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[作文互改] 3.31考,第一次写issue,issue13求拍,狠狠拍啊,别手下留情,谢谢了

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发表于 2012-1-28 14:46:11 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
331就要考了,前天第一次写issue~~结果憋了好几个小时才写好,昨天网络不好没发上来,麻烦大家多提意见啊,狠狠的拍,拍死不赖你~~
嘿嘿~~个人觉得好难下笔,写几句就没话说了,边写还要边查词典,哎~~废话不说了,上文



issue13





Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.



Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

正文(468 words, about 2-3 hours)

Determining whether something should or should not be done could be weighted in many aspects. Different people have different answers due to their respective point of view. On balance, my view is that universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study since the purpose of education is to let students know more knowledge from different fields.

The first reason why I have such a view is that taking a variety of course will expand students' view and promote the integrity of their personality. As to liberal students, learning science will enhance their ability of logic, while the study of art will help the students of science improve their EQ and humanities. The study of courses outside a student's major field may benefit the study of their own, since various disciplines are related. Take Einstein as an example. As we know, he is a famous physicist. But he got the thought of the unity of the world from the philosophical thoughts of Spinoza and Euclidean geometries. At the same time, he was equally famous with the violinist in the field of violin playing. However, the students who only focus on their own field, especially the students of science, will become idiocies of daily life. Shelton, the leading man of the big bang theory, who is a genius in the field of physics but a child in the social interaction, is a typical example.

Another reason is that only studying a student's own field cannot meet the demands of the developing society. Nowadays, the field of study in the university is more and more detailed. On the other hand, the problems in the society are more and more complicated. Most of them need to be solved by knowledge of many subjects. Taking courses outside the student's field of study provides chance for students to understand more about other subjects. It is benefit for students to solve complicated problems in the future.

Emphasizing the importance of studying the courses outside excessively, however, may lead students neglecting the knowledge of certain fields of study. Therefore, universities should emphasize on the study of a student's major field, while require students to take courses outside the student's field of study. When all is said and done, the study of one's own field will make one go deep into this field, which will strengthen one's capability to engage any realm of employment or research work. Otherwise, students will trap into a situation that they know everything but only a little.

In sum, from what has been discussed above, any thinking person will believe that it is complementary between the depth of the professional knowledge and the extent of the knowledge about all subjects. Universities should focus students to learn courses outside their major field of study.

觉得写得好挫,哎= =
还有啊,想问大家个问题~~AW的instruction到底该怎么处理啊?虽然老师讲了不同instruction的区别,可还是觉得不同instruction写起来就没区别了。。。。。考试的时候影响会很大吗?
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沙发
发表于 2012-1-28 15:33:03 | 只看该作者
Determining whether something should or should not be done could be weighted in many aspects. Different people have different answers due to their respective point of view. On balance, my view is that universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study since the purpose of education is to let students know more knowledge from different fields.

最后最好加一句:for the following reasons.
板凳
发表于 2012-1-28 15:36:37 | 只看该作者
我觉得结构很好,论理也很好。如果真的是第一篇,那真的很厉害。

感觉段落之间的连贯性不强,句子组织显得谨慎不自由,最近可以坚持每天练。
地板
发表于 2012-1-28 15:36:50 | 只看该作者
well done!
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-1-28 16:05:36 | 只看该作者
谢谢普渡哥的建议啦,我是先写了中文的详细提纲,然后基本翻译过来的,自己看起来也感觉很生硬,觉得很差的说,而且第一次写,找了一个比较简单的~开头结尾和中间段落实在不知道该怎么衔接哎,有什么好的建议吗?
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发表于 2012-1-29 00:38:47 | 只看该作者
Take Einstein as an example. As we know, he is a famous physicist. But he got the thought of the unity of the world from the philosophical thoughts of Spinoza and Euclidean geometries.

I really don't think it is necessary to split these up into different sentences...

Great essay! good job
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