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作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-6-18 17:35
标题: 6.18 独立
6月18日101017 大陆 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise.
Currently, there is a public controversy on how to relax after a busy working day. Those who approve of watching a movie or reading a book argue that it is a convenient and meaningful method to amuse one’s self, but other people in favor of doing physical exercise. Coincident with the opinion of those people is my heartfelt agreement with idea that doing physical exercise is a healthy, communicative and economical way to relax.
First, doing physical exercise does strong our body as well as our mental health. Under the circumstance of a long-time working ,not only our body but also our brain is strain and lack of oxygen. Attending a physical course or just roaming around the playground is the optimum choice to lose one's burden. For example, tormented by heard disease ,my friend persists in jogging after dinner meal. After three years' perseverance, he get rid of the disease and became a healthy man. Thus, to be a healthy man ,one could not live without doing physical exercise.
In addition, communicating or consorting with a new friend plays an essential role when determining whether relax at home or go to gymnasium. There is no denying that exchanging experiences is a fantasying way to relax one's self, even contributing to a giant deal. The story is not rare, it provides a typical instance of my boss bidding a titanic project successfully just during the exercising in the fitting room. What an amazing thing it is to doing physical exercise.
Last but not least, building exercise centers will contribute more Gross National Product to the endemic economy. The more developments we make, the more progress we get. We cannot emphasize the important of economy too much for a developing country.
Considerable though the advantages that doing physical exercise results in are, they cannot compete with benefits of a movie or reading a book brings about, when convenience and knowledge are taken into consideration. But, doing physical exercise has more merits as a healthy, interactive and
economic way of relaxing.
作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-19 20:15
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise.
Currently, there is a public controversy on how to relax after a busy working day. Those who approve of watching a movie or reading a book argue that it is a convenient and meaningful method to amuse one’s self, but other people in favor of doing physical exercise. Coincident with the opinion of those people is my heartfelt agreement with idea that doing physical exercise is a healthy, communicative and economical way to relax.
First, doing physical exercise does strongstrengthen our body as well as our mental health. Under the circumstance of a long-timeterm working ,not only our body but also our brain is strain and lack of oxygen. Attending a physical course or just roaming around the playground is the optimum choice to lose one's burden. For example, tormented by heard disease ,my friend persists in jogging after dinner meal. After three years' perseverance, he get rid of the disease and became a healthy man. Thus, to be a healthy man题目说的视为relax啊 ,one could not live without doing physical exercise.
In addition, communicating or consorting with a new friend plays an essential role when determining whether relax at home or go to gymnasium. There is no denying that exchanging experiences is a fantasyingfanscinating way to relax one's self, even contributing to a giant deal.which even contribute a big part The story is not rare, it provides a typical instance of my boss bidding a titanic project successfully just during the exercising in the fitting room. What an amazing thing it is to doing physical exercise.包子没大读懂这段啊 嘿...
Last but not least, building exercise centers will contribute more Gross National Product to the endemic economy. The more developments we make, the more progress we get. We cannot emphasize the important of economy too much for a developing country.这段可以归到上面某段 如果单独一段 感觉有些跑题
Considerable though the advantages that doing physical exercise results in are, they cannot compete with the benefits of a movie or reading和 movie统一 a book brings about, when convenience and knowledge are taken into consideration. But, doing physical exercise has more merits as a healthy, interactive and economic way of relaxing.
词汇和句型的运用包子很佩服啊 尤其是最后一段
可以在两段例证后加一段让步 显得逻辑更严谨
总结段真的好~~
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-6-19 20:49
谢谢，刚开始写，开头和结尾都是COPY戴云教主的。被你表扬我感到有写作动力了，
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-6-20 17:07
标题: 6.20 独立
6月20日110827 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Patience is usually not a good strategy. We should take action now rather than later.
In the recent years, there is a public controversy on whether people In the recent years, there is a public controversy on whether people should take action as soon as possible. Those who in favor of the phenomenon agree that fast is best, but other people ,on the other hand, argue that snow work yields fine products. Coincident with the opinion of those people is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that patience is usually a good strategy.
To begin with, being patient is a successful way to deal with dilemmas. When someone is in trouble, he or she maybe impatient and the first decision to be taken is more likely not imprudent, which will probably have nothing to do with success. For instance, one of my friends majored in math. But after one year's curriculums, he changed his major and found he was more adept at accounting. It is his patience and perseverance that made he be able to catch with his classmates without one more year. As the saying goes, dripping water wears throng a stone. On no account can we ignore the value of patience brings about.
In addition, there is no denying that to be patient does contribute a lot to our health when we are in hurry. By keeping patient, can we stay a fresh brain instead of turning matter to be worse. The situation is not rare, it is typical of dozens. My roommate fell down while riding on his way to school, only to find that his leg was broken. But he kept in prudent and just laid down, waiting for ambulance instead of take the first aid, which will cause another injury. What an essential thing it is to remain patient.
Some people may argue that we may have not sufficient time to deem and make the right decision under some circumstances. It is no doubt that taking action immediately surely save us affluent time and makes people more capable to treat with calamities efficiently and competitively, even stopping the catastrophe happen.
Considerable though the advantages that taking action abruptly results in are they can not compete with the benefits that being patient by keeping a fresh mind brings about, when craving success and dealing with emergency are taken into consideration.
作者: yangyangyu 时间: 2012-6-21 15:10
6.20
蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误
In the recent years, there is a public controversy on whether people In the recent years, there is a public controversy on whether people should take action as soon as possible. Those who in favor of the phenomenon agree that fast is best, but other people ,on the other hand, argue that snow(slow) work yields fine products( or results?). Coincident with the opinion of those people is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that patience is usually a good strategy.（是模板句吧？不错哦～）
To begin with, being patient is a successful way to deal with dilemmas. When someone is in trouble, he or she maybe(may be) impatient and the first decision to be taken is more likely not imprudent,(这句话怎么感觉意思相反的呢? first decision 不会轻率?) which will probably have nothing to do with success. For instance, one of my friends majored in math. But after one year's curriculums, he changed his major and found he was more adept at accounting(逻辑是不是有点问题？ found he was more adept at accounting and changed his major?). It is his patience and perseverance that made he be able to catch up with his classmates without one more year(within a year?). As the saying goes, dripping water wears throng(through) a stone. On no account can we ignore the value of patience brings about.
In addition, there is no denying that to be patient does contribute a lot to our health when we are in hurry. By keeping patient, can we stay a fresh brain instead of turning matters to be worse. The situation is not rare, it is typical of dozens. My roommate fell down while riding on his way to school, only to find that his leg was broken. But he kept in prudent(形容词?) and just laid down, waiting for ambulance coming instead of take the first aid( making the first aid on his own), which will cause another injury. What an essential thing it is to remain patient.( 这里可以不用从句了,The essential thing is to remain patient)
Some people may argue that we may have not sufficient time to deem and make the right decision under some circumstances. It is no doubt that taking action immediately surely save us affluent time and makes people more capable to treat with calamities efficiently and competitively, even stopping the catastrophe happen.
Considerable though the advantages that taking action abruptly results in are they can not compete with the benefits that being patient by keeping a fresh mind brings about, when craving success and dealing with emergency are taken into consideration.
总结:
qianjun 童鞋 一些词用的不错，思路也还蛮清晰. 用了模板吧~ 还是不错啦~
只是有的句子感觉有点 就着词而来写句子，句子意思不是特别清楚哦
还有有的词的拼写也要注意哇
加油 加油！
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-6-24 17:45
标题: 6.24 独立
6月24日110108 ML Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Food in the past was much healthier than today.
Currently, there is a public controversy on the sanitation of food. Those who criticize the unhealthy food arguing that more additive and no-licence workshop raise the risk to one's health; however, other people in favor of the current food. Contrary to the opinion of many people is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that food today is much more excellent than in the past.
To start with, food contains more nutrition nowadays which support the whole day's nutriments our body needs. With a growing number of researches on health and food, scientists have found more agreeable ingredients and adjust certain element or omit certain one to meet the needs of a special person complying with ken of nutriology. Take the salt for example, numerous people of Asia lacking the element of iodine, so this chemical is added by manufactories to ordinary edible salt to balance the daily need. This case is not rare, it is one of many examples I have heard. Thus, we cannot emphasize the importance of the present food on our health too much.
