求助GWD上的一道语法题

啊我啊我啊 · 发表于 2017-8-22 22:02:38

Turning away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, in 1909 Selma Lagerlöf was the novelist who became the first woman and was also the first Swedish writer to win the Nobel Prize for Literature.

A Turning away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, in 1909 Selma Lagerlöf was the novelist who became the first woman and was also the first Swedish writer to win
B She turned away from literary realism and wrote romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, and novelist Selma Lagerlöf in 1909 became the first woman as well as the first Swedish writer that won
C Selma Lagerlöf was a novelist who turned away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, and in 1909 she became the first woman in addition to the first Swedish writer winning
D A novelist who turned away from literary realism to write romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, Selma Lagerlöf became in 1909 the first woman and also the first Swedish writer to win
E As a novelist, Selma Lagerlöf turned away from literary realism and wrote romantic stories about the peasant life and landscape of northern Sweden, in 1909 becoming the first woman and also the first Swedish writer that won

答案是D，想求解一下，C除了the first ...to winning的搭配错误，还有其他的错误吗

铂金福豆 · 发表于 2017-8-22 22:48:06

逗号后面的she有些重复吧

啊我啊我啊 · 发表于 2017-8-23 11:09:08

铂金福豆发表于 2017-8-22 22:48
逗号后面的she有些重复吧

and 前面加了逗号，所以我感觉这个she是不重复的

emmahiggins09 · 发表于 2017-8-23 11:46:06

啊我啊我啊发表于 2017-8-23 11:09
and 前面加了逗号，所以我感觉这个she是不重复的

首先楼上说的 C 中的 she 重复的问题是对的 comma and 是平行的标志，如果comma and 之前和之后的句子都是共享同一个主语的话，省略主语使得句子更加concise

其次，C的问题是句子的intended meaning 发生了重心上的改变。楼主看原句中是修饰部分+句子，原句要强调的是句子部分的意思。C中 comma and 前后都用了句子的形式，comma and 是平行的标志，这时候C要表达的意思是两句句子同样的重要的，所以重心发生了转移因为原来modifier 的部分被抬升成了句子，是不对的。

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啊我啊我啊 · 发表于 2017-8-24 17:21:54

emmahiggins09 发表于 2017-8-23 11:46
首先楼上说的 C 中的 she 重复的问题是对的 comma and 是平行的标志，如果comma and 之前和之后的句子都 ...

谢谢！我同意你说的句子重心改变的问题，但是我记得看过对于and 和逗号应该是主谓宾，and主谓宾或主谓宾and谓宾。
排版的问题我发帖的时候还挺好。。。发出来变成了这样，不好意思哈我是新手，现在还可以修改排版么

emmahiggins09 · 发表于 2017-8-24 21:23:04

啊我啊我啊发表于 2017-8-24 17:21
谢谢！我同意你说的句子重心改变的问题，但是我记得看过对于and 和逗号应该是主谓宾，and主谓宾或主 ...

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