今天总结的作文,大家多多批评哦

Argument no.1

The author argues, using facts from the color-film processing industry’s downward trend in cost over 24 years, that Olympic foods will be able to cut costs and thus maximize profits in the future. The author bases his conclusion on the generalization that organizations learn to reduce costs over time and, since Olympic foods has 25 years experience in the food processing industry, its cost should have declined considerably. There are two serious flaws in the argument.

文章初始提出短文中作者的结论,并说明支持作者的论据是什么,说明作者的思路,最后得出作者有两个严重的错误.

1 The author argues, using facts from the color-film~~~~~~~, that ~~~~~~~~and thus~~~~~~~~.

2 The author bases his conclusion on the generalization that ~~~~~, since ~~~~,its cost should~~~~.

3 There are two serious flaws in the argument.

First, the argument uses a faulty analogy between the color-film processing industry and the food processing industry. Analogies drawn between the two fields are highly suspect because there are many serious differences. While the film processing industry faces a relatively simple processing challenge, food produces must contend with contamination, transportation and farm production(much more serious challenges). Thus, it is likely much more difficult to wring efficiency improvements in the food industry.

打出第一个论点,指出作者使用了一个错误的论点-即食品加工业与有色电影加工业两个完全不同的行业间错误的类比.文章指出电影加工业面对的是一个相对简单的挑战,而食品加工业则不同.指出食品加工制造必须满足环保,物流,农业制作的行业.

1 First, the argument uses a faulty analogy between the color-film processing industry and the food processing industry.

2 Thus, it is likely much more difficult to wring efficiency improvements in the food industry.

Second, the author uses a sweeping generalization (不加区别的概括). The author’s prediction of margin improvements relies on the optimistic assumption that Olympic food’s 25 years of experience will automatically result in operational efficiencies. The problem with this is that improvements in processes do not occur automatically over time, they require tremendous effort at continuous improvement and they require potential room for improvement. It is possible Olympic food has limited room for improvement or lacks the managerial will to improve its operations. Thus, there is no guarantee of improved operational efficiency over time.

第二个论点,指出作者使用了一个sweeping generalization, 他认为只要运营经验丰富就可以实现效率提高,不断的努力和提升效率的潜在空间的存在这些因素作者都忽略考虑了,这是其第二个错误.

1 second, the author uses a sweeping generalization.

2 Thus, there is no guarantee of improved operational efficiency over time.

The author’s argument has two seriously flawed assumptions. The author could strengthen his conclusion by providing examples of how the company has learned how to improve its operations over 25 years and implemented those changes.

结尾再次指出文中的两个主要错误,指出作者应该提供关于此公司提高运营效率的战略,并在实际中运用来加强结论.

1 The author’s argument has two seriously flawed assumptions.

2 The author could strengthen his conclusion by providing examples of ~~~and~~~~

我觉得这篇文章语言功底好,同时也指出了短文的主要弱点,并明白无误的解释清楚,那么不足的是字数是否达到ets的要求呢?