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158 When famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, many people listen. Do you think we should pay attention to these opinions? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Although a lot people really enjoy following the ideas of music and sports stars, I believe that we should not listen to their opinions at all since many of their expressions mislead listeners and cause a lot of problems. My three reasons go as follows.

The main reason for my view is that many music and sports stars have not received systematic education and thus are unable to understand important matters. It is a common truth that most stars have to devote themselves to training in their youth and spare little time on academic knowledge. As a result, they know very little about the current affair and scientific development. For instance, in my country, some music stars are very interested in talking about the political situations of the East Asia. However, listeners could quickly find that they are too poor in the relevant know-how about the politics in this region. Therefore, people just laugh at what those stars talk about and never take their ideas seriously.

The second reason for my view is that many stars are paid to express their opinions and they intentionally mislead customers. As a lot of businesses would like to sell their products via advertisements, they pay a lot of money to invite super stars to boast for their products. For example, a very famous music star in my country used to appeared in an commercial to promote a weight-loss product. He claimed that he maintained his nice figure by using the product and it was very effective to weight reduction. However, many people feel being tricked after using the product given that the product had very little effects. The customers were very regretted to have followed the opinion of the star.

The third reason for my view is that a lot of rock stars are very radical and bias toward the world and people should definitely not listen to their ideas. Most people find that the behaviors of rock stars are bizarre and the words strange. If they followed the ideas of the rock stars, they would cause big problems. Quite a few rock stars said that they obtained flair and passion after taking drugs. Certainly, we should ignore what they mentioned and follow our own way of style despite their influence.

In summary, base on the three reasons that I presented above, I believe that the ideas and opinions of music and sports stars would probably cause many problems to people who listen. As a result, people should avoid following their ideas and work and live based on their own ways.

guandream

以下是引用Soaring_2004在2004-10-26 12:26:00的发言：
158 When famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, many people listen. Do you think we should pay attention to these opinions? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Although a lot people really enjoy following the ideas of music and sports stars, I believe that we should not listen to their opinions at all since many of their expressions mislead listeners and cause a lot of problems. My three reasons go as follows. (very clear stance)

The main reason for my view is that many music and sports stars have not received systematic education and thus are unable to understand important matters. It is a common truth that most stars have to devote themselves to training in their youth and spare little time on academic knowledge. As a result, they know very little about the current affair and scientific development. For instance, in my country, some music stars are very interested in talking about the political situations of the East Asia. However, listeners could quickly find that they are too poor in the relevant know-how about the politics in this region. Therefore, people just laugh at what those stars talk about and never take their ideas seriously.

The second reason for my view is that many stars are paid to express their opinions and they intentionally mislead customers(audience). As a lot of businesses would like to sell their products via advertisements, they pay a lot of money to invite super stars to boast for their products. For example, XXX, a very famous music star in my country, used to appeared in an commercial to promote a weight-loss product. He claimed that he maintained his nice figure by using the product and it was very effective to weight reduction. However, many people feel being tricked after using the product given that the product had very little effects. The customers were very regretted to have followed the opinion of the star.

The third reason for my view is that a lot of rock stars are very radical and bias toward the world ; thus, and people should definitely not listen to their ideas. Most people find that the behaviors of rock stars are bizarre and the words strange. If they followed the ideas of the rock stars, they would cause big problems. Quite a few rock stars said that they obtained flair and passion after taking drugs. Certainly, we should ignore what they mentioned and follow our own way of style despite their influence.

In summary, base on the three reasons that I presented above, I believe that the ideas and opinions of music and sports stars would probably cause many problems to people who listen. As a result, people should avoid following their ideas and work and live based on their own ways.

it is an excellent essay. there is no doubt that it can score 6.000000000. but, in the whole essay, the author only mentioned musician. if the author explain that there is no difference between musician and sport stars, the essay will be more responding to the topic.

soaring

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