In addition, there is no denying that it is more convenient to obtain the food present than in the past. Thanks to the increasing number of factories, freeways and transportations, we acquire the food more quickly than before and all these contributions are devoted to us with more healthier and fresher food. It provides a typical instance that fresh food transported by freeways can be enjoyed by the people who live 1000 miles away the farm. It is the modern public accommodations that benefit people by saving time and offering healthy food. On no account can we ignore the value of modernization on current healthy foods.
When human beings enjoy their healthy diets today, isn't it necessary that they give some consideration to the sanitary condition of some food company. Unfortunately, quite a few workshops are exposed by media that several poisonous additives have added in our food with no regards of peoples' health. Some restaurants even do not bleach their dishwares, pursuing higher profits.
Considerable though the disadvantages that current food results in are, they cannot compete with the benefits that it brings about, when convenience and freshness are taken into consideration. Nevertheless, immediate actions should be taken to establish a valid legal system against those who only maximizes the profits, neglecting the health of human beings.
作者: DanielleZ 时间: 2012-6-25 23:28
hi，Dear Qianjun，不好意思，我才把24号的作文交上来，可以修改啦，谢谢啦~http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-727156-3-1.html#last
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-6-26 18:15
标题: 6 26 独立
6月26日100206 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? High school students should take a course on basic economics.
In recently years, there is a public controversy on whether basic economics knowledge should be merged into students' common curriculums. Those who criticize the suggestion argue that students saddled with numerous tasks and homework leads to no time for entertainments. However, some people advocate that basic economics are primary lesson, which is useful throughout our lives. Contrary to the opinion of many people is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that basic economics course should be adopted among students' basic lessons.
To start with, economics is a kind of science, teaching people how to select the optimum choose and how to omit the unnecessary ones. With the knowledge can we understand the economy dilemmas more easily and take some financial investments more rationally. There is no denying that universities are the places where students can obtain diversified knowledge and even only in the colleges can students acquire more time and energy to learn more kens without considering about social matters. It provides a typical instance of my campus life. Thought I major in mathematics, accounting is the second major I took for my leisure time and the basic economic knowledge help me understand the process of the financial crisis in 2008. Thus, we cannot emphasize the importance of the preliminary economics courses on solving our daily issues.
In addition, gaining the ken of economics is also a sense of success. It is conceivable that employees have more chances to be employed by companies, because with widen knowledge always means one can overcome more complicated puzzles. By feeling the successful sense, one will be more willing to devote themselves to conducting their professional cases. For example, my roommate has passed the CPA examination before graduation. So, in the employment fair, it was easily for him to find a good job. The story is not rare, it is typical of dozens. On no account can we ignore the value attaining economics knowledge results in.
When people deem it is essential to be educated with economics courses, isn't it necessary that they give some considerations to the disadvantages taking more lessons brings about? Students should be reduced burden from their overwhelming assignments. Taking the economics courses means more amusing time will be contributed to the redundant task. As the saying goes, all works and no play makes jack a dull boy.
Considerable though the negative aspects that economics education results in are, they cannot compete with the benefits that enjoying these curriculums brings about. Also, rational schedule should be taken by students to crave a multiple life.
作者: tyyhappy 时间: 2012-6-27 09:03
黄色是高亮，红色是修改，蓝色是疑问。
In recently years, there is a public controversy on whether basic economics knowledge should be merged into students' common curriculums. Those who criticize the suggestion argue that students saddled with numerous tasks and homework leads to no time for entertainments. However, some people advocate that basic economics are primary lesson, which is useful throughout our lives. Contrary to the opinion of many people is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that basic economics course should be adopted among students' basic lessons.（读起来很舒服）
To start with, economics is a kind of science, teaching people how to select the optimum choose and how to omit the unnecessary ones. With the knowledge can we（这个地方没有必要倒装） understand the economy dilemmas more easily and take some financial investments more rationally. There is no denying that universities are the places where students can obtain diversified knowledge and even only in the colleges can students acquire more time and energy to learn more kens without considering about social matters. It provides a typical instance of my campus life. （短句子很漂亮，并且长短间杂读起来舒服）Thought I major in mathematics, accounting is the second major I took for my leisure time and the basic economic knowledge help me understand the process of the financial crisis in 2008. Thus, we cannot emphasize the importance of the preliminary economics courses on solving our daily issues.（这句话中丢了一个too much 或者more 吧，这么读就成否定的了。）
In addition, gaining the ken（ken在这里什么意思呢？）of economics is also a sense of success. It is conceivable that employees have more chances to be employed by companies, because with(个人觉得用having 更好一些，直接用介词短语作主语，这个··) widen(wide) knowledge always means one can overcome more complicated puzzles. By feeling the successful sense（the sense of success更好些）, one will be more willing to devote themselves to conducting their professional cases. For example, my roommate has passed the CPA（缩写的专有名词第一次出现要用全称哦） examination before graduation. So, in the employment fair, it was easily（easy） for him to find a good job. The story is not rare, it is typical of dozens.On no account can we ignore the value （of）attaining economics knowledge results in.
（连接和句子读起来很顺畅，很舒服）
When people deem it is essential to be educated with economics courses, isn't it necessary that they give some considerations to the disadvantages （of）taking more lessons brings about? Students should be reduced burden (reduce的用法是 reduce burden on students, 这个被动下应该是burden should be reduced on students )from their overwhelming assignments. Taking the economics courses means more amusing time will be contributed to the redundant task. As the saying goes, all works and no play makes jack a dull boy.
Considerable（这里是要表达“大量的”意思吗？还是想要表达考虑到，那个应该是用”considering”） though(though的位置有点别扭) the negative aspects that economics education results in are（这个are哪里来的··）, they cannot compete with the benefits that enjoying these curriculums brings about(that these curriculums bring out enjoyment 这是个同位语句子是不？). Also, rational schedule should be taken by (high) students to crave a multiple life.
To qianjun06
Happy 是个吹毛求疵的人····qianjun表要介意哈。
在思路上happy和qianjun上探讨一下，qianjun写的时候不要忘了high school students的前提哟。
关于论证，一部分是经济很重要，一部分是学了基础的经济对于就业很重要。我个人觉得第一部分应该完善一下是经济知识对于高中生很重要，第二部分我觉得有些跑了··毕竟题目是对于高中生，qianjun举了一个大学生的例子。
关于用词，qianjun 的词汇和表达都比happy要好，所以happy膜拜下。但是有的时候词性会使用错误。
关于句式，qianjun的文章读起来还挺舒服的，句式结构有变化，长短间杂，并且不会太臃肿。
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-1 14:36
标题: 7.1 独立
7月1日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Rather than help their children do schoolwork, parents should encourage their children do work independently. Do you agree or disagree?
In the recent years, there is a public controversy on whether parents should help their children do schoolwork. Those who criticize this phenomenon argues that assignments should be finished independently; however, some people in favor of this issue. Contrary to the opinion of many people is my heartfelt agreement with idea that helping their children do homework, to some extent, has some merits.
To start with, doing assignments cooperatively instead of independently is an easy way for children to accomplish them. With the help of their parents, dilemmas can be solved effectively and efficiently. Even more time will be saved to entertain or be devoted to other fields of there hobbies. There is no denying that it is helping not just parents doing homework that broaden their children's minds. It provides a typical instance of myself. My father is a mathematics professor. When I have some puzzles in mathematics, I always resort to him. With the helps of his advices, I can obtain new physical laws and finish my work smoothly. We can emphasize the importance of positive aspects helping their children brings about.
In addition, it offers an excellent opportunity for parents to communicate with their children when they are resolving a difficult. Thanks to the situation that parents and children spend their daily time separately, homework time is the sole option for them to share their experience, impart knowledge, as well as exchange ideas. Benefited from the communicating, children will be more active than before, which leads them easier to success. For instance, Abraham Lincoln lived in a single-parent family. Non-communication with his family made him feel solitary, even worse, which lead him to quit school. The story is not rare, it is typical of dozens. Thus, on no account can we ignore the value working together with their child results in.
when people deem it is favorable to help their children do assignments, isn't it necessary that they give some considerations to the negative points it cause? They may be become too dependent on their parents without the ability to think personally, which may cause them to be incompetent with peers in future career.
