10.28 GMAT作文复习

基本照抄范文，自己加了一段。觉得写得挺糟糕的。

436个字，打得我手酸，大概10分钟不到打完了。

The following appeared as part of a promotional campaign to sell advertising space in the Daily Gazette to grocery stores in the Marston area.

“Advertising the reduced price of selected grocery items in the Daily Gazette will help you increase your sales. Consider the results of a study conducted last month. Thirty sale items from a store in downtown Marston were advertised in the Gazette for four days. Each time one or more of the 30 items was purchased, clerks asked whether the shopper had read the ad. Two-thirds of the 200 shoppers asked answered in the affirmative. Furthermore, more than half the customers who answered in the affirmative spent over $100 at the store.”

Discuss how well reasoned... etc.

The conclusion endorsed in this argument is that advertising the reduced price of selected items in the Daily Gazette will result in increased sale overall. To support it, the author cites an informal poll conducted by sales clerks when customers purchased advertised items. Each time one or more of the advertised items was sold the clerks asked whether the customer had read the ad. It turned out that two thirds of 200 shoppers questioned said that they had read the ad. In addition, of those who reported reading the ad, more than half spent over $100 in the store. A careful examination will review how groundless this conclusion is.

To begin with, the author's line of reasoning is that the advertisement was the cause of the purchase of the sale items. However, while the poll establishes a correlation between reading the ad and purchasing sale items, and also indicates a correlation, though less significantly, between reading the ad and buying non-sale items, it does not establish a general causal relationship between these events. To establish this relationship, other factors that could bring about this result must be considered and eliminated. For example, if the four days during which the poll was conducted preceded thanksgiving and the advertised items were traditionally associated with this holiday, then the results of the poll would be extremely biased and unreliable.

Moreover, the author assumes that the poll indicates that advertising certain sale will cause a general increase in sales. but the poll does not even address the issue of increased overall sales; it informs us mainly that, of the people who purchased sales items, more had read the ad than not. A much clearer indicator of the ad's effectiveness would be a comparison of overall sales on days the ad ran with overall sales on otherwise similar days when the ad did not run.

Last but least, another problem that seriously weakens the conclusion the logic of this argument is that the survey cited is based on too small a sample to be reliable. Offered in support of the argument, the only evidence is that the 200 shoppers. But what about the answers of other hundreds of customers? Unless it can be shown that the sample is typical of all general groups, the conclusion can be safely drawn.

In sum, this argument is defective mainly because the poll does not support the conclusion that sales in general will increase when reduced price products are advertised in the Daily Gazette. To strengthen the argument, the author has to, at the very least, provide comparisons of overall sales reports as described above.

106. The following appeared as part of a business plan by the Capital Idea Investment firm.

“Currently more and more books are becoming available in electronic form — either free of charge on the Internet or for a very low price per book on CD-ROM.* People who would not pay bookstore prices will now have access to whatever book they want from their home or work computers. Consequently, literary classics are likely to be read more widely than ever before: 72 percent of those responding to a recent online survey said they would read books in electronic form, and 81 percent said they believed that reading classic works was important. Given this newly developing market, we should invest in E-Classics, a new company that sells electronic versions of literary classics.”

*A CD-ROM is a small portable disc capable of storing relatively large amounts of data that can be read by a computer.

The conclusion endorsed in this argument is that people can read more literate classics now due to the easily access to free or very low price electric form books through Internet. A survey is offered in support of this argument and a recommendation to invest in E-classics is raised. At first glance, the author’s argument appears to be somewhat convincing, but further reflection reveals that the conclusion is based on some dubious assumptions and the reasoning is biased due to the inadequacy and partially in the nature of evidence provided to justify the conclusion. A careful examination would review how groundless this conclusion is.

First of all, the author unfairly assumes that the people conduced in the survey represent all other people. The 72% responds from the online survey is not sufficient to demonstrate that the number of people who access to the literary classics online is increasing. Therefore, such evidence would be obviously unrepresentative. In fact, in face of such limited evidence, it is fallacious for the author to draw any conclusion at all.

