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我作文也差，但提一点建议 There are some people think that parents influence their children much more than other classmate do, but others consider that other classmates easily influence children. However, I would have to say that, if I were faced with this issue, I prefer to former. In the following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint ---第一句There are 去掉会不会好些，some people think that……，and others consider that……，个人觉得这里用but不如用and，转折不够。接着however,感觉很突兀，模板的感觉太强。 No issue is important now than the one refers to Understanding. History witnesses and presents many examples. Understanding can let your parent teach you many skill. Understanding can let your parent teach you how to be a good person. Understanding can let your parent influence your sense of value. believe of not ,Understanding let your parent building a child who are considered perfect. Don’t you think these examples quoted above are more persuasive?
---第一句There are 去掉会不会好些，some people think that……，and others consider that……，个人觉得这里用but不如用and，转折不够。接着however,感觉很突兀，模板的感觉太强。 No issue is important now than the one refers to Understanding. History witnesses and presents many examples. Understanding can let your parent teach you many skill. Understanding can let your parent teach you how to be a good person. Understanding can let your parent influence your sense of value. believe of not ,Understanding let your parent building a child who are considered perfect. Don’t you think these examples quoted above are more persuasive?---第一句要强调understanding的重要性，跟who influence children more, parents or classmates 的联系在哪里没有指出来。而且这个issue是个比较选择的话题，两者对照起来论证比较有说服力一点。下面同
---第一句要强调understanding的重要性，跟who influence children more, parents or classmates 的联系在哪里没有指出来。而且这个issue是个比较选择的话题，两者对照起来论证比较有说服力一点。下面同 Close is another chief and head reason that I have to put here. it is no better illustration that can demonstrate the view that refers to close. it is undoubted that parent is the most close people to you and you are their invaluable treasures. Based on these, you parent can teach you total skill that they have and handed. No one can do this except your parent. if you can see that you can understand it more deeply. Superior as what parent teach you is ,however, it also has own demerits too such as the narrow range of the knowledge given by parent.Nevertheless,the advantage of parent teaching you carry more weight than the disadvantage of that, so the most striking conclusion is obvious. To sum up, given the reason discussed above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive, we can safely get the conclusion that parents can influence their children more than other classmate do. In fact not only do I think parents are effect to their children, but also think parent influence their children accurately | 
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发表于 2008-12-28 17:28:00
