nebelstreifs iBT preparation diary (Sep.)

enovy

我想来说说这两篇作文。

5分的那片，说实在的并不是很有说服力，并不能让别人看完之后也认同的作者的观点。但是就回答作文提出的"Do you agree or disagree...?"这个问题而言，这篇文章已经回答得非常充分了。
我觉得高分的关键在于:
一.作者有很好的逻辑关系: there are certain considerations in relationship -> different people has different answer -> my answer "honesty" -> ... because, 1) if i hear the truth from someone else, I'll be pissed off; 2) if my friend dare not tell the truth because he doesn't believe i can handle, i will not trust him (in other words, to stop the relationship) -> Thus, comparing to other values, honesty is the 1st priority.
二.虽然与我们习惯的总分总的方式相比,作者采用了一的推理,在视觉上虽然不如总分总清晰,但是如果心读文章的话会觉得很顺,很推心置腹.所以得了高分

3分的那片,我觉得并不是因为老外看腻了总分总的套路(其实他们自己也经常用).而是文章内容过于简单,不够sophisticated.这篇文章的结构是: in some cases, to tell white lie is wiser than tell the truth -> 1. supporting evidence1; 2. supporting evidence2; 3 supporting evidence3 -> conclusion 虽说结构很正确但是看完以后仍然觉得作者没动什么脑筋,不够世故,而是在凑字数,感觉在愚弄读者.我想如果用以下的结构写,把3个supporting evidence改成3个论证的方向,就会显得intelligent很多
In some cases, to tell white lie is wiser than tell the truth
1. in special cases, telling white lie is totally moral ( you can do it, you'll be forgived ) + case
2. white lie is sometimes the best solution ( you should do it ) + case
3. Sometimes, things will go very bad if you don't tell a lie ( there's no other way but do it ) +case
Conclusion
这样的论述看上去就比较强烈有力,也有逻辑的递进,相信能比原文看上去smart很多.其实还有别的方法来提出三个论点,可以从内部/外部,历史/现今/未来,what/why/how等等方面去讲,总之如果看上去很充实,很exhaustive就对了

其实我也没写过TWE,只是从工作中借鉴一点技巧,不知是否恰当,望CDer们指正

torontonight

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santi

楼主复习得如何了，还有一个多月喽。

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