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楼主
发表于 2008-10-8 10:58:00 | 只看该作者

AA1 请帮忙看看 谢谢

AA 1

The argument reaches the conclusion that Olympic Foods would be likely to see its costs minimized and profits maximized based upon one example in color film processing and the fact that Olympic foods will soon celebrate its anniversary. Nevertheless, the author of the argument makes several logical fallacies in the formation of his/her conclusion. The applicability of examples in color film processing to the food processing industry , for instance, is questionable because the two industries share nothing in common both in the nature of the industry and the operation processes. Moreover, the argument assumes that since the birthday of the corporation is coming soon, the costs of processing could go down automatically.

The first logical fallacy presented is the assumption that since color film processing industry learned how to cut down its costs, so too can food processing industry. This provision cannot hold any water on the grounds that film processing and food processing are completely two different industries. If not arguing on the industry level, two firms could still differ a lot in its managers, corporate structure or regulations. It could be well the case that the manager in the color processing industry is a very forward-looking and prominent pioneer who is willing to take lead in learning the most up-to-date knowledge, while the counterparts in the Olympic Foods are conservative and reluctant to accept any changes. Consequently, whether the cost reduction technique is accepted and implemented in Olympic Foods is strongly challenged and it makes no sense to simply conclude that the example is universally applicable in all the industries.

This argument also asserts that because of the advent of the twenty-fifth birthday of Olympic Foods, costs minimization and profits maximization can be accomplished automatically.  Clearly, the two phenomena have no relation both in statistics and in real life. A twenty-fifth birthday could only certify that Olympic Foods has had a long history of experience, while costs minimization and profits maximization are primarily related with management control, operating processes and other determinants. Also, the long existence can just have the very negative effect on the operations of a corporation. For example, the WorldCom Corporation, which used to dominate the telecommunication industry worldwide, fell bankruptcy because of the revelation of its accounting scandal after a long history of good performance comparing to other corporations in the same industry.

To sum up, although long history of experience might render some benefit to Olympic Foods, it cannot be taken as granted. It is the management vision and up to the managers and other important factors that ultimately control how well Olympic Foods will do in its costs minimization and profits maximization. Furthermore, the example from color film processing industry is not relevant to the issue at hand, since the two industries share nothing in common. To apply the example to Olympic Foods is nothing more than overimplication and overgeneralization. Therefore, the argument needs to consider far more elements that could pose effects on costs and profits before hastily drawing the conclusion.

沙发
发表于 2008-10-9 18:30:00 | 只看该作者

我上上个月考的G,作文6分,我的作文并不好,去年12月考的六级作文才80多分,也没考过托福,词句方面不敢妄加评论,一些关于结构的意见仅供参考

一般的AA要反驳三点的,而且,逻辑上最好层层相连,比如首先反驳错误的类比,接下来,就算可以类比,50到20也并不一定就讲了很多,即使是降了很多,25年也并不一定很长学到了很多东西啊,还有就是我个人觉得开头和结尾可以稍微简省些,虽然都说G的作文越长越好

 说错了别打我哦,呵呵

板凳
发表于 2008-10-9 19:04:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用huangxiuying在2008-10-9 18:30:00的发言:

我上上个月考的G,作文6分,我的作文并不好,去年12月考的六级作文才80多分,也没考过托福,词句方面不敢妄加评论,一些关于结构的意见仅供参考

一般的AA要反驳三点的,而且,逻辑上最好层层相连,比如首先反驳错误的类比,接下来,就算可以类比,50到20也并不一定就讲了很多,即使是降了很多,25年也并不一定很长学到了很多东西啊,还有就是我个人觉得开头和结尾可以稍微简省些,虽然都说G的作文越长越好

 说错了别打我哦,呵呵

同意你的说法,我本来打算按照模板写,可是发现套上原文,开头,中间和结尾就像流水帐一样的长,而且都是重复来重复去的,大家都用这样的模板也不好,反而得低分。

所以我最后打算弃掉那种冗长的模板,用简单的。刚改好我的模板,就少少的一些字。天哪!考试当天30分钟要自己写那么多!汗!

我作文也不好,LZ的MM还有什么经验传授一下吗?我觉得七宗罪的模板也都是扯来扯去的,看得我头大。

地板
发表于 2008-10-9 19:06:00 | 只看该作者

我下周一就考了,ISSUE还没看,打算今天晚上开始

好多东西还没做完,急!

5#
发表于 2008-10-9 21:52:00 | 只看该作者
LS的JJ,已经给你发了站内信了,有空去看看
6#
 楼主| 发表于 2008-10-11 10:56:00 | 只看该作者

非常感谢。非常珍贵的意见! 谢谢~~!!!!!!!

7#
 楼主| 发表于 2008-10-11 10:57:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用huangxiuying在2008-10-9 18:30:00的发言:

我上上个月考的G,作文6分,我的作文并不好,去年12月考的六级作文才80多分,也没考过托福,词句方面不敢妄加评论,一些关于结构的意见仅供参考

一般的AA要反驳三点的,而且,逻辑上最好层层相连,比如首先反驳错误的类比,接下来,就算可以类比,50到20也并不一定就讲了很多,即使是降了很多,25年也并不一定很长学到了很多东西啊,还有就是我个人觉得开头和结尾可以稍微简省些,虽然都说G的作文越长越好

 说错了别打我哦,呵呵

非常感谢!你的意见很有见地,我觉得非常珍贵!!!! 谢谢谢谢~~~~~~~~~~~ !!!!!!!!!!!

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