qimaozi的作文帖，求不留情面，狠狠批~

qimaozi

喵喵，猫猫要开始写作文了，作文真是烂得要死了，求各位牛牛不要留情面狠狠批啊~

qimaozi

11.14 综合
  The lecturer claims that ethanol can be a good alternative for gasline. This claim is not in agreement with that of the reading passage , which suggests that gasoline cannot replace the ethanol.
  First, the lecturer argues that ethanol does release carbon dioxide into the atmosphere when it is burnt.He also points out that the ethanol which is made up of the plants can contridict carbon dioxide since the plants absorb carbon dioxide as nutrientS. Clearly , the professor's argument disproves its counterpart in the reading that ethanol offers no environment advantage over gasoline.
  Second, the professor believes that the production of large scale of ethanol would not reduce the food resource of animals because the production of ethanol only uses a kind of plants which do not eaten by animals. This point of view is marked contrast to the assertion in the reading passage that many animals would disappear due to their food consumped by the ethanol production.
   Finally , regarding the price of the ethanol , the lecturer contends that the price of ethanol will go down sooner of latter .He proves this claim is indefensible by pointing out that since the tax subsidies of the government ,more people are to buy the ethanol products ,thus the price of the ethonal is to go dowm.
     All in all , on the basis of the evidence prosented, the professor clearly identifies the weakness in the reading passage and forcefully show that the ethanol can be a good replacement of gasoline.

qimaozi

11.14 独立写作
    Coincident with most people's notion is my heartfelt belief that good friend is the most critical contributor on an enjoyable vacation . It is not uncommon to observe most of people enjoy themselves a lot when they spend the vacation with their good friends just in some nearby sites. Thus, my reasons for supporting  good friends are the major contributor of a good vacation are as follows.
      Initially, there is no denying the fact that we go on a vacation because we want to enjoy a good mood . But such good mood cannot been obtained unless we are companied by our good friends . For example, once I was going on a field trip with two of my good friends .On the halfway , it began raining heavily that we cannot go on our trips . I felt so disappoited and planned to go back home ,but one of my friend suggested that we can sit in the nearby pub and enjoy the sceneries through the window. Therefore, on that morning , we chatted happily with each other and enjoy the beautiful sceneries as what she advised .
       Secondly, spending the vacation with good friends can exchange feelings with each other and solve the problems when in need. It is natural we feel curious about the the cultures of an old-fashioned town and feel delighted to hear the unique voice of the nature when we are going on an outdoor vacation . But without someone else to share  the feelings during the vacation , we may feel lonely and can hardly enjoy the vacation fully .What's more , with friends' company , we are able to get help when in trouble. Supposing a person who is lack of a sense of direction accidently get lost in a faraway forest ,it is dangerous for him to stay alone . However , with a friend to direct him the way , things get different. The person can go anywhere freely without worrying about the safty problem.  
     In conclusion , there is no sweeping generation as to which factor contributes more to an enjoyable vacation ,but what we should bear in mind is that good food can be unplatable when we are experiencing a bad mood,  a good location can turn out to be a bad one if the weather changes out of expectation , only the good friend can always be the a good contributor to share the happiness with us and solve the problem for us during the vacation .

bonnenuit

The lecturer claims that ethanol can be a good alternative for gasline. This claim is not in agreement with(太复杂了，直接用disagree） that of the reading passage , which（不能指代前面一整句话，改成suggesting） suggests that gasoline cannot replace the ethanol（颠倒了，是汽油不能被ethanol取代）.
 First, the lecturer argues that ethanol does release carbon dioxide into the atmosphere when it is burnt（不是ethanol燃烧释放co2,而是不会增加大气中co2的含量，这两个概念不一样）.He also points out that the ethanol which is made up of（from) the plants can contridict carbon dioxide since the plants absorb carbon dioxide as nutrientS. Clearly , the professor's argument disproves its counterpart in the reading that ethanol offers no environmental advantage over gasoline.
 Second, the professor believes that the production of large scale of ethanol would not reduce the food resource of animals because the production of ethanol only uses a kind of plants which do not eaten by animals（并不是一种植物，而是用植物某个部分的细胞壁生产，这个部分不会被动物吃掉）. This point of view is marked contrast to the assertion in the reading passage that many animals would disappear due to their food consumped by the ethanol production.
  Finally , regarding the price of the ethanol （这句可以省去）, the lecturer contends that the price of ethanol will go down sooner of latter .He proves this claim is indefensible by pointing out that since the tax subsidies of the government ,more people are to buy the ethanol products ,（中间还少个点，就是more people buy, producer 生产更多，生产更多，价格才下降）thus the price of the ethonal is to go dowm.
    All in all , on the basis of the evidence prosented, the professor clearly identifies the weakness in the reading passage and forcefully show that the ethanol can be a good replacement of gasoline
（综合写作最后一段总结论可以不写，基本上就是写到第三个点就可以完成了）
综合写作是可以完全可以套用模板的 考点就是考你能不能把听力的内容和阅读内容一一对应反驳
建议你需要再加强一下听力细节 找一些简单的模板 即节省写作时间又可以短期提高水平

lmylacoste

Coincident with most people's notion is my heartfelt belief that good friend is the most critical contributor on an enjoyable vacation. It is not uncommon to observe most of people enjoy themselves a lot when they spend the vacation with their good friends just in some nearby sites. Thus, my reasons for supporting good friends are the major contributors of a good vacation are as follows.
Initially, there is no denying the fact that we go on a vacation because we want to enjoy a good mood. But such a good mood cannot been obtained unless we are companied by our good friends. For example, once I was going on a field trip with two of my good friends .On the halfway, it began raining heavily that we cannot go on our trips . I felt so disappointed and planned to go back home, but one of my friends suggested that we canàcould sit in the nearby pub and enjoy the sceneries through the window. Therefore, on that morning, we chatted happily with each other and enjoy the beautiful sceneries as what she advised .
Secondly, spending the vacation with good friends can exchange feelings with each other and solve the problems when in need. It is natural we feel curious about the cultures of an old-fashioned(这是贬义，ancient 来体现有历史的比较好) town and feel（换个次吧，get） delighted to hear the unique voice of the nature when we are going on an outdoor vacation . But without someone else to share the feelings during the vacation, we may feel lonely and can hardly enjoy the vacation fully .What's more, with friends' company , we are able to get help when in trouble. Supposing a person who is lack of （lack v.n. lacks of似乎好点儿，be lack of不是很常用啊） a sense of direction accidently gets lost in a faraway forest,it is dangerous for him to stay alone . However, with a friend to direct him the way ,things get different. The person can go anywhere freely without worrying about the safety problem.
In conclusion, there is no sweeping generation（这是什么意思，字典里也没有啊）as to which factor contributes more to an enjoyable vacation ,but what we should bear in mind is that good food can be unpalatable when we are experiencing a bad mood, a good location can（我觉得will比较合适，可讨论！） turn out to be a bad one if the weather changes out of expectation , only the good friend can always be the a good contributor to share the happiness with us and solve the problem for us during the vacation .（这是三句话，要连词的啊）



总结：

段落5段最佳，可以在编一段增加字数。

整体很好，仅有零星错误。