求拍-新g argument4--两个房地产经纪公司

a273007862 · 发表于 2012-1-29 20:19:21

4.The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.

"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty— Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams

' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty.
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严格卡时间写了397字，然后稍微润色了一下429字，30min真是太紧了~~

In the argument, it is well presented yet far-fetched. It lays a claim that Adams Realty estate firm is better than Fitch Realty's. To bolster this conclusion, the author advocates that the numbers of workers in estate firms can determine the companies good or not, along with the fact that the revenues and averaged hone sales. The writer also points out that Adams Realty selling the house last year faster than Fitch Realty's ten year ago. Nevertheless, from a logically perspective, the argument has a lot of flaws after a close thinking, albeit it seems credible at a cursory glance.

In the first place, the writer maintains that compared to the 25 workers, which most of them are part-time employees in Fitch Realty firm, Adams Realty firm has more workers with high effective workings. It is possible that although Fitch Realty's real estate agents are part-time workers, they are all elites. The speed of selling houses are more than twice times than Adams Realty's agents. If this is the case, the author cannot conclude that the Fitch Realty firm is inferior than Adams Realty's.

In the second place, even if the wrier might be able to provide evidence about the effective working between the two firms as likely as possible, comparing the averages of home sales between the two companies is unwarranted. The price of selling every house by Adams Realty firm can not higher than Fitch Realty's. It is entirely that only one house sold by Adam's has higher price than Fitch's, so the average home sales of Adam's are higher than Fitch's. Thus, the writer’s conclusion can not convincing me.

Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out the last flaw in the argument. The home listing, in different times, could not verify the real situations about which firm is better correctly. It is likely that the different houses have different locations and structures so that it can sell different prices in two firms. It also has another situation that the society has higher demands and supplies to houses. Because of this reason, the house selling in last year is more expensive than ten year’s ago.

To sum up, it is precipitous for the author to jump to the conclusion that the Adams Realty estate firm is superior. In order to draw this recommendation, the writer should take every consideration into account, such as the various of the society's demands, the effective working in two firms and so forth. Therefore, if it had better evaluated the conclusion, I would like to know more information about the way how to conduct the home list.

jz20000cn · 发表于 2012-1-29 22:17:10

一个卖得慢可能卖得价格好，做事慢而细。两家或许做的档次也不一样，比如一家做高档别墅，量少，单价高，出手慢。

lukebrehm · 发表于 2012-1-29 22:20:44

1. The argument, -NOT- In the argument,
2. In the argument, it is well presented yet far-fetched. ---- I know you guys like to use templates a lot but you should try to think of your own sometimes.
3. determine (insert WHETHER) the companies (company is) good or not,
4. along with the fact that (omit THE FACT THAT) the revenues and averaged (average) hone (home) sales.
5. Realty is a lot faster at selling houses than Fitch Realty's was ten year ago. -NOT- Realty selling the house last year faster than Fitch Realty's ten year ago.
6. after close consideration, -NOT- after a close thinking,

In the first place, the writer compares the 25 real estate agents, most of which are part-time employees at Fitch Realty, to the 40 real estate agents that Adams Realty has with highly effective jobs. It is possible that although Fitch Realty's real estate agents are part-time workers, they are all very proficient at their jobs and the speed of selling houses could be more than twice as fast as Adams Realty's agents. If this is the case, the author cannot conclude that the Fitch Realty firm is inferior to Adams Realty's. (compare the differences)

I think that this is enough for you to think about for now

good argument

a273007862 · 发表于 2012-1-29 23:28:47

谢谢这个思路~~哈哈

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-1-30 00:55:21

字数感觉少了点

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