Considerable though the disadvantages that studying with parents together accounts for are, they cannot compete with the benefits solving issues together with parents brings about, when efficiency and communication are taken into consideration.
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-2 16:09
标题: 7.2 综合
The wtirer makes the point that the science of archaeology is faced with serious problems and limitations in Britain.On the contrary, the lecturer demonstrates a different idea that new guildlines has been issued to protected and make a great progress in archaeology science.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that many valuable artifacts were lost to construction projects, the lecture says that construction sites will be examined firstly by archaeologists to see whether they are interested in them or the size is value or not. After the observation, the plan will be approve of by government before the excavation to see if there are some artifacts to be prevented.
In addition, the author said that financial support from the government for archaeology research was inadequate. However, the professor contradict the idea in the reading by arguing that archaeology research will be supported by companies instead of government. The funds will be paid before these company doing the excavation. Thus, more scientific research will be carried on.
Last but not least, the reading material discussed the issue that it was difficult to have a career in archaelolgy.While the listening material, on the other hand , states that more paied works will be created in all stages of the archaeology process including examing, researching, as well as writing articles. So, the increasing number of jobs will be the highest than ever before.
作者: tyyhappy 时间: 2012-7-2 20:01
红色是修改，蓝色是建议，黄色是高亮。
In the recent years, there is a public controversy on whether parents should help their children do schoolwork. Those who criticize this phenomenon argues(argue) that assignments should be finished independently; however, some people(are) in favor of this issue. Contrary to the opinion of many people(hold by) is my heartfelt agreement with idea that helping their children do homework, to some extent, has some merits.
To start with, doing assignments cooperatively instead of independently is an easy way for children to accomplish them. With the help of their parents, dilemmas can be solved effectively and efficiently. Even more time will be saved to entertain or be devoted to other fields of there(their) hobbies. There is no denying that it is helping not just parents （but not parents’）doing homework that broaden their children's minds. It provides a typical instance of myself. My father is a mathematics professor. When I have some puzzles in mathematics, I always resort to him. With the helps(help) of his advices(With his advice更简洁), I can obtain new physical laws and finish my work smoothly. We can emphasize the importance of positive aspects helping their children brings about.
In addition, it offers an excellent opportunity for parents to communicate with their children when they are resolving a difficult. Thanks to(Due to, thanks to是多亏的意思，这里不符) the situation that parents and children spend their daily time separately, homework time (sometimes,直接说有些过于绝对)is the sole option for them to share their experience, impart knowledge, as well as exchange ideas. Benefited from the communicating, children will be more active than before, which leads them easier to success. For instance, Abraham Lincoln lived in a single-parent family. Non-communication with his family made him feel solitary, even worse, which lead him to quit school. The story is not rare, it is typical of dozens. Thus, on no account can we ignore the value working together with their child results in.
when people deem it is favorable to help their children do assignments, isn't it necessary that they give some considerations to the negative points it cause? They may be become too dependent on their parents without the ability（too to结构，加上without the ability 有些多余） to think personally, which may cause them to be incompetent with peers in future career.
Considerable though the disadvantages that studying with parents together accounts for are, （+that少了个倒装句的that，话说这个句子太长了，读的好复杂。）they cannot compete with the benefits solving issues together with parents （+that，定语从句的that）brings about, when efficiency and communication are taken into consideration.
用词丰富，句式多样。
但是，有的时候句式过于复杂，读起来会不通畅，还有表述上不够简洁。
作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-7-3 10:53
The wtirer makes the point that the science of archaeology is faced with(faces) serious problems and limitations in Britain. On the contrary, the lecturer demonstrates a different idea that new guildlines has been issued to protected and (will) make a great progress in archaeology science.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that many valuable artifacts were lost to construction projects, the lecturer says that construction sites will be examined firstly by archaeologists to see whether they are interested in them or the size is value or not. After the observation, the plan will be approve of by government before the excavation to see if there are some artifacts to be prevented.
In addition, the author said that financial support from the government for archaeology research was inadequate. However, the professor contradicted the idea in the reading by arguing that archaeology research will be supported by companies instead of government. The funds will be paid before these company doing the excavation. Thus, more scientific researches will be carried on.
Last but not least, the reading material discussed the issue that it was difficult to have a career in archaelolgy. While the listening material, on the other hand , states that more paied works will be created in all stages of the archaeology process including examing, researching, as well as writing articles. So, the increasing number of jobs will be the highest than ever before.
不错不错，小地方改进下会更好了。听力的点也很全的说。
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-10 12:29
标题: 7.10 综合 TPO1
TOP 1
The writer makes the point that four-day workweek will benefits the economy as well as the companies and employees. On the contrary, the speaker demonstrates that four-day workweek will affect the company and has disadvantages to employees.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that the shortened workweek would increase company profits, the lecture says that companies will spend more money on training and medical premium if they carry on the four-day workweek project. Expense of four-day workweek is the same of five-day workweek. And companies will spend more money on space and computer, which will cut the profits.
In addition, the author makes the points that offering four-day workweek option will reduce the unemployment rates. However, the lecturer contradicts the idea in the reading by saying companies will require employees work overtime and they will raise expectation to the workers. An employee working four-day a week will do the same amount of work as five-day workweek worker will do. Thus, no additional jobs will be created.
Finally, according to the reading material, it discusses that employees who afford a lower salary will enjoy more free time and improve the quality of their life. While the listening material states that it will reduce the quality of life and has risk to one's career. Taking four-day workweek will decrease one's competence abilities and they will lose their jobs first. Employees will also have less chances to be promoted.
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-10 18:23
标题: 7.11 独立
7月11日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that it is good for children to have similar jobs with you。
In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether children should inherit their parents' career. Those who criticize the phenomenon argue that children should have their own choice of their career. However, some people in favor of the issue. Contrary to the opinion of the former is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that having the similar jobs with their parents does good to their children.
To start with, it is more convenient and efficient way for children to share experience with their parents in the same job language. There is a common phenomenon that children may be easily influenced by their parents' job during their childhood. Holding the same profession, children can share their minds, opinions as well as feelings with their parents. It provides a typical example of myself. My mother is an accountant, which leads me to get interested to calculation and thus I choose accounting as my major. When I encounter with accounting dilemma, the first person I consort to is my mother .Otherwise, it will be solved when the next accounting course is taken. Thus, we cannot emphasize importance of enjoying identical career too much.
In addition, having the similar jobs offers their parents an excellent opportunity to communicate with their children. There is no doubt that children are not mature and have less abilities to determine which career they are suit. Under this circumstance, parents may take the chance to impart their professional knowledge to their children. For instance, my roommate ,his mother is a doctor, was active when he was a child. His mother had insights into his talents in manipulation and then taught him how to utilize the medical apparatus. Now, he became a celebrated doctor. The story is not rare, it is typical of dozens. Therefore, on no account can we ignore the value that children have the same jobs with their parents results in.
When people deem it is favorable to select the similar jobs of their own for their kids, isn't it necessary that they give some considerations to the negative points it may cause ? If the child take their parents advice and engage in the same field, they will lose the chance to seek which job they are competent for. Even worse, the job chosen by their parents will not accord with their own interests.
Considerable though the disadvantages that children having equal career with their parents brings about are, it cannot compete with the benefits that sharing their parents' professional knowledge leads to, when convenience and communication are taken into consideration.
作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-7-11 10:31
The writer makes the point that four-day workweek will benefits the economy as well as the companies and employees. On the contrary, the speaker demonstrates that four-day workweek will affect the company and has（brings） disadvantages to employees.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that the shortened workweek would increase company profits, the lecturer says that companies will spend more money on training and medical premium if they carry on the four-day workweek project. Expense of four-day workweek is the same of five-day workweek. And companies will spend more money on space and computer, which will cut the profits.
In addition, the author makes the points that offering four-day workweek option will reduce the unemployment rates. However, the lecturer contradicts the idea in the reading by saying companies will require employees work overtime and they will raise expectation to the workers. An employee working four-day a week will do the same amount of work as five-day workweek worker will do. Thus, no additional jobs will be created.
Finally, according to the reading material, it discusses that employees who afford a lower salary will enjoy more free time and improve the quality of their life. While the listening material states that it will reduce the quality of life and has risk to one's career. Taking four-day workweek will decrease one's competence abilities and they will lose their jobs first when the economical situation is not good. Employees will also have less chances to be promoted.
