[求助]AA一篇...求拍!

The
following appeared in the editorial section of a West Cambria newspaper.

“A recent review of the West Cambria volunteer ambulance service
revealed a longer average response time to accidents than was reported by a
commercial ambulance squad located in East Cambria. In order to provide better
patient care for accident victims and to raise revenue for our town by
collecting service fees for ambulance use, we should disband our volunteer
service and hire a commercial ambulance service.”

The
argument that the goventment of West Camabria should employ commercial ambulance
service in lieu of volunteer ambulance service for better patient care and more
profit neglects several cardinal concerns, which are necessary to amplify and
substantiate the argument itself, but notes the irresponsible evidences and
illations, which are fatually serving negative impacts. And the oversimplified
describtion of  corelation among response
speed, revenue and service turns out to be inadequate and insufficient to
construe, boster and attest the argument, lacking a logical and feasible
reasoning process.

Taking
as the starting point, result of the recent review seems to be hard to convince
others, because the response time is related to diverse causes. For example,
places of accidents may be a significant factor, since if West Cambria suffers
much more traffic jams than East Cambria, it will take longer response time for
its ambulance service to hit the spot. Also distance from accident scene to
ambulance service office counts a lot, since if always receive urgent calls far
away from their location, ambulance service in West Cambria may not be blamed
for longer response time. Therefore location cannot be viewed as sufficient
evidence of such a conclusion.

Besides
the geographical cause, some false analogy is presented in the argument. That
is, shorter reponse time does not necessarily amounts to better patient care. To
further explain, reponse time only to some extent indicates efficiency, but not
effectiveness. Even with longer response time, ambulance may also provide high
quality service by being furnished with more advanced equipment and more
professional staffs. Imagine that if a victim is dying, but there are not staffs
who are experienced enough in the ambulance to provide first aid, as well as
there are not useful medical machines which are important to keep the victim alive,
he/she may unfortunately die on the way towards hospital. So this also weaken
the statement of conclusion.

Moreover,
whether to hire commercial ambulance services cannot act as a dominant of
revenue increase. The reasons are as following. Firstly, commercial ambulance
service needs to be paid. That means monthly or yearly salaries are now adding
to budget and expenditure. Secondly, after hiring the commercial team, people who
choose the service have to accept that they are now must pay for the previously
free service. And the compulsary payment may exert negative influence that if
possible, people will no longer be willing to call for the service again. As it
is known to everyone, no income, no revenue. Consequently such assumption is
not grounded.

At
last, when it comes to patient service, the volunteer one may provide better
service than the commercial one, if equipments are all in better condition and
functioning well, and all staffs are more calm, experienced and conscientious. Then
even the commercial one charges for fees, their lacks and weaknesses may also preclude
them from providing better patient service. Thus emplying commercial ambulance
service may not always lead to the expected result from the author.

30分钟可以写这么多?我去死了,我明天就考了

回楼上的同学，偶用了大约40分钟。。

另继续up，等拍ing

有一些读得不是很懂，什么是 ambulance service in lieu of volunteer 啊？