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fish1227

    

TWE 72 GRADES ENCOURAGE STUDENTS TO LEARN~agree
or disagree~

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when my sister,lily, got a high grade in
school,she entirely went into rapture ,then writed down the sentence-"l
decide to sthdy hard from now on"-and put up it in the  most notable place of the room.Do grade have
so great magic power ? According to my sister's reaction,it is undisputable
that high grade never fail to fascinate students.However, do good scores
encourage them to study?After watching lily a few days,I found that what she actually
do is not studing hard,but copy her classmate’s home work to gain wonderful
grade.Thus,from my personnal angle alone,sracely can satisfactory grades
generate a positive impact on their learnings.

Statistics have showed the number of
students who practicing fraud in the test is increasing rapidly
.It is ecactly an unexpected consequence that
the desire of high grades bring. Tempting as grades are, it is not a good
choice to cheat teachers and parents,espercialy themselves,when takeing exam.For
sake of high grades,thousands of students rack their brains to do anything.Supposing
they succeed to get what they desired,they will engage in doing it again,for
they virtully kown if they fail to do,what they need might go away.Therefor,as
we can see,good scores ultimately enhance the behavier of cheating,but not to
promote them to work hard.

    

 In addition,grade is extenal incentive
while internal motivation is paramount.Only owning external incentive,one have
no possiblity to succeed without internal motivation,such as capability and
confidence,since exterior might impel interior,but is depend on interior.For
instance,a young man purchase a new car,but he did not learn how to dirve or he
have a horror of  dirving.In this
case,the car did not mean to encoursaged him to dirve ,just as grade to study.

    

 However,occasionally,students work harder
than ever before with the inspirit of high scores.Such a sort of students
invaribly put study in first consideration instead of scores,needless to
mention fraud in test.Consequently,I am fully convinced that high grades do not
inevitably impel students to work hard and I never remain suspicious of the
possibility.

fish1227

今天看了看，好多拼写错误啊！改正一下~

when my sister,lily, got a high grade in
school,she entirely went into rapture ,then writed down the sentence-"l
decide to study hard from now on"-and put up it in the  most notable place of her room.Do grades have
so great magic power ? According to my sister's reaction,it is undisputable
that high grades never fail to fascinate students.However, do good scores
encourage them to study harder?After watching lily a few days,I found that what she actually
do is not studing hard,but to copy her classmate’s home work to gain wonderful
grades.Thus,from my personnal angle alone,sracely can satisfactory marks
generate a positive impact on their learnings.

Statistics have showed that  the number of
students who practice fraud in the test is increasing rapidly
.It is actully an unexpected consequence that
the desire of high grades bring. Tempting as grades are, it is not a good
choice to cheat teachers and parents,especially themselves,when taking a exam.Thousands of students, for
sake of high grades,rack  their brains to do anything.Supposing
they succeed in obtaining what they really desire,they will engage in doing it again,for
they virtully kown if they fail to ,what they need might go away.Therefor,as
we all can see,good scores ultimately enhance the behavier of cheating,but not to
promote them to concentrate on their curriculum.

    

 In addition,grade is extenal incentive
for learnners  while internal motivation is paramount.Only owning external incentive,one have
no possiblity to succeed without internal motivation,such as capability and
confidence,since exterior might  impel interior,but is depended on interior.For
instance,a young man purchased a new car,but he did not learn how to dirve or he
have a horror of  dirving.In this
case,the car did not mean to encourage him to dirve ,,just as grade to study.

    

 However,occasionally,some students work harder
than ever before with the inspirit of high scores.Such a sort of students
invaribly put  the study in first consideration instead of scores,needless to
mention fraud in test.So,this case will not happen  without a certain condition.Consequently,I am fully convinced that high grades do not
inevitably impel students to work hard and I never remain suspicious of the
possibility.

fish1227

怎么都没有人批啊，伤心啊。。

gongwng

你伤心个啥  他自己也忙