俺的第一篇习作，字数好少啊

neoflash · 发表于 2010-5-18 01:25:06

Censorship on television (TV) and radio programs is a common practice in many countries while in many others not. Concerned with the negative social impact from offensivelanguage and behavior, governments and certain religion groups claim that it isnecessary to place control over such content in television and radio programs.I generally share this opinion with them, while insisting that the censorshipshould also be "censored" so that it doesn't hurt the basic humanright of each person.

Proper censorship is necessary to protect our next generation from improper content in social media. According to a survey by a group of social science researchers,offensive behaviors and languages in public social media, such as TV and radio,are often mimicked by young people, and therefore negatively impact theirbehavior in the long term. It is also proven that teenagers may show moreviolence tendency if they are often exposed to offensive media content. A good exampleof this phenomenon is that, after relaxing the censorship of offensive behaviorand language in TV and radios, China saw many more youth crimes than before.

However, the censorship could potentially be abused to hurt a person's basic human right. Inmany countries, governments use such censorship to prevent people fromexpressing their own opinions, which may endanger the governors themselves.Consequently, there is a need for an open and reasonable standard for thiscensorship to work properly and to serve its original purpose.

我还想写来着，但是时间没了。我ft。

neoflash · 发表于 2010-5-18 01:34:43

我觉得是不是我打字慢啊，怎么没写多少字时间就没了。

neoflash · 发表于 2010-5-19 00:54:12

In this argument, after the simple introduction of how this warning system works on the plane, the author concludes that the installation, of a type warning system on the commercial airplanes, can solve the problem of midair plane collision. There are a few key fallacies in the reasoning logic that severely weaken the author's argument.

Firstly, the author doesn't present an analysis on the dominant reason that causes midair plane collision. It is not convincing to present a solution to a problem while the root cause is not addressed at all. If the author can provide statistical data to show that a high percentage of such aircraft accidents are due to the unknown relative position between the airplanes, his argument would be much better substantiated.

Secondly, there is no proven causality between the installation of the warning system and the reduction of the collision. The author assumes that the system can work in the real environment as well as expected, without giving sound evidence. There is one example against this assumption. Although the system may function correctly to warn pilots of the possible collision, there might not be enough time left to adjust the course of the plane to effectively avoid the collision. Therefore, author should provide more evidence to rule out such possibilities.

Thirdly, in presented solution to midair plane collisions, it only covers commercial airliners. However, there is no evidence showing that such collisions only happen between commercial planes; therefore, the author commits a fallacy of gratuitous assumption.

In summary, the argument is not sound and convincing due to a few key issues. It is recommended to include the items discussed above so that the argument could be more persuasive and better substantiated.

neoflash · 发表于 2010-5-19 00:54:42

还是不多，写了280个，还要提高才行。

俺的第一篇习作，字数好少啊

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