第一篇作文，4日后就考试了：）

小师妹

题目是LONGMAN 模考软件的MINI TEST6的作文：some events seems to be bad turn out to be good, describe your experience.

 

 

Things should not be judged only by what it seems to be. A man with a decent suit turned out to be a drug dealer in the movie; A man with a ugly face turned out to be the most kind donater. So do some events that seems to be going badly turns out well after all. My own eperience will demonstrate that.

 

 

Before I was nine, I was the only princess in my family enjoying my parents' care and love. Untill the summer of 1995, my younger sister came to the world and took away the love and happyness that I used to monopolized. Every older sister could understand my feelings: sad, jealous, and lost. Compared to my little lovely sister, I seemed to be nothing in my parents' heart. What is more, parents ignored my complains and devoted all their concern to their little princess. This mixed feelings domained my teenage years, and contributed to some bad things I experienced. Once, little sister came to me and she wanted to play with me, but I was watching TV and did not want to be disturbed. She pleased and pleased and made me freak out. I locked her in her room untill I finished watching the TV. Though my sister did not remember that thing now, I felt guilty when I remember that.

 

 

Though unhappy, I learned to get used to the situation, and try to share everything with my sister. My parents help a lot to make the family harmony. Whenever father came back home from other city on a bussiness trip, he gave thr same gifts to his two daughters. Enjoying the love with my sister seems not so terrible as I imagined,what is more, helped me to be a nice person as my friends evaluate me. I am glad to give the best of everything we share to others, and be satisfied with the happy smile on their faces; I am pleased to help others when they are in trouble, and sharing misery is also a favor.

 

 

Thanks to my parents who gave me a sister. At first, that seems to be horrible and it turned out to be helpful for my growing. I learnt to be a considerate person and my life benefited a lot from that.

 

去年5月CBT作文只有3分所以今年重考，祈祷能上25，第一次发作文上来，请大家帮忙看下，谢谢！

[此贴子已经被作者于2007-3-18 20:55:04编辑过]

kevin3ma

一个故事说一个问题

反正我是不敢这样. 我一般回给三个理由

1,the same with yours

2,the seeming-hard time  can make us anticipate and prevent the next hard time, even the harder one

3,the seeming-hard time allows us to recognize and solve problems mores more quickly.

再有你的一个拼写错误:happyness--->happiness  这是  幸福来敲门  中 男主人公老想给小学窗户上纠正的那个单词

小师妹

谢谢提醒！！！

独立作文由着性子写，不应该，考场上这么写就太玄了。

再次感谢kevin3ma

lxzjojo

MM的开头挺不错的，文字表达也还不错。

这个故事可以稍稍归纳一点作为一个观点的例子，再多举一个到两个观点吧，这样感觉有点单薄，不够strong~

另外注意时态的前后一致和一些minor的拼写错误。

加油了~