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Indubitably, independence for everyone is only a problem of time. The theory that young adults should be independent as soon as they can, which I take to doubt, is now widely acclaimed. As a matter of fact, from my perspective, it is the other way around.

independent life never fails to exert a peculiar fascination on most young adults currently for freedom, undoubtedly, is what they have been chasing for years. However, they are too juvenile to cope with the sophisticated society-virtually, young adults could rarely bring everything rightly into a conclusion and of course, as soon as they leave their parents for the seemingly pleasant independent life, plummet into a state of utter chaos. For them, living independently means tackling the annoying stuff in many ways and facing the intense stress triggered by their work or the frustration resulted from the failure in job seeking.

Consequently, living independently is not a universally wise choice for a multitude of young adults, or, to be more accurate, it is only suitable for merely a fraction of them who are equipped with the eminent qualities, say, self-controlling, being rational, good at premeditating, and etc. For most of the young adults, being more patient and spending some time with their parents would certainly do more good than harm for the simple reason that they can acquire adequate knowledge of life through learning from the older ones. However, this must be modest-long enough to get ample knowledge and skills, but short when compared with their whole life. I believe unshakably that they may probably live a more enjoyable life in the coming days.

After three paragraphs’ tough writing, I believe that those supports will not fail to reinforce my viewpoint-to live with parents for a longer time (comparatively short )

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