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我是高二的，不是很会写作文～，找不到感觉啊～总觉得写的没有书面语的感觉，该怎么办啊？

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作文题目是愿意住在学校还是在community 里面找房子住

感激不尽啊啊啊啊～～

Will one leave your home to another city or foreign countries to further the education? Will one feel lonely and helpless when the person enters a new environment? Will one share his/her stories and experiences with others that are not very familiar? Nowadays more and more students prefer living in apartments in the community alone, demanding more freedom and privacy. However, with all respects carefully considered, living in the dormitory in the university should be a wiser choice.

    Just imagine a girl who is completely a freshman at a university in a city that is thousands of miles far from her hometown and she has neither relatives nor friends here. Where will she live? An apartment seems easier to find and she can gain much more free time than she used to do, but how to deal with the emergencies—like where is the nearest hospital? How far is the supermarket? The answers to those daily questions stick out a mile but can only be from her roommates, who stay with her, teach her how to adapt to the new environment, and help the girl everything she has never encountered before. That is why one should live in a dormitory—to get free hands from roommates when the person is really disorientated.

    It is obvious to discover the reason above. However, that is only part of the reality, for living with three to four other schoolmates will enrich the dull school life. I have been studying in a boarding school since Junior High, for instance, with seven other girls. Every night we share the intraday great events and volatile news together—always with laughter and happiness—airing opinions from study problems to political views, totally free and thorough, sometimes even end with a small concert! After the entire day of tedious study, this entertainment lets me relax and begin another day with confidence and fresh mind.

   To understand the truth of that, it is also important to see that safety and convenience also contribute to the staying on the campus. Without as many automobiles as out of school, without strangers staring at people stealthily, living in the university is much safer compared with in the community. On the other hand, dormitory is usually nearer the study buildings and dining halls—where students can take class and have meals more convenient.

    I do not deny that living in an apartment in the community has its own advantages: does what a person wants to and does not need to worry about the privacy intrusion. It also helps to develop the alone living skills, which is necessary and essential for every resident in the society. However, as it stated above, as living in the university enjoys more strong points, it is safe to draw the conclusion that living with schoolmates is more or less better for university students.

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