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144. Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

        Recently, I have been discussing a very interesting issue with my friends, which is preferring to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment. It seems that all my friends are dreaming of living in such a huge old traditional house. However, I would like to choose a fashion, modern apartment instead.

        What comes first in to my mind is that nowadays apartment always located in the center of the city is convenient to live in. As the modern builders consider the transportation problem, they will make the most convenient transportation for their client. Therefore, we can go to anyplace at anytime. For example, in daily life, we can go to work by using the bus stop right near the building block.

        The second attraction for me is the amazing, fashionable, well-designed of the apartment and the environment. Most apartment has its own management office to deal with all the matters of its resident. The public place is clean, tidy and fully decorated. A wonderful cleaning workers do the job wee everyday to keep every floors’ rubbish room empty. Thanks for the contemporary professional architecture considerable thinking, internet network is planted into every room of the apartment. How could people give up this cutiest apartment?

        In contrast, I need to admit that a plenty of space is provided by the old traditional house, so that a beautiful garden can be seen. But not everyone like to share their enjoyment place to the public, as you know the house is located in the ground floor. Everyone passes by can clearly watch you having your delicious sandwiches, which means, your privacy is turning into red light.

        Not to mention, privacy in modern apartment is the most considerable issue. Every one just need to close the door, no one could know what he is doing inside. Even the direction of the window was seriously set towards differently. Therefore, everyone’s privacy is conseved.

        To sum up, whatever the transportation network, the hygiene and the privacy of modern apartment is absolutely better than the old traditional house. That’s why I prefer the modern apartment.