听力的要点都很全，就是每段后后来个总结的话，会更好了。
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-11 16:48
标题: 7.11 综合 TPO2
The passage makes the point that having a team of people attack a project offers several advantages. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that team working may cause several disadvantages.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that a group of people have a wide of knowledge and can work more quickly, the lecturer says that decisions are made less quickly because it is difficult to concentrate all the suggestions.Before they reach an agreement, there will be more meetings among the group. Therefore, the first reason provided in the reading text is refuted.
In addition, the author holds the view that groups are more likely to make risky decision. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts the idea in the reading by saying that When the convincer think the idea is inaccessible, the team will dispose it without further discussion.On the other hand, when the convincer highly praises the creative project,others will ignore the possible risk.When the project is failed, the blame is placed for all the members. This directly casts doubt on its counterpart in the reading.
Last but not least, the reading material states that taking part in a group process can be rewarding for individual member. However, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that some of the members will be the free-riders. They do not contribute to the team. However, the rewards belongs to the whole team without any name of a certain person. Thus, the last benefit of team working is totally unsounded, according to the speaker.
作者: jasonliu119 时间: 2012-7-11 19:32
请问你的7-10 独立写了么？我找不到哦
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-11 20:22
哈哈，这篇我上个月写过了，在第一页 6月20号的，我就删了，呵呵，不用改了
作者: 丰碑无语Yee 时间: 2012-7-12 18:59
7.11 综合 TPO2
The passage makes the point that having a team of people attack a project offers several advantages. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that team working may cause several disadvantages.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that a group of people have a wide of knowledge and can work more quickly, the lecturer says that decisions are made less quickly because it is difficult to concentrate all the suggestions. Before they reach an agreement, there will be more meetings among the group. Therefore, the first reason provided in the reading text is refuted.
In addition, the author holds the view that groups are more likely to make risky decision. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts the idea in the reading by saying that when the convincer (表达什么?)think the idea is inaccessible, the team will dispose it without further discussion. On the other hand, when the convincer highly praises the creative project, others will ignore the possible risk. When the project is failed, the blame is placed for all the members. This directly casts doubt on its counterpart in the reading.
Last but not least, the reading material states that taking part in a group process can be rewarding for individual member. However, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that some of the members will be the free-riders. They do not contribute to the team. However, the rewards(reward) belongs to the whole team without any name of a certain person. Thus, the last benefit of team working is totally unsounded(unsound), according to the speaker.
三点听出来了，逻辑也不错，挺好的哈
作者: jasonliu119 时间: 2012-7-12 20:30
标题: from Jason
In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether children should inherit their parents' career. Those who criticize the phenomenon argue that children should have their own choice of their career. However, some people in favor of the issue. Contrary to the opinion of the former is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that having the similar jobs with their parents does good to their children.
To start with, it is more convenient and efficient way （漏了a ）for children to share experience with their parents in the same job language. There is a common phenomenon that children may be easily influenced by their parents' job during their childhood. Holding the same profession, children can share their minds, opinions as well as feelings with their parents. It provides a typical example of myself. My mother is an accountant, which leads me to get interested to calculation and thus I choose accounting as my major. When I encounter with accounting dilemma, the first person I consort to is my mother .Otherwise, it will be solved when the next accounting course is taken. Thus, we cannot emphasize importance of enjoying identical career too much.
In addition, having the similar jobs offers their parents an excellent opportunity to communicate with their children. There is no doubt that children are not mature and have less abilities to determine which career they are suit. Under this circumstance, parents may take the chance to impart their professional knowledge to their children. For instance, my roommate ,his （用whose吧？定语从句）mother is a doctor, was active（什么意思？活跃的？） when he was a child. His mother had insights into his talents in manipulation and then taught him how to utilize the medical apparatus. Now, he became a celebrated doctor. The story is not rare, it is typical of dozens. Therefore, on no account can we ignore the value that children have the same jobs with their parents results in.（这句话语法上有点不通吧？，你的意思是用主语从句？不如改为 Therefore, on no account can we ignore the value of the same job shared by the parents and the children）
When people deem it is favorable to select the similar jobs of their own for their kids, isn't it necessary that they give some considerations to the negative points it may cause ? If the child take their parents advice and engage in the same field, they will lose the chance to seek which job they are competent for. Even worse, the job chosen by their parents will not accord with their own interests.
Considerable though the disadvantages that children having equal career with their parents brings about are, it cannot compete with the benefits that sharing their parents' professional knowledge leads to(类似之前的意见，这个lead to 没必要吧，个人对故作复杂的表达有点反感、、、可不可以改为the benefits of sharing their parents' professional knowledge？), when convenience and communication are taken into consideration.
很好很强大，看出楼主的语法功底相当深厚。但是我有两点建议，你考虑下吧：
（1）你用了两正一反的结构，我觉得能够3正的话就用3正结构吧。觉得你的第三小点论证很不充分
（2）物极必反，否极泰来。我觉得，有些时候从句用得别扭的话，还不如用简单的表述
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-13 13:34
标题: TPO 4 综合
TPO4 综合
The passage makes the points that considerable evidence shows that dinosaurs are endotherms. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that such discoveries do not support the proofs that dinosaurs are endotherms.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that dinosaurs living in polar regions proves that they can maintain temperature well, the professor says that regions like polar regions were much warmer than today. Fossils of dinosaurs can be found in these regions. Therefore, the first reason provided in the reading text is refuted.
In addition, the author holds the view that the legs of all modern endotherms are undernerath the body, and so were the legs of dinosaurs. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts that dinosaurs have no higher energy for running. The function leg position is to support more weight of their body .It has nothing to do with running. This directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading.
Last but not least, the reading material states that the presence of haversian canals in dinosaurs shows that they are endotherms. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that there are growth rings among dinosaurs body. They show that dinosaurs stop or slowly growing during cold condition. while, if animals have the temperature adjustments , they will continue to grow rapidly even when the temperature is cool. Thus, the last point in the passage is unsound , according to the speaker.
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-13 16:27
标题: 7.13 独立
7月13日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that compared with people who live in urban areas; the people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.
In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether rural life is more comfortable to live with families than the city life. Those who criticize the notion argue that city life has more convenient for families such as modern medical facilities and better education. However other people in favor of the idea that rural life are agreeable to their family. Contrary to the opinion of the former is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that people live in rural areas can take better care of their families.
To start with, it is a health way to live in the rural area with your family. Jobs in rural may be quite easy to deal with, even the working time in rural is less than that in cities. In such a relaxing and without pressure circumstances, more time will be spent to enjoy with families. It provides a typical instance of myself. Our family live in jianghai town ,a small city in Sichuang province. I always went to the seaside together with my father to watch the sunrise. These meaningful experiences led me to major in astronomy in the college. So, on no account can we ignore the value of family caring.
In addition, it offers more time when living in the rural. The leisure time can be arranged to communication with family members. There is no denying that more family has gaps between parents and children owing to having less leisure time. The more frequently we communicate with parents, the more harmonious the relationship in the family between us is. For example, my roommate lives in big city . When the time weekends comes, he seldom goes home instead of playing computer game in the dormitory, because their parents are busy even have business trips. Thus, I cannot emphasis the importance of family accompanying.
When people deem it is favorable to live in rural, isn't it necessary that they give some consideration to some negative points it may cause? Life in rural is quite simple and primitive with no modern medical facilities and no high educational institutions. Even worse, it may pose a great threat to your career promotion.
Considerable though the disadvantages that living in the rural encounters are, they cannot compete with the benefits that better taking care of families with a rural lifestyle brings about, when health and communication are taken into consideration.
作者: 芒果15号 时间: 2012-7-13 17:06
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that compared with people who live in urban areas; the people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.
In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether rural life is more comfortable to live with families than the city life. Those who criticize the notion argue that city life has more convenient（conviniences） for families such as modern medical facilities and better education. (这句读起来有一点怪怪的~LZ可以再斟酌一下~)However other people in favor of the idea that rural life are is agreeable to theirfamilyfamilies. Contrary to the opinion of the former is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that people live in rural areas can take better care of their families.这句很精彩啊~
To start with, it is a healthy way to live in the rural area with your family. Jobs in rural may be quite easy to deal with, even the working time in rural is less than that in cities. In such a relaxing and without pressure circumstances （这里这样用好吗？。。）, more time will be spent to enjoy with families. It provides a typical instance of myself. Our family live in jianghai town ,a small city in Sichuang province. I always went to the seaside together with my father to watch the sunrise. These meaningful experiences led me to major in astronomy in the college. So, on no account can we ignore the value of family caring.
