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[备考日记] [原创]30天冲刺托福!141楼,分数。

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 楼主| 发表于 2007-7-2 09:28:00 | 显示全部楼层
以下是引用leiby1019在2007-7-1 23:27:00的发言:

我也备考中,现在上班忙,只能挤时间看。一起加油

 
一起加油
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 楼主| 发表于 2007-7-2 21:01:00 | 显示全部楼层

7月2

进入7月了,写一下自己的进度和打算吧

打算10号前解决掉delta和OG

现在delta已经完成了 阅读 到1.7  听力到Q3 都过半了。

小秘密:写作和口语,我参加了一个小组织,可以督促自己了

http://bbs.gter.net/bbs/thread-694644-1-1.html

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 楼主| 发表于 2007-7-3 09:05:00 | 显示全部楼层
以下是引用yaya322在2007-7-2 21:08:00的发言:
哈哈,真可爱,秘密说出来就不是秘密了哦,莫非这就是所谓的“小秘密”?呵呵,

嘿嘿,这个帖子支持的人不多吗,反正也没多少然看到。

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 楼主| 发表于 2007-7-3 09:06:00 | 显示全部楼层
以下是引用lisalisalisa在2007-7-3 0:19:00的发言:

谢谢哈。

我刚考完GRE,现在写文章的思路完全是AW的。

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 楼主| 发表于 2007-7-3 21:43:00 | 显示全部楼层

7月3日

今天完全的堕落了,而且可能还要堕落两天

MM回国,要全程陪同,虽然说好她来督促我学习,估计可能性不大

今天下午和晚上陪同学出去买了东西,真是罪恶

唯一的亮点是写了一篇作文

If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire: an inexperienced worker at a lower salary or an experienced worker at a higher salary? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Facing the aim of both increasing the profit and improving the competitiveness of our company, a dilemma that whether an inexperienced worker at a lower salary or an experienced worker at a higher salary should be hired are often presented to the employer. I believed, comparing both the pros and cons of them, an inexperience worker at lower salary should be preferred.


To begin with, to control cost is the first financial principle to every enterprise. Most work in the company can be finished by the people after simple training in fact, and only rarely few positions need the workers with strong backgrounds and relative experiences. To choose the worker at the lower salary is an immediate means to reduce human resource cost and increase the profit. One apt illustration of this point involves the part-time job plan championed by McDonald’s. This company employs many inexperienced part-time workers and controls their cost effectively, and thus they can support the cheap food all the world.

Further more, experienced workers do not mean that they would have a better performance than inexperienced ones. Accordingly, I concede that experienced workers usually are more family with their job, and thus they can assume their duty professionally more swiftly. Yet, inexperienced workers may finish their work much better after training, either for their passion to new job, or due to their plasticity in new situation. Facts witness and present many examples. GE, Google, Microsoft and other famous companies emphasize their recruitment on campus hiring, just for the purpose of find totally fresh "blood".

In addition, on the notion of "experience" lies my third argument. A successful company should put right person in right position, but the experienced workers are not necessarily the suitable people. Their experience often formed from their job before, which inevitably has a considerable distance with their new duties. Besides, this argument leads inexorably to the company's management system that this brief essay cannot begin to address.

Admittedly, experienced workers are somewhat challenging as well because of both their strong backgrounds and sufficient understandings. However, given the realistic profit consideration of the company, that inexperienced worker, I still prefer.

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 楼主| 发表于 2007-7-3 21:58:00 | 显示全部楼层

yaya看来一直是我的日记忠实支持者

我看了你的作文,确实写的不错,学习中……

还有,我几个同学上个月的成绩都下来了

大家讨论了一下,觉得iBT的关键还是听力

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 楼主| 发表于 2007-7-3 22:05:00 | 显示全部楼层

我也是!!!

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 楼主| 发表于 2007-7-5 00:08:00 | 显示全部楼层

今天堕落了

明天还要去机场接机

准备了mp3,希望能听。

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 楼主| 发表于 2007-7-9 18:54:00 | 显示全部楼层
以下是引用yaya322在2007-7-7 23:57:00的发言:

呵呵,看来是陪MM去了。

我今天也去玩了,跟着GG公司的同事一起去漂流了。

明天一定要好好学习啦!

yaya 堕落了好久

我要回归了!

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 楼主| 发表于 2007-7-9 18:55:00 | 显示全部楼层
以下是引用yumihooo在2007-7-8 9:55:00的发言:
Facing the aim of both increasing(对于profit一般用boost会更形象生动一些) the profit and improving the competitiveness of our company, a dilemma that whether an inexperienced worker at a lower salary or an experienced worker at a higher salary should be hired are(既然前面用的是a dilemma,所以这里要用单数) often presented to the employer. I believed(为什么要用过去时?难道现在不believe了?^_^), comparing both the pros and cons of them, an inexperienced worker at lower salary should be preferred.

To begin with, to control cost is the first financial principle to every enterprise. Most work in the company can be finished by the people after simple training in fact, and only rarely few positions need the workers with strong backgrounds and relative experiences.(不错啊,但是有些词前面不用the) To choose the worker at the lower salary is an immediate means to reduce human resource cost and increase the profit. One apt illustration of this point involves the part-time job plan championed by McDonald’s. This company employs many inexperienced part-time workers and controls their cost effectively, and thus they can support the cheap food all the world.

Further more, experienced workers do not mean that they would have a better performance than inexperienced ones. Accordingly, I concede that experienced workers usually are(are usually) more family(familiar?) with their job, and thus they can assume their duty professionally more swiftly. Yet, inexperienced workers may finish their work much better after training, either for their passion to new job, or due to their plasticity in new situation. Facts witness and present many examples. GE, Google, Microsoft and other famous companies emphasize their recruitment on campus hiring, just for the purpose of find(finding) totally fresh "blood".

In addition, on the notion of "experienced" lies my third argument. A successful company should put right person in right position, but the experienced workers are not necessarily the suitable people. Their experience often formed from their job before(former job), which inevitably has a considerable distance with their new duties. Besides, this argument leads inexorably to the company's management system that this brief essay cannot begin to address.

Admittedly, experienced workers are somewhat challenging as well because of both their strong backgrounds and sufficient understandings. However, given the realistic profit consideration of the company, that inexperienced worker, I still prefer.


Advices:

1。你的写作水平很不错,用词也很好。但是我觉得在真正考试的时候不要用那么多的副词来修饰,2~3个足以起到画龙点睛的作用。当然这是练习,你可以多用一些来熟悉用法:)
2。有些用词还欠准确,但是能看懂。因为楼主水平很高了,作文结构也不错,所以可以考虑一下多注意用词。Attention!不是用大词,而是用准确的词。(比如可以用expense, revenue等等)
3。定冠词the不是随便就可以加的。当你不确定的时候千万别加,因为不加肯定不会错。现在美国有一种趋势就是省略the,因为the有时出现在一句话里太多了会很awkward,你也知道,美国人很懒的,所以能省就省。但我绝对不是提倡所有的都不加the。
4。是否可以考虑结尾段再充实一点?个人感觉有点草草收尾了。

 谢谢!!!!!!!!!!

太感谢了,呵呵~~~~~~~~~~

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