【写作小分队】daiC for 7.22

Crystaljoy

修改稿：  紫色为添加，蓝色为错误或者疑惑，高亮为精彩！

Should people just follow their heart and pursue their ambitious dreams even the dreams are not realistic? Some people agree that even though they are not realistic enough, we should still chase those dreams. Others hold that people should not lose（waste） their energy on unrealistic dreams and should（but）focus on only realistic goals.（这两种观点表达上可以再富于变化，不然读起来有点拖沓呢~） From my prospective（perspective）, it's difficult to define whether our dreams are realistic or not. We should follow our ambitious dreams even they are not realistic, and try our best to make them possible and achieve them.（turn IMPOSSIBLE to I AM POSSIBLE.   大写了防止判语法错误，感觉ETS应该会明白会喜欢这种表达吧~试试嘿.）

First of all, there's no definite line （dividing line）between realistic dreams and unrealistic ones. A dream that seems to be unrealistic at present may turn out to be possible in the future. As a saying goes, nothing is impossible. Only after we have tried our best to make it come true can we know whether the dream in our mind is possible. As we all know, Thomas Edison has taken hundreds of experiments before he invented the light bulb. There was no concept of light bulb in people's mind at that time, and it seems to be unrealistic and useless to make so many experiments. But after so many useless and unrealistic trials, Edison finally succeeded to achieve his dream of inventing light bulb. Therefore, we should not set up the boundries(boundaries) between realistic and unrealistic dreams before we take actions.

Furthermore, most of time, it's the hardship of achieving dreams that scares us (off) and makes us feel that our dreams are unrealistic. We just see things from negative side, or we are influenced by others' negative view, and then become frustruted(frustrated) by the harpship(hardship). However, if we do not quit but instead stick to our dreams and strive for them boldly ，we will probably accomplish the dreams that we once thought to be unrealistic. Take Jeremy Lin as another example, his dream is winning the champion of NBA, the biggest glory in the world of basketball. He was not supposed to have the possibility of winning the NBA game when he was rejected by two NBA teams before going to the Knicks. His dream of winning championship at that time was absolutely unrealistic in people's eyes. But he never gives up and strives for his ambitious dream, and now he proves himself by leading the Knicks to win seven consecutive games, making his dream achievable again. If he had been fustrated(frustrated) by the previous hardship and adversity, he wouldn't have got chances to show his ability so perfectly and winned(wined) the games. Therefore,（In this reason /for that, hence 跟上段的结论引导词最好不一样） we should not be fustrated(frustrated) by the hardship of pursuing a seemingly unachievable dream, and should  （but）try our best to protect the dream and achieve it. (这个例子真赞啊~！广泛涉猎的Daisy，快教教我们怎么恰当滴举例吧~~~)

Last but not least, if a dream seems to be unrealistic and we really want to achieve it, we should make rational plans and take actions to make its possibility larger （large possibility 感觉很别扭，谷歌学术了一下也没看见这个搭配http://scholar.google.com.hk/scholar?hl=zh-CN&as_sdt=0,5&q=large+possibility）gradually. We can divide our big dream into several small but (and 递进更合适)realistic goals, and then make plans to achieve such small goals step-by-step （不用连接符了吧，直接做状语就可以啦）.

To sum up, as Victor Hugo said, "there is nothing like a dream to create the future." Dreaming big protects us from being stuck by the current hardship and motivates us to create a once unbelievable future. We should always follow our heart and strive for our ambitious dreams.

Conclusion：结构清晰，每个观点都有举例和总结，值得学习！！！句子也挺长的，就是and有时用的有点多了，感觉拖沓了一点。we should也有点多，不如用it's reasonable for us to 显得客观，虽然表一样的意思哈。下一篇再加油！！！嘻嘻嘻~