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帮我看看我的第一篇综合作文,22号就要考le

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楼主
发表于 2006-10-19 22:34:00 | 只看该作者

帮我看看我的第一篇综合作文,22号就要考le

不知道这么写的思路对不对??多谢指教!!!

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OG上的那一篇练习题,讲altruism的:

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The speaker holds the view that newly findings about some behaviors of an animal run against the previous

finding,described in the article, which was explained as the evidence of animal's altruism.

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To begin with, the speaker said that the eating habit of Meerkat dose not show altruism as the article described.

 The speaker listed the evidences that refuted the article.  The speaker said that the gard Meerkat eats before

the others, which runs against the claim in the article that the gar Meerkat eats nothing while the others are

eating.  Also the speaker said that the gard Meekat runs away first through the burrow after sending out the

alarm when he finds a predator, which disagreed with the article saying that the gard Meerkat is the last one to

leave.  Furthermore the speaker mentioned that it is safer for the gard Meerkat who sending out the warning

signal because the group of Meerkat will divert the predator's attention, and this refute article's viewpoint

that the animals in groups are safer to conbat with a predator.  By those evidence, the speaker is trying to

demonstrate that the animal is not acting artruistically.

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Secondly, the speaker talked about the altruism of human beings,and also mentioned the example of organ donation.

 The speaker raised challanging questions about the altruism of man who donated his kidney and implied that the

non material rewards such as appreciation and society recognition the donator receives, and the enhancement of

self-worth, are also valuable to the person.  This view disagreed with the article which thinks such acts are

altrustic in that they benefit another people but provide little reward to the person who is acting the behavior.


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沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2006-10-20 21:37:00 | 只看该作者
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板凳
发表于 2006-10-20 22:00:00 | 只看该作者
MM,你写的很不错了,清楚列出2点内容来, 可我还不知道该怎么比较逻辑的表达出听力笔记呢?
地板
 楼主| 发表于 2006-10-21 10:42:00 | 只看该作者
谢谢maomm的鼓励!!
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