Moreover, a possible methodology problem in the argument is that it fails to include other factors that outweigh the factor on which the author focuses. For example, the author fails to consider whether such facilities like computers and Internet are easily accessible to most of people which suggestive of this trend. It is true that in developed countries, the infrastructure of Internet communication has become very popular, but in most places of the world, computers are not very popular and not to mention the Internet.

Last but not least, the author unfairly assumes that people will think reading literate classics very important over the next decades. However, a mere recent poll is not persuasive to show that people’s ideas and opinions will remain unchanged. Statistics from such limited anecdotal evidence is not a good indicator for this trend. In addition, it is possible that in the future, people will think read fictions or science books more important than literate classics, then the adoption of the author’s proposal will prove a failure. 

写得不错啊。

只是 the last but not the least 吧，除非LZ就是想说这一点不重要，但是不通啊！

“Responsibility for preserving the natural environment ultimately belongs to each individual person, not to government.”

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

With the environment problem becomes the hottest issue in the world, nearly everyone would agree in principle that certain efforts to preserve the natural environment are in humankind’s best interest. This environmental related issue also leads to conflicting political and economic interests among nations. But the author’s assertion that the responsibility for preserving the natural environment ultimately belongs to each individual person, not to government is flawed. Not only individual person, but also government should work to preserve the natural environment.

First of all, Individuals and small private corporations tend to act on behalf of their own short-term economic or political interest, not on the behalf of the environment or the public at large. For example, installing the solar energy electrical devices at home and in company can save a lot of energy in daily life, but people or companies seldom do so because they have to sacrifice their short-term profits. Only if the government enact the related legislature and enforce the regulatory to impose the necessary standards can we achieve such kind of goals.

What’s more, individuals cannot solve environmental issues because individuals have neither the power nor the resources to address these worldwide problems. For example, some environmental hazards can cross border to the neighboring nations and cause people there to suffer from the costs of health and economic problems. In these situations, only governments can stand out and solve the problems.

Finally, only the authority and the scope of power that a government possesses can ensure the attainment of agreed-upon environmental goals. Because individuals are incapable of assuming this responsibility, governments must do so. In fact, even government may have problem in dealing with such environmental problems because some endangered species and natural resources in one country can be abundant in another. Therefore, a worldwide regulation between governments to set the standards and regulations is compulsory

“Responsibility for preserving the natural environment ultimately belongs to each individual person, not to government.”

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

With the environment problem becomes the hottest issue in the world, nearly everyone would agree in principle that certain efforts to preserve the natural environment are in humankind’s best interest. This environmental related issue also leads to conflicting political and economic interests among nations. But the author’s assertion that the responsibility for preserving the natural environment ultimately belongs to each individual person, not to government is flawed. Not only individual person, but also government should work to preserve the natural environment.

First of all, Individuals and small private corporations tend to act on behalf of their own short-term economic or political interest, not on the behalf of the environment or the public at large. For example, installing the solar energy electrical devices at home and in company can save a lot of energy in daily life, but people or companies seldom do so because they have to sacrifice their short-term profits. Only if the government enact the related legislature and enforce the regulatory to impose the necessary standards can we achieve such kind of goals.

What’s more, individuals cannot solve environmental issues because individuals have neither the power nor the resources to address these worldwide problems. For example, some environmental hazards can cross border to the neighboring nations and cause people there to suffer from the costs of health and economic problems. In these situations, only governments can stand out and solve the problems.

Finally, only the authority and the scope of power that a government possesses can ensure the attainment of agreed-upon environmental goals. Because individuals are incapable of assuming this responsibility, governments must do so. In fact, even government may have problem in dealing with such environmental problems because some endangered species and natural resources in one country can be abundant in another. Therefore, a worldwide regulation between governments to set the standards and regulations is compulsory

你写的已经足够足够长了。结构清楚，句子也很漂亮，绝对是6分的作文。