求德克前辈的板砖！麻烦很拍啊~~

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Holidays honor people or events. If you could create a new holiday, what person or event would it honor and how would you want people to celebrate it? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

 

 

This is an epoch of high technics, fierce competitions and mammoth responsibilities. Every one that involves oneself into such an era endures tremendous pressure under which a myriad of heroes or heroines are forged out. If I was provided with an opportunity to honor one of them, among these transcendent, I would love to choose Bill Gates, the representation of this information age. And I will host a programming competition on his birthday.

 

For the first and most, Bill Gates is a man boasts high intelligence. This gift confers Gates the competence to master or even leader the foremost IT technics, cornerstoning his continuous success in the industry. Gates' career encourages enormous teenagers drill on programming. Perhaps it would suffice to mention my little brother Lee, who just finished his primary school, with a huge enthusiasm on computer. "It is fantastic, isn't it?", one day said Lee, "We can utilize computers to realize almost any algorithm that we want: from automation process, speech recognition to robots, or real-world-simulation, and so forth. And what matters most, the whole industry is still galloping astonishingly." "How can you imagine that one individual could be the catalyst of this all? Bill Gates is definitely a cool guy!" Thus, if we hold a competition on Gates' birthday, numerous teenage engaged in will show their talent on computer, and maybe, a next Bill Gates will be found among them, to compose the next miracle in the industry.

 

In addition, Bill Gates is a man possesses gigantic competence. Not only is this embodied by his success as a technician, but also by his success as a leader of Microsoft. A survey introduced by Chinese
                Academy of Engineering, plunging into the IT industry, no company in China could support itself over 8 years. In sharp contrast, Microsoft has prospered over a decade, and now it proves to be the largest corporation around the world. Thanks to the vigor that Gates devotes into the leadership, Microsoft attains a comprehensive accomplishment that other IT companies cannot even dream about. A competition on Gates' birthday, which allows 3 persons to construct a team, will introduce the concept of leadership to the teenagers, and furthermore, cultivate more experienced leaders for future.

 

Moreover, Bill Gates is a man of charity. Not satisfied with his status of the richest, Gates donates a fair portion of his fortune to the poverty, rather than stinging to the money. If a day is selected to honor Bill Gates, such virtue of responsibility to the whole world and society would inevitably spread widely.

 

As what has been discussed above, considering cultivation of technics, cultivation of competence, cultivation of responsibilities, Bill Gates deserves to be honored, by the means of a competition held on his birthday.

 

 

 

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前辈可以建议几个可以代替industry 和child(teenager)的词吗？多多益善

谢谢谢谢哈~~^_^