In addition, it offers more time when living in the rural（感觉首句的论点可以再稍微展开一点哈）. The leisure time can be arranged to communication with family members. There is no denying that more family has gaps between parents and children owing to having less leisure time. The more frequently we communicate with parents, the more harmonious the relationship in the family between us is(the more harmonious relationship will be built in the family 这样写是不是能更好一点？~). For example, my roommate lives in big city . When the time weekends comes, he seldom goes home instead of playing computer game in the dormitory, becausetheir his parents are busy even have business trips. Thus, I cannot emphasis the importance of family accompanying.
When people deem it is favorable to live in rural, isn't it necessary that they give some consideration to some negative points it may cause? Life in rural is quite simple and primitive with no modern medical facilities and no high educational institutions(可以用neither nor啊~感觉会显得高级一点). Even worse, it may pose a great threat to your career promotion.
Considerable though the disadvantages that living in the rural encounters are, they cannot compete with the benefits that better taking care of families with a rural lifestyle brings about, when health and communication are taken into consideration.
整体感觉这篇文章写得很warm~读起来感觉很好~~~而且有理有据~~
向你学习~~
水平有限~只能看出一些小错误~~加油哈~~~
这篇我也写啦~~~也能帮我批改一下吗？~~~谢谢啦~~
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-14 14:00
标题: 7.14 综合 TPO 5
The passage makes the point that there are three theories of the explanation of the Chaco structures. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that these three theories are out of place.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that Chaco structures were purely residential, the professor says that the inside of the buildings cast doubts on living condition. Because there is no enough fire place for dong cooking, and there are only a few cooking rooms for only 10 families. Thus, the first reason for resident provided in the reading text is refuted.
In addition, the author holds the view that Chaco structures were used to store food supplies. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts the idea in the reading by saying that though maize is the important food supply for Chaco people, there is no evidence of maize container in the buildings after the excavation. This directly cast doubt on its counterpart
in the reading.
Last but not least, the reading material states that Chaco buildings were used as ceremonial centers. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that pots may be the trash of after the meal. Besides the pots, there were also some building material like stone and sand, which are the trash of the construction materials. Therefore, the last possible explanation is totally unsounded, according to the speaker.
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-14 15:24
标题: 7.14 独立
7月14日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that the advices from our grandparents have no use for their grandchildren because the world changed a lot during the past 50 years
In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether it's wise to take the counsel from grandparents. Those who criticize the phenomenon argue that advices or experiences from grandparents may be stereotype. However, some people are in favor of the notion. Contrary to the former opinion is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that counsels from our grandparents are advisable to our life.
To start with, our grandparents are more experienced than us. The more advice from them, the less crooked road we will pass. Grandparents are also our teachers in daily life. By taking their advice, we can solve the dilemmas efficiently and effectively. It provides a typical advice of my own. Once my arm was seared when I was cooking for my breakfast, my grandparent advise me to lay the ice on my arm and I felt comfortable after 10 minutes. So, on no account can we ignore the value of the suggestion from grandparents.
In addition, receiving the proposals from our seniorities is also a process of communication. There is no denying that the gap between our two different generation is enlarged since we have litter in common, resulting from different taste of music enjoyment, different lifestyle and even different views of the world. Advising offers an excellent opportunity for us to reconstruct the relationship between us. The more frequently we communicate with them, the more harmonious the affinity in our family between us is. For example, I have the same hobby of gardening with my grandfather, and we always share planting experience when we are gardening. Thus, we cannot emphasis the importance too much when we are suggested by our grandparents.
When people deem it is favorable to accept the advice from the elder, isn't it critical that they give some considerations to the negative points it may cause? Sometime s the counsels may out of time, even will go opposite of your propose when the idea is taken. After all, we are the most person who knows ourselves best. Also, with the help from our grandparents, we ae easily to depend on others and get lost in where is the termination we are head for.
Considerable though the disadvantages that obtaining elders' suggestion results in are, they cannot compete with the benefits that being proposed by grandparents brings about, when rich experiences and communication are taken into consideration.
作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-7-14 17:45
The passage makes the points that considerable evidence shows that dinosaurs are endotherms. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that such discoveries do not support the proofs that dinosaurs are endotherms.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that dinosaurs living in polar regions proves that they can maintain temperature well, the professor says that regions like(这个可以不要额) polar regions were much warmer than today. Fossils of dinosaurs can be found in these regions. Therefore, the first reason provided in the reading text is refuted.
In addition, the author holds the view that the legs of all modern endotherms are undernerath the body, and so were the legs of dinosaurs. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts that dinosaurs have no higher energy for running. The function leg position is to support more weight of their body. It has nothing to do with running. This directly casts doubt on its counterpart in the reading.
Last but not least, the reading material states that the presence of haversian canals in dinosaurs shows that they are endotherms. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that there are growth rings among dinosaurs body. They show that dinosaurs stop or slowly growing during cold condition. while, if animals have the temperature adjustments , they will continue to grow rapidly even when the temperature is cool. Thus, the last point in the passage is unsound, according to the speaker.
作者: lcaecar 时间: 2012-7-14 22:14
红色 修改
蓝色 建议
7月14日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that the advices from our grandparents have no use for their grandchildren because the world changed a lot during the past 50 years
In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether it's wise to take the counsel from grandparents. Those who criticize the phenomenon argue that advices or experiences from grandparents may be stereotype.这句话读的有点怪，不如改成: advices or experiences heard from... However, some people are in favor of the notion. Contrary to the former opinion is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that counsels from our grandparents are advisable to our life.
To start with, our grandparents are more experienced than us. The more advice we learn(the more the more 结构最好对称) from them, the less crooked road we will pass. Grandparents are also our teachers in daily life. By taking their advice, we can solve the dilemmas efficiently and effectively. It provides a typical advice of my own. Once my arm was seared when I was cooking for my breakfast, my grandparent advise me to lay the ice on my arm and I felt comfortable after 10 minutes. So, on no account can we ignore the value of the suggestion from grandparents.
In addition, receiving the proposals from our seniorities is also a process of communication. There is no denying that the gap between our two different generations is enlarged since we have litter in common, resulting from different taste of music enjoyment, different lifestyle and even different views of the world. Advising offers an excellent opportunity for us to reconstruct the relationship between us. The more frequently we communicate with them, the more harmonious the affinity in our family between us is. For example, I have the same hobby of gardening with my grandfather, and we always share planting experience when we are gardening. Thus, we cannot emphasis the importance too much when we are suggested by our grandparents.
When people deem it is favorable to accept the advice from the elder, isn't it critical that they give some considerations to the negative points it may cause? Sometime s the counsels may out of time, even will go opposite of your propose when the idea is taken. After all, we are the most person who knows ourselves best. Also, without the help from our grandparents, we ae easily to depend on others and get lost in where is the termination we are head for.
Considerable though the disadvantages that obtaining elders' suggestion results in are, they cannot compete with the benefits that being proposed by grandparents brings about这句话可否换一个表达， 读起来太奇怪了, when rich experiences and communication are taken into consideration.
LZ的例子很好很丰富
但是为了句型的复杂而出现了很多错误
并且也读的不是很通顺
但是LZ用词很丰富，说明是个基础不错的人
另一方面句子的逻辑连接不是很通顺，不要为了刻意使用模板而生搬硬套进入
表达还可以更简洁
一起加油吧！
作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-7-15 17:50
The passage makes the point that there are three theories of the explanation of the Chaco structures. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that these three theories are out of place.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that Chaco structures were（is） purely residential, the professor says that the inside of the buildings cast doubts on living condition. Because there is no enough fire place for dong cooking, and there are only a few cooking rooms for only 10 families. Thus, the first reason for resident provided in the reading text is refuted.
In addition, the author holds the view that Chaco structures were used to store food supplies. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts the idea in the reading by saying that though maize is the important food supply for Chaco people, there is no evidence of maize container in the buildings after the excavation. This directly casts doubt on its counterpart in the reading.
