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[argument] argu50没想到薰衣草也这么难写,还不如猴子的呢

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发表于 2012-5-7 20:26:21 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
每天1篇,签个到。。。。
已经没有时间管语言了,将原来的模板背下来也超时,字数还越写越少。。。。。啥时才会有状态啊!!!!

50. An ancient, traditional remedy for insomnia—the scent of lavender flowers—has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored electronically. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. At the beginning of the second week, the volunteers discontinued their sleeping medication. During that week, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. Therefore, the study proves that lavender cures insomnia within a short period of time.



Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.


提纲:1. 缺乏实验对照组control group,没有证据表明不使用lavender-scented pillows,处在相同的实验条件下,是否也会缓解失眠
2. 没有证据表明,实验人员在实验室中psychological and physiological condition和在自己家一样,可能只是因为处于实验室中,心理的变化导致了睡眠情况的变化,或者是前两周的疲劳导致
3. 没有证据表明,三周后睡眠质量已经提高的患者失眠已经被治愈,这只是在同前两周比较,而不是和正常人比较。
字数:402


In the argument above, the author concludes that it is the lavender that cures the patients’ insomnia with a short period of time. It seems at first glance to be an obvious conclusion based on the study of 30 volunteers in the controlled room. However, close scrutiny of the argument, rife with holes of evidence, reveals how groundless the conclusion is.

First and foremost, the author does not provide the evidence to guarantee the people at the same experimental condition wouldn’t have the same reaction as the thirty volunteers. With the absence of the control group, we cannot preclude the effect of the environment. In order to prove the influence of lavender on the volunteers the experiment should set an group just in the environment in which every condition is the same as the experimental one but lacking the lavender.


In addition, no evidence is provided to reveal that it is not the physiological change or the tiredness that cause the third week’s improvement. In a controlled experimental condition, the patients are aware the fact whether they take their usual sleeping medicine and they are tested with the lavender-scented pillows. So it can affect the physiology of the volunteers which intimates themselves they would have insomnia without the sleeping medicine and the lavender would contribute to a good sleep. Moreover, after the first two week’s tiredness the patients would be easier to have a better sleep, which indicates the melioration in the third week may not caused by the lavender.


Finally, even though all the foregoing evidence is offered by the author, the argument is still unconvincing because the promotion of the sleeping quality is compared with the first two week, but not with the normal people. Even if there is improvement, it cannot be proved the insomnia iscured. The results of the experiment only refers the longer and more soundly sleep, which obviously cannot be considered as a indication of being cured.


As it stands, though lavender is plausible contribute to cure insomnia, the argument is based on the insufficient evidence. To corroborate the argument, the author should offer the evidence of the results of another control group and the rule out the effect of physiology or the tiredness in the first two group. Additionally, evidence which comparing the sleeping quality of the third group with the normal people should be given. Without these necessary evidence, the argument is unwarranted.
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沙发
发表于 2012-5-7 23:05:51 | 只看该作者
提纲不错。字数也够了吧?你想写多少?
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2012-5-8 08:22:49 | 只看该作者
提纲不错。字数也够了吧?你想写多少?
-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/5/7 23:05:51)

不是要400-500吗???这个字数才刚上400,我看基本上别人的作文都是450左右
地板
发表于 2012-5-8 10:21:31 | 只看该作者
嗯,字数问题不要想太多,这个没有硬性规定的,自己觉得说清楚了就行。现在你这个水平,可能到了一个瓶颈吧,我觉得
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-5-8 11:17:21 | 只看该作者
嗯,字数问题不要想太多,这个没有硬性规定的,自己觉得说清楚了就行。现在你这个水平,可能到了一个瓶颈吧,我觉得
-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/5/8 10:21:31)

唉,感觉先限时吧,要不然写不完啥都没戏了
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