第一次计时写AA，希望有NN可以帮忙批改一下，谢谢！！！！！

fishyoyofish · 发表于 2011-11-27 19:02:01

NO.11 The following appeared in the editorial section of a local newspaper.
“In the first four years that Montoya has served as mayor of the city of San Perdito, the population has decreased and the unemployment rate has increased. Two businesses have closed for each new business that has opened. Under Varro, who served as mayor for four years before Montoya, the unemployment rate decreased and the population increased. Clearly, the residents of San Perdito would be best served if they voted Montoya out of office and reelected Varro.”

The recommendation endorsed in the argument is that residents of San Perdito vote current mayor Montoya out of office and re-elect former mayor Varro. Two reasons are offered to support this recommendation. First, in the fist four years that Montoya has served as mayor of the city of San Perdito, two businesses have closed for each new business that has opened. Second, During Montoya’s four years as mayor of San Perdito, the population has decreased and the unemployment rate has increased, whereas during Varro’s term unemployment rate decreased while population increased. The recommendation is questionable for two reasons.

To begin with, the author regards the close of two businesses and open of one new business as Montoya’s poor performance. However, the author fails to conceive that the two businesses which were closed might be under financial burden and can’t continue to run any longer. Under such situation, closing unhealthy business will keep the market more competitive. For example, under the market-oriented economy, if one large company provide customers with high price and bad quality, and experience high cost by wasting environment resources, government should close such company to keep the market healthy. Failing to consider the other sides of the close of two businesses, it is unreasonable to support the author’s recommendation.

Furthermore, the author fails to take the overall economy environment into consideration. The author only compares the unemployment rate and population under Montoya and Varro’s terms, but forgets to contrast the economic condition during the term of each. During Varro’s term, if the economy environment is under prosperity, it is obviously that the population increases and the unemployment rate decreases. Conversely, if Montoya faces the bad environment condition which the unemployment rate increases and population decreases all over the country, it is not fair to complain Montoya does bad performance during his term. Because the recommendation excludes the comparison standard, the recommendation is not convincing.

In conclusion, the author’s recommendation is not well-founded. To strengthen the recommendation, additional evidences such as the economy environment and information about the businesses are required.

第一次计时写AA，希望有NN可以帮忙批改一下，谢谢！！！！！

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