You might say, high-academic college, low-academic college. But never say a college is bad, it is not persuasive. People will not like this word. Too straightforward.

2010202461 · 发表于 2012-5-18 19:03:55

Thanks~

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