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wanzuo333

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A good friend may have lots of characteristics, intelligent, a sense of humor, and reliable etc. However, in my dictionary, the definition of “good friend” is a person who is reliable that gives me a hand without one second consideration when I need him.

     In high school, I have 3 friends. One of them, Joe, is really intelligent. Since doing really well in every course, he is always the top 1 student in our grade. Moreover Joe has abundant knowledge in many fields, thus almost few question came up by other students can bother him. Also, he pretends to be an adult though talking and thinking as an adult’s perspective. Usually Joe leads me to think about lots of complicated, meaningful issues. When I said “I don’t know”, he wouldn’t leave such a nice chance to laugh at my ignorance. Sometime I indeed appreciate his intelligence, but in contrast I dislike his over-pride.

    Well, another friend of mine is Mike, a maverick boy with a great sense of humor. His most sparking characteristic is an ability to tell jokes or do some funny faces making you roar with laughter. Actually, it’s always fabulous to hearing his special voice when I feel nothing to do. Nevertheless, Mike not only enjoys bringing me happiness but also bringing to everyone else even a stranger. Consequently, it’s extremely hard to have a practical conversation with him because Mike only cares about his audiences. A moment if I were upset or not going to be one of them, he would walk away from you, and just go find another person willing listen his jokes immediately.

    The best friend is the one standing by me anytime while me being helpless. Jim plays such an important role in my life. Though he is not intelligent and humorous, but I think most necessary characteristic of human beings belongs to this normal guy----trustiness. No matter what a hardship I face, Jim is the bunch of light illuminate the way out. With no doubt, we trust each other; we help each other, furthermore, we have a deep understanding of each other. In conclusion, Jim demonstrates perfectly how a best friend should be.

ytppx

以下是引用wanzuo333在2007-2-8 0:06:00的发言：

大概按照李笑来对于此题目出的范文的结构写的.时间翻倍的超..请给予我打击...我是这里的ROOKIE 请多关照!

A good friend may have lots of characteristics, intelligent, a sense of humor, and reliable etc. However, in my dictionary, the definition of “good friend” is a person who is reliable that gives me a hand without one second consideration (hesitation??) when I need him.

     In high school, I have 3 friends. One of them, Joe, is really intelligent. Since doing really well in every course, he is always the top 1 student in our grade. Moreover Joe has abundant knowledge in many fields, thus almost few question came up by other students can bother him. Also, he pretends to be an adult though talking and thinking as an adult’s perspective. Usually Joe leads me to think about lots of complicated, meaningful issues. When I said “I don’t know”, he wouldn’t leave such a nice chance to laugh at my ignorance. Sometime I indeed appreciate his intelligence, but in contrast I dislike his over-pride.

    Well, another friend of mine is Mike, a maverick boy with a great sense of humor. His most sparking characteristic is an ability to tell jokes or do some funny faces making you roar with laughter. Actually, it’s always fabulous to hearing his special voice when I feel nothing to do. Nevertheless, Mike not only enjoys bringing me happiness but also bringing to everyone else even a stranger. Consequently, it’s extremely hard to have a practical conversation with him because Mike only cares about his audiences. A moment if （once???) I were upset or not going to be one of them, he would walk away from you, and just go find another person willing listen his jokes immediately.

    The best friend is the one standing by me anytime while me being helpless. Jim plays such an important role in my life. Though he is not intelligent and humorous, but I think most necessary characteristic of human beings belongs to this normal guy----trustiness. No matter what a hardship I face, Jim is the bunch of light illuminate the way out. With no doubt, we trust each other; we help each other, furthermore, we have a deep understanding of each other. In conclusion, Jim demonstrates perfectly how a best friend should be.

what's more:

(1)abundant=>可能不适合修饰knowledge，维氏字典查到的。。。

1 a : marked by great plenty (as of resources) *a fair and abundant land* 

   b : amply supplied : ABOUNDING *an area abundant with bird life*

2 : occurring in abundance : AMPLE *abundant rainfall*  synonyms see PLENTIFUL

(2)一半+的笔墨都在形容Joe&Mike是如何不是好朋友的，而真正说到好朋友的时候却又草草结束。不太好吧

maxtan

以下是引用wanzuo333在2007-2-8 0:06:00的发言：

大概按照李笑来对于此题目出的范文的结构写的.时间翻倍的超..请给予我打击...我是这里的ROOKIE 请多关照!

A good friend may have lots of characteristics, intelligent, a sense of humor, and reliable etc. However, in my dictionary, the definition of “good friend” is a person who is reliable that gives me a hand without one second consideration when I need him.

     In high school, I have 3 friends. One of them, Joe, is really intelligent. Sometime I indeed appreciate his intelligence, but in contrast I dislike his over-pride.Since doing really well in every course, he is always the top 1 student in our grade. Moreover Joe has abundant knowledge in many fields, thus almost few question came up by other students can bother him. Also, he pretends to be an adult
     though( through ?) talking and thinking as an adult’s perspective. Usually Joe leads me to think about lots of complicated, meaningful issues. When I said “I don’t know”, he wouldn’t leave such a nice chance to laugh at my ignorance.

    Well, another friend of mine is Mike, a maverick boy with a great sense of humor. His most sparking characteristic is an ability to tell jokes or do some funny faces making you roar with laughter. Actually, it’s always fabulous to hearing his special voice when I feel nothing to do. Nevertheless, Mike  enjoys not only bringing me happiness but also bringing to everyone else even a stranger. Consequently, it’s extremely hard to have a practical conversation with him because Mike only cares about his audiences. A moment if I were upset or not going to be one of them(比较难理解), he would walk away from you, and just go find another person willing listen his jokes immediately.

    The best friend is the one standing by me anytime while me being ( I was ) helpless. Jim plays such an important role in my life. Though he is not intelligent and humorous, but I think most necessary characteristic of human beings belongs to this normal guy----trustiness. No matter what a hardship I face, Jim is the bunch of light illuminate the way out. With no doubt, we trust each other; we help each other, furthermore, we have a deep understanding of each other. In conclusion, Jim demonstrates perfectly how a best friend should be.

appcher

iBT作文都是A or Dis 所以既然大家是应试，我建议还是多练练考试的题目

wanzuo333

谢谢大家的建议~~

TO二楼:我的确发现这个问题了~当时想好了一个例子忘给写上了..谢谢啊!