第一次考试求各位前辈们指教，批改一下我的作文。。没啥信心。。

doremon · 发表于 2011-11-8 21:44:47

Do you agree or disagree with fellowing statement:
always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship.use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

What is the most important characteristic you will consider if you in arelationship? Humour? Smart? Or always telling you the truth? People differ in their attitude toward this issue.A humourous friend makes you delight when you hang out.A smart friend helps you when you in a dilemma . But i am fairly convinced that the most characteristic we should take into account is alway telling the truth when we in a relationship.

It is hard to image that we can believe a friend if he or she lies to you . For instance, if you find out you friend do not help you when you in a difficulty ,while actually he or she has capability to help you . will you still anticipate you friend will help you next time when you need help? I think most people's answer is no. As for me,i can not regard as a person who lies to me to a friend . It is conspicuous that honesty is basic factor in every relationship .

Let us from another angle thinking on this issue.image that, If you lie to a person , will you actually regard as this person to you real friend? It is impossible to exchanging a real friendship by lying to a person. In my opinion,the only way we can gain real friendship is always telling the true to our friends.

Certainly, i am not saying that all lies are absolutely wrong all the time, that why we also have white lie . However ,in most relationship lying is insufferable , lying only makes relationship go from bad to worse.and you will pay a heavy price if you are blind to this point.In conclusion, always telling truth is the most important consideration in any relationship.

不知道这么写可以拿积分，希望各位前辈指教

cevf · 发表于 2011-11-12 10:55:31

It is hard to image that we can believe a friend if he or she lies to you .
改成: it is hard to trust someone again after he or she lied to you.

For instance, if you find out you friend do not help you when you in a difficulty ,while actually he or she has capability to help you . will you still anticipate you friend will help you next time when you need help?
改成：For instance, when you find out your friend abandoned you when you were in need, would you still want to believe that he/she might land you a hand if you are in trouble again?

I think most people's answer is no. As for me,i can not regard as a person who lies to me to a friend
改成：I think that the answer would most likely to be negative. As far as I concern, I would not regard a dishonest person as a friend.

在第二段之后，你可以再expand一点点，比如说 One lie is strong enough to damage a relationship. Sometimes the damage can be so serious that nothing you can do to make it up. It is sad to see a friendship to be destroyed by a lie.

第三段跟第二段说的是一样的东西。整个第三段其实一句话就能概括: Let's look at this issue from another angel, would you expect to be trusted again after you told a lie to your friend? 这句话放在第二段，楼主找个地方看看哪合适。

我建议楼主再想多一个论点，因为第三段其实不算一个论点。

最后一段还不错，但是可以变成你的第二个论点，紧接在第二段，说：I understand that some of the lies are from a good will. For example, when a friend ask your opinions about her outfit, you might assure your friend that the outfit is gorgeous even though you do not think so. Because you do not want to hurt her feelings. White lies may not be as harmful as other lies, however, as being a friend, the most important virtue is to be honest. Although telling your friend that her outfit does not suit her might make her uncomfortable, it can help your friend to develop a better fashion sense. Your friend will understand be grateful for you to tell her the truth one day.

然后最后一段简单总结一下，归根到底，honestness is the essential to keep a relationship health, blabla blablabla...

第一次考试求各位前辈们指教，批改一下我的作文。。没啥信心。。

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