Last but not least, the reading material states that Chaco buildings were used as ceremonial centers. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that pots may be the trash of the workersafter the meal. Besides the pots, there were also some building material like stone and sand, which are the trash of the construction materials. Therefore, the last possible explanation is totally unsounded, according to the speaker.
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-16 18:46
标题: 7.16 独立
7月16日
Do you agree or disagree, the way a person dressed is a good indication of his/ her personality or charactor.
In resent years, there is a public controversy on whether it is an excellent method to distinguish one's personality by dressing. Those who agree with the opinion state that dressing plays a critical role in representing one's personality or character. However, others are not in favor of it. Contrary to the belief of the former is my heartfelt agreement that never should we commend one's personality by his or her appearance.
To start with, one's character can be evaluated from process when we communicate with each other. The words he uses, the views of the world and even the method he treats with dilemmas all will express the epitome of his personality. What the person dress sometimes has nothing to do with his character .It provides a typical example of my roommate. His family has possessed millions of asset, but he is a thrifty person. When we have dinner together in a restaurant, he always wraps the remnant back. So, on no account can we ignore the value of communication when we assess one's character.
In addition, we can also learn about one's personality according from one's knowledge background. There is no denying that well-trained and higher degree person always the character of perseverance and capability. When we category them by using the apparel they wear, the answer will go to the opposite of my expectation. For instance, if appearance is regarded as a means of indicating artists characters, we will definitely draw a conclusion that they are ragmen. Therefore, we cannot emphasis the importance of knowledge blackground too much.
When we talk about the possible factors contributing to one's personality, isn't it necessary to judge a person with his dress when we are in emergency. By using their attire, we can easily make a decision whether he is a burglar when I stranger lingers outside your house. Also , the uniform dressed by the employees in the supermarket can be easily determined, which is helpful to us when we resort to them to find something.
Considerable though the advantages that criticizing one’s character by his or her dressing enjoys are, they can not compete with the benefits that using other elements brings about to judge one’s personality, when communication and knowledge background are taken into consideration. Simultaneously, it is better to use comprehensive ways to evaluate one’s quality.
作者: hansxiao7 时间: 2012-7-17 09:56
In resent years, there is a public controversy on whether it is an excellent method to distinguish one's personality by dressing. Those who agree with the opinion state that dressing plays a critical role in representing one's personality or character. However, others are not in favor of it. Contrary to the belief of the former is my heartfelt agreement that never should we commend one's personality by his or her appearance.
To start with, one's character can be evaluated from process when we communicate with each other. The words he uses, the views of the world and even the method he treats with dilemmas all will express the epitome of his personality. What the person dress sometimes has nothing to do with his character .It provides a typical example of my roommate. His family has possessed millions of asset, but he is a thrifty person. When we have dinner together in a restaurant, he always wraps the remnant back. So, on no account can we ignore the value of communication when we assess one's character.
In addition, we can also learn about one's personality according from one's knowledge background. There is no denying that well-trained and higher degree person always the character of perseverance and capability. When we category them by using the apparel they wear, the answer will go to the opposite of my expectation. For instance, if appearance is regarded as a means of indicating artists characters, we will definitely draw a conclusion that they are ragmen. Therefore, we cannot emphasis the importance of knowledge blackground too much.
When we talk about the possible factors contributing to one's personality, isn't it necessary to judge a person with his dress when we are in emergency. By using their attire, we can easily make a decision whether he is a burglar when I stranger lingers outside your house. Also , the uniform dressed by the employees in the supermarket can be easily determined, which is helpful to us when we resort to them to find something.
Considerable though the advantages that criticizing one’s character by his or her dressing enjoys are, they can not compete with the benefits that using other elements brings about to judge one’s personality, when communication and knowledge background are taken into consideration. Simultaneously, it is better to use comprehensive ways to evaluate one’s quality.写的太棒了 还没有错误 但是我感觉论点似乎有点问题 前两个是说另外的方式能说明人的性格，但似乎没有论证衣服为什么不能体现 如果能加上就更好了 膜拜下Orz
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-17 16:53
标题: 7.17 综合 TPO8
TPO 8
The passage makes the point that Chevalier's memoir has distorted and invented many invents. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that their claims are not accurate and reliable source.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that Chevalier were poor, the lecturer says that borrowing money didn't mean that he was poor. Chevalier has spent money on parties and gambling. When he run out of money, he will borrow some from his friends. Thus, the first reason provided in the reading is reputed.
In addition, the author holds the view that it is impossible for Chevalier to remember earlier memoir. In contrast, the professor contradicts it by saying that he write diary every night. And when he did some compositions, he would consort to the notes and journals, which is confirmed by the person living with him. This directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading.
Last but not least, the reading material states that Chevaliers jailers were bribed to free him. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that this hypothesis is vanish. It was hard for him to escape from the prison. The sealing of the old prison room is repaired after his escaping, which is the evidence that he made a hole to escape. Therefore, the final reason of the reading is totally unsounded, according to the speaker.
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-17 18:36
标题: 7.17 独立
7月17日
Do you agree or disagree,the most important investment for a company is to spend money to improve the work skills of its employess
In recent years, there is a public controversy that whether improving skills is the optimum for companies' investment. Those who agree with the notion state that the purpose of the company is to exist in the market, and improving the work skills will earn more money. However, some people are not in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former people is my heartfelt belief that improving work skills is not the most important investment.
To start with, it is more important for the firms to pay attention on employees' health condition. The more energy they have, the more enthusiasm will be fully devoted to their work, which will create more profits for the stockholders. With the diversified fitting facilities, employees will keep their bodies fit, even we can do some physical exercise after a heavy day-work in order to avoid the traffic jam. It provides a typical example of my father, his company build a swimming pool for all the employees, and he swims regularly each week. Never is he absent from working since he gets a fever. On no account can we ignore the value of health to an employee.
In addition, leisure time is also another excellent choice for the company to invest. There is no denying that the pace of our jobs is quite overwhelming, to some extent, we will feel choking and mindless in such fast rhythm. Sometimes, we should stop to have a break and communicate each other, will make us more energetic for another working span. Also, the more frequently we communicate with our collaborators, the more harmonious the relationship between us is. For instance, my mother's company regulate that all employees have 2 hours to enjoy their lunch and have a little break. She never get exhausted after 8-hour working. Therefore, we can not emphasis the importance of the leisure time and communication too much.
When people deem it is favorable to work in a relaxing environment, isn't it necessary that they give some consideration to the merit of skill improvement. Admittedly, if a company improve the skills of the worker, more profits will be contributed and it will survive in the competing circumstance. As a result, the company will raise its fame in the same industry.
Considerable though the advantages that furthering the labors skills enjoys are, it cannot compete with the benefits that raising the condition of the fellows brings about, when health and communication are taken into consideration.
作者: chasedreamabc 时间: 2012-7-18 02:29
红色错误，蓝色存疑，高亮精彩
水平有限，改正有错误的之处望指出
In recent years, there is a public controversy that whether improving skills is the (a) optimum for companies' investment. Those who agree with the notion state that the purpose of the company is to exist in the market, and improving the work skills will earn more money（前面的高亮句式蛮好就是和TS有什么关系呢，如果是我会这么写：Those who agree with the notion state that improving the work skills is beneficial to make greater profit and thus help the company achieve the final goal-- to exist in the fiercely competitive market.）. However, some people are not in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former people is my heartfelt belief that improving work skills is not the most important investment.
To start with, it is more important forthe firms to pay attention on employees' health condition. (这个和skills貌似没关系，题目要求是the most important investment for a company is to spend money to improve the work skills of its employee) The more energy they have, the more enthusiasm will be fully devoted to their work, which will create more profits for the stockholders. With the diversified fitting facilities, employees will keep their bodies fit, even we can do some physical exercise after a heavy day-work in order to avoid the traffic jam. It provides a typical example of my father, his company build a swimming pool for all the employees, and he swims regularly each week. Never is he absent from working since he gets a fever. On no account can we ignore the value of health to an employee.（整个一段，个人感觉没有扣题）
In addition, leisure time is also another excellent choice for the company to invest. There is no denying that the pace of our （没有指代，有点突兀） jobs is quite overwhelming, to some extent, （逗号不连接两个句子， to some extent 作为插入，前面的there be 和下文的we will两个都是完整的句子）we will feel choking and mindless in such fast rhythm. Sometimes, we should stop to have a break and communicate each other, will make us more energetic for another working span. Also, the more frequently we communicate with our collaborators, the more harmonious the relationship between us is. For instance, my mother's company regulate that all employees have 2 hours to enjoy their lunch and have a little break. She never get exhausted after 8-hour working. Therefore, we can not emphasis the importance of the leisure time and communication too much.
