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You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.

字数不多，因为写开头两段的时候总要花很长时间想一个句子该怎么写……

有些表达我又弄不清楚，想个半天才下笔……

谢谢哈 我把拼写错误都改了

You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.

字数不多，因为写开头两段的时候总要花很长时间想一个句子该怎么写……

有些表达我又弄不清楚，想个半天才下笔……

谢谢哈 我把拼写错误都改了

With the increasing of standard of living, people who are affluent poss more extra fund that can be used however they like. A question about how to use that money, to store them in the bank, or to invest them to commerce, has come up as a topic concerned by most people. Given the choice between purchasing a house or a business, I, as a young people, would like to choose the latter one.

To purchase a business means that one invest the fund into a flow process. With properly running a business, more funds can be earned back, which can be used to buy a better house. However, buying a house is somehow a less attractive choice in that it is hard to foresee how much the house will worth several years later.

A more appealing reason for purchasing business is that it provides an opportunity for us to get in touch with the commercial world. Earning more money might be not so meaningful compared to those experiences one can gain from the process of operating that fund, from which one can really understand the business world and get to know how those priciples play roles in contralling the fund operation, as written in books. Isn’t it has a strong appeal to those who are interested in business?

As a matter of fact, investing in business, to a certain extent, is a good way to contact and communicate with people, including those who are very successful in the business area. In the business world, communication is very frequent and crucial. After purchasing a business, one needs to begin this substantial work, through which the talking skills, views of the world and ways of thinking can be influenced and be improved.

Admittedly, it is very comfortable to live in a beautiful house which can provide a sense of safty.  However, to those who holding passion in their life and work, it is really better to purchase a business.

 

 

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