Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A teacher who is serious and strict is more effective than a teacher who is humorous and easy-going.
Acted as an important role in teaching, teachers are essential to students who learn the
varieties(小猫要表达的意思是什么？是不是应该用形容词啊？） knowledge. “Good students come from famous teachers.” How often we hear words like this. Different kinds of teachers, who are serious, mild, humorous or etc, directly affect their
teachings’ quality（还是改成quality of teaching吧）. About the above statement, I could not agree that serious teachers are more effective than humorous and easy-going ones. It can be greatly strengthened by the following discussions.（最后两句的逻辑不是很清晰，先说不同意……然后说。。。会被加强。不知道你加强的到底是哪一个观点。建议最好把最后一句的表达改一下）
In usual, students always are afraid of the serious teachers who are strict without smile, whereas they prefer to the humorous and easy-going teacher. A serious teacher perhaps gives the students a huge stress which is harmful for their studying and asking in the class. For a long time, to escape the reality, students would not like to go to schools（是不是没必要用复数？） which have a stressful teaching. On the contrary, a humorous and easy-going teacher will take
relax（relaxing） and interesting lessons, making students feel unstressed to think and ask. In this situation,
students, like playing with their teacher, learn and understand the content of teaching more effective
.（我的感觉是：like前面加了逗号，我以为是插入语，但看了后面发现不是的，like和learn是并列的，是谓语，那就不要加逗号了吧。还有，建议在learn后面加点东西，然后再and understand。。。这样就很清晰的是like，learn和understand并列了） Apparently, the humorous teachers could be able to make students
learn more relax and interested（小猫我没理解这句的意思……）.
Furthermore, students have a positive attitude to learn in the class of a humorous and easy-going teacher, while they use a negative emotion to study the strict teacher’s lesson. “Positive and optimistic attitude can solve anything.” The positive attitude could firstly, encourage students to learn more knowledge, and secondly, make them interested in study. Students would be pleasure（pleasant） to learn lessons, become more active to think and ask, and keep a good relationship with their teachers. Thus, students have a positive and active attitude to learn more effective（effectively）.
Based on the above –mentioned arguments, humorous and easy-going teachers can make students more
relax and active in the class. However, as a teacher, one still need to notice
himself or herself（his or her） duty, which build a good influence on students and manage them in proper ways. A teacher not only has a good attitude to students, but also has the responsibilities for students or teaching.
In conclusion, it is simplistic to suppose
thatserious teachers are not more effective than humorous and easy-going ones. Because the latter can make students relax in class, keep a good relationship with them, and improve them activity.
小猫第一次写，挺好的，大体上很流畅，小细节要注意，比如修饰动词的要用副词而不是形容词，名词和形容词不要混为一谈，句子结构要完整。
主体段的前两段很好，但第三段我感觉就像是总结段了，没有让步转折或者补充的感觉。
插上一些例子的话会使文章内容更充实也更有说服力，比如说曾经有个什么什么老师，大家都很喜欢她，大家成绩也非常好，原因就是她很幽默很具有亲和力。但是某某老师和她完全不同，很严厉，大家都怕他，所以大家积极性不高，成绩也并不好。
-- by 会员 TS28 (2012/8/14 8:37:20)
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例子是个问题，会补上，还有论证的有力性，也会注意的~ 小细节，恩！
发表于 2012-8-14 15:16:04