When people deem it is favorable to work in a relaxing environment, isn't it necessary that they give some consideration to the merit of skill improvement. Admittedly, if a company improve the skills of the worker （workers‘ skills）, more profits will be contributed and it will survive in the competing circumstance. As a result, the company will raise its fame in the same industry.
Considerable though the advantages that furthering the labors skills enjoys are, it cannot compete with the benefits that raising the condition of the fellows brings about, when health and communication are taken into consideration.
PS：LZ的文章单纯遣词造句炉火纯青，值得学习
框架清晰了然，结构层次分明
有一个小点文章要求是work skills of its employee，就是员工的职业技能，LZ每段的TS和要求不相符合
现代文章的写法是每段顶格写，段段间隔一行
作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-7-18 06:53
7.17 综合 TPO8
TPO 8
The passage makes the point that Chevalier's memoir has distorted and invented many invents event. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that their claims are not accurate and reliable source.这个地方可以多用一些听力里的句子
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that Chevalier were poor, the lecturer says that borrowing money didn't mean that he was poor. Chevalier has spent money on parties and gambling. When he run out of money, he will borrow some from his friends这个地方听错了啊 Thus, the first reason provided in the reading is reputed.
In addition, the author holds the view that it is impossible for Chevalier to remember earlier memoir. In contrast, the professor contradicts it by saying that he write diary every night. And when he did some compositions, he would consort to the notes and journals, which is confirmed by the person living with him. This directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading.
Last but not least, the reading material states that Chevaliers jailers were bribed to free him. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that this hypothesis is vanish. It was hard for him to escape from the prison. The sealing of the old prison room is repaired after his escaping, which is the evidence that he made a hole to escape. Therefore, the final reason of the reading is totally unsounded, according to the speaker. 少了一些信息将和他一起在监狱的人有更有利的朋友帮他们出来但是没有成功
听力少信息呢 要注意哦 其他句型词汇都蛮好的~~
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-18 17:22
标题: 7.18 TPO9 综合
TPO 9
The passage makes the point that fuel-cell engines have several advantages over internal-combustion engines. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that hydrogen is the solution to the problems provided in the reading.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the reading that internal-combustion engine rely on petroleum, which is a finite resource, the professor says that hydrogen is not available and it's hard to obtain it. Hydrogen must be protected in a pure liquid state. So, it is difficult for people to produce and store the liquid hydrogen. Thus, the first reason provided in the reading text is reputed.
In addition, the author holds the view that hydrogen solves the pollution problems. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts the idea by saying that hydrogen will also create pollution when it is produced. In these producing processes, coals and oil will be used to generate these new fuels. At the same time, pollution will be produced. This directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading text.
Last but not least, the reading material states that fuel-cell engines will exhaust less energy and save more money. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that it is expensive to manipulate the fuel, because the fuel-cell engines will need an expensive metal. Some scientists are discovering some other metals to take the place of it, but it is so far successful. Therefore, the last reason explained by the writer is totally unsound, according to the speaker.
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-18 18:59
标题: 7.18 独立
7月18日
Do you agree or disagree,because the world is changing so quickly,people now are less happy and less satisfied than people in the past
In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether the modern life is much better than before. Those who agree with the notion demonstrate that advanced facilities are beneficial to daily issues, such as mobile phones and autos, which makes our life more convenient and magnificent. However, other people are not in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that people now are less happy and less satisfied than before.
To start with, there is no denying that nowadays people have less time to communicate with these families and friends. All of us are hurried in studying and working, so seldom do we have a picnic and share the feelings with our relatives. The less we communicate with our classmates or collaborators, the less harmonious the relationship between us will be. In the end, we will feel abandoned by our close friends. It provides a typical example of my own. I'm fully devoted to preparing the toefl examination. Sometimes I felt isolated from my roommates, even when they gathered for a party in a special day. Thus, on no account can we ignore the value of communication when we estate evaluate one's happiness.
In addition, mental mood is also another factor leading into unhappiness recently. When we are craving for the material world, simultaneously scantly do we pay attention to our mental world. Under these circumstances, easily can we get some odd diseases owing to having tremendous pressure and seldom releasing ourselves in a proper way. For instance, do you ever regard the house as the necessity for surviving? Renting it may be another solution. But, if you imitate your colleagues and not enough money supports you to possess one, you will be overwhelmed by this plan. Therefore, we cannot emphasis the importance of mental world.
When people deem it unfavorable to in the modern society, isn't it necessary that they should give some consideration to the advantages of it. We may enjoy the modern buildings, where we can still work in the summer day with the help of air-conditions. Also, modern medical techniques will save our lives, prolonging and improving our living quality. Otherwise, it is vulnerable for us to be infected with disease.
Considerable though the benefits that living in the modern community enjoys are, they cannot compete with the disadvantages that pursuing a diversity world nowadays brings about, when communication and mental health are taken into consideration.
作者: hansxiao7 时间: 2012-7-19 10:03
In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether the modern life is much better than before. Those who agree with the notion demonstrate that advanced facilities are beneficial to daily issues, such as mobile phones and autos, which makes our life more convenient and magnificent. However, other people are not in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that people now are less happy and less satisfied than before.
To start with, there is no denying that nowadays people have less time to communicate with these families and friends. All of us are hurried in studying and working, so seldom do we have a picnic and share the feelings with our relatives. The less we communicate with our classmates or collaborators, the less harmonious the relationship between us will be. In the end(私下里觉得这句应该放在文章末尾 这里可以改成therefore或者in addition一类的）, we will feel abandoned by our close friends. It provides a typical example of my own. I'm fully devoted to preparing the toefl examination. Sometimes I felt isolated from my roommates, even when they gathered for a party in a special day. Thus, on no account can we ignore the value of communication when we estate(?房地产？ 小生愚昧。。。如果没有用错的话麻烦给我留言说一下 哈哈）evaluate one's happiness.
In addition, mental mood is also another factor leading into unhappiness recently. When we are craving for the material world, simultaneously scantly do we pay attention to our mental world. Under these circumstances, easily can we get some odd diseases owing to having tremendous pressure and seldom releasing ourselves in a proper way. For instance, do you ever regard the house as the necessity for surviving? Renting it may be another solution. But, if you imitate your colleagues and not enough money supports you to possess one, you will be overwhelmed by this plan. Therefore, we cannot emphasis the importance of mental world.
When people deem it unfavorable to in the modern society, isn't it necessary that they should give some consideration to the advantages of it(把of it 去掉会更好）. We may enjoy the modern buildings, where we can still work in the summer day with the help of air-conditions. Also, modern medical techniques will save our lives, prolonging（感觉prolong这里用的不是很合适） and improving our living quality. Otherwise, it is vulnerable for us to be infected with disease.
Considerable though the benefits that living in the modern community enjoys are, they cannot compete with the disadvantages that pursuing a diversity world nowadays brings about, when communication and mental health are taken into consideration.结尾写的太棒了 让步段似乎感觉按正常模式应该是说人们也会对什么满意 但是这都是个人愚见。。。 写的真心不错 有的词汇大亮 加油O(∩_∩)O
作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-7-22 14:43
7.18 TPO9 综合
TPO 9
The passage makes the point that fuel-cell engines have several advantages over internal-combustion engines. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that hydrogen is the solution to the problems provided in the reading.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the reading that internal-combustion engine rely on petroleum, which is a finite resource, the professor says that hydrogen is not available and it's hard to obtainit. Hydrogen must be protectedcan only be used in a pure liquid state. So, it is difficult for people to produce and store the liquid hydrogen. Thus, the first reason provided in the reading text is reputed.
In addition, the author holds the view that hydrogen solves the pollution problems. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts the idea by saying that hydrogen will also create pollution when it is produced. In these producing processes, coals and oil will be used to generate these new fuels. At the same time, pollution will be produced感觉有些重复了. This directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading text.
Last but not least, the reading material states that fuel-cell engines will exhaust less energy and save more money. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that it is expensive to manipulate the fuel, because the fuel-cell engines will need an expensive metal. Some scientists are discovering时态不大队哦 some other metals to take the place of it, but it is so far successful. Therefore, the last reason explained by the writer is totally unsound, according to the speaker.
包子好久没听原文了 可能改的不大完整哎 见谅见谅~
加油~
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-25 18:20
标题: 7.25 独立
7月25日110304NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems in today’s world will be solved in our lifetime.
In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether we could manage to give an answer to the all the crucial problems during our life span. Those who are in favor of the issue argue that modern facilities are beneficial to our daily life, which will make the dilemmas easily resolved. However, other people disagree with them. Contrary to the opinion of the former notion is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that it is not possible to solve the most important problems in our lifetime nowadays.
To start with, communication deficiency is the result of the development of modern life, which we have no abilities to treat with it unless we cease the rapid pace of advancement. There is no denying that presently people have less to communicate with their families as well as their friends. Seldom do we have a picnic and share feelings with them under such overwhelming circumstances. Also, the less frequently we communicate with relatives, the less harmonious the relationship between us will be. It provides a typical example of my own. After long time of learning TOEFL, I feel alone and sometimes I finds there is a gap between my friends and I, because topics we talked about is irrelative. Amusements could alleviate my loneliness, but it could not solve it. So, on no account can we ignore the value of communication in our society.
In addition, some pollution problems could also not to be solved in our lifetime. Pollutions, especially environment pollutions will last so many years that our offspring will also suffer from the affects we leave. These pollutions will devastate our home and living resources. Even worse, some of the polluted lands will never be recovered and they will become the deserts. For instance, the nuclear basement leak in the Japan cause the polluted city 30 years to clean up the radioactive material-Uranium. This case is not rare, it is typical of dozens. Therefore, we could not emphasis the importance of ecology system too much.
When people deem that there still exists some issues we cannot conquer, isn't it necessary that they should give some considerations to the advancements we made nowadays. Admittedly, there are numerous cases which we have no treatment to them can be overcome by us in today's world. Modern medical service is able to prolong our lives. Transportation also makes our life more efficient and convenient. So, it is conceivable that our life has been great improved by science technologies.
Considerable though the benefits that modern society enjoys brings about, it cannot draw a conclusion that the most important problems in today’s world will be solved in our lifetime, when communication problems and pollution issues are taken into consideration.
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-25 18:24
标题: 7.25 综合 TPO15
The passage makes the point that several measures have been proposed to stop the spread of the cane toad in Australia. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates the idea that these methods could not get rid of the cane toad.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that the spread of the toad could be prevented by building a fence, the professor says that the fence could not stop the spread of toad, because the fence is not efficient. Eggs and young toads are able to get through the fence by the carrying water. Thus, the first reason provided in the reading is refuted.
In addition, the author holds the view that toads could be captured and destroyed by volunteers. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts the idea by saying that trapping the toads will not success and they will trap the native frog by mistakes, since it is difficult for them to tell the difference between toad and frogs especially the young toads. So, this directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading text.
Last but not least, the reading material states that virus could control the cane toad populations. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that it could make a disaster in the eco-system and they are also a part of the system. Since the toads will be transferred to the United states, the virus will kill the toad in it In the end. Therefore, the last point in the reading is totally unsound.
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-27 18:08
标题: 7.27 独立
7月27日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should know the events happening around the world, even if it unlikely has some influence on your daily life.
In recent years, there is public controversy that whether it is a need for people to acquire something irrelevant to their daily life. Those who criticize the notion argue that knowing everything will exhaust more precious time. However, other people are in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former people is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that people should know the events, which has less influence on their daily life.
To start with, sharing the feelings about the current affairs may provide an opportunity for us to communicate with our friends and colleagues. There is no denying that the pace of our modern life so fast that we felt lonely and overwhelmed at such advancing rhythm. So, talking about the issue, even which has nothing to do with our daily life, will alleviate our pressure and makes us more energetic for another challenge. It provides a typical example of my own. I always talk about foreign politics which my father. Although it influences less on my life, I deem it's a excellent topic between us when we have nothing to talk about. Therefore, on no account can we ignore the value of the irrelated cases.
In addition, obtaining knowledge is a long process of accumulation. What we have learn may not be used immediately. So, we should prepare different kinds of ken for tomorrow' utilizing. Learning the events happening around the world also can broaden our view, which may correct our previous opinions of what is the norm in our society. For example, studying the manner of western-style food can help me better understand the culture of America life, and I can apply it when I go abroad. Therefore, we cannot emphasis the importance of uninfluenced matters too much.
When people deem it is favorable to be informed with outside world, isn't it necessary that they should give some consideration to the disadvantages it cause. Admittedly, learning about too many items will cost us numerous time, which may be used to more critical things, for instance, researches and traveling. Even worse, there irrelated issues will distract our attention from studying.
Considerable though the negative points that casting eyes on a wider range results in are, they cannot compete with the benefits that paying attention to the whole world brings about, when communication and knowledgeable brains are taken into consideration.
作者: qianjun06 时间: 2012-7-27 18:09
标题: 7.27 TPO17 综合
The passage makes the point that the number of birds in the United States will decline. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates the idea that what the writer has said is not convinced.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that birds' nature will disappear with the growing of human populations, the professor says that more cities provide habitats for the bird, which increase the number of birds. Also, more birds are found in the city. Although some species are facing extinct, other kinds of birds are increasing. Therefore, the first reason by the writing is refuted.
In addition, the author holds the view that agriculture will also result in the further destruction of the bird habitats. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts it by saying that the growth of the agriculture is not the way said in the reading. Actually, there is less land used for agriculture. Scientists also invent new technologies to make more productive products, which will save more lands. This directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading.
Last but not least, the reading material states that the use of pesticides will also increase. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that the tradition way has changed in two sides. First, people will use the new pesticides , which is less toxic. Second, they will grow the pesticideless products, which will not harm the birds any more. Thus, the final point in the reading is totally unsound.
作者: klllun 时间: 2012-7-28 19:34
TO qianjun06~
昨天的作业貌似是TPO18啊~那个17我还没有做的诶。自己先去写一次17再来修改哈~今天晚上确实来不及写作文啦。这里有一个自动检测的PDF结果，请先凑活着看看，明个儿我写了继续修改的啊~
作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-7-28 22:07
In recent years, there is （这里加个冠词？）public controversy that whether it is a need for people to acquire something irrelevant to their daily life. Those who criticize the notion argue that knowing everything will exhaust more precious time. However, other people are in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former people is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that people should know the events, which has less influence on their daily life.
To start with, sharing the feelings about the current affairs may provide an opportunity for us to communicate with our friends and colleagues. There is no denying that the pace of our modern life （加个系动词）so fast that we felt lonely and overwhelmed at such advancing rhythm. So, talking about the issue, even which has nothing to do with our daily life, will alleviate our pressure and makes us more energetic for another challenge（感觉这里用other challenges比较好些额，another总感觉有下一个，有点类似的challenge的赶脚）. It provides a typical example of my own. I always talk about foreign politics which my father（木写完？）. Although it influences less on my life, I deem it's a excellent topic between us when we have nothing to talk about. Therefore, on no account can we ignore the value of the irrelated cases.
In addition, obtaining knowledge is a long process of accumulation. What we have learn may not be used immediately. So, we should prepare different kinds of ken for tomorrow' （这个加s）utilizing. Learning the events happening around the world also can broaden our view（outlook 或horizon都行）, which may correct our previous opinions of what is the norm in our society. For example, studying the manner of western-style food can help me better understand the culture of America life, and I can apply it when I go abroad. Therefore, we cannot emphasis the importance of uninfluenced matters too much.
When people deem it is favorable to be informed with outside world, isn't it necessary that they should give some consideration to the disadvantages it cause. （用问号？）Admittedly, learning about too many items will cost us numerous time, which may be used to more critical things, for instance, researches and traveling. Even worse, there irrelated issues will distract our attention from studying.
Considerable though the negative points that casting eyes on a wider range results in are, they cannot compete with the benefits that paying attention to the whole world brings about, when communication and knowledgeable brains are taken into consideration.
不错不错，句子和逻辑都很好，就是小处注意哈
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