楼主的作业交得非常快，真是令人羡慕。
本人智力低下，批改多有谬误，望见谅。
Nowadays, everything changes with a high speed so do our ideas and our work. We have to prepare many presentations during our study, showing （应该为and show，用动词原形。因为此处的show与前半句的prepare是并列关系）our understanding of new knowledge or our new idea. If there is an important presentation for me, I will choose to work on it right away without (without一般加名词或动词的ing形式，此处的hesitate是动词，不能这么跟)hesitate since new ideas will come to my mind if I think it （我们一般不说think it，我们一般说think it over, think about it, or think of it）every day and I will have enough time to prepare it.【段落小问题：逻辑上，New idea不等于good idea。 New idea不一定会contribute to your presentation，因为new idea有可能false and useless、对完成presentation无益处。或者此处是缺少一个逻辑桥。楼主写了两层逻辑：a. 每天都准备才能充分搜集new ideas；b.有很多new ideas对完成任务有利。此处缺少的逻辑层是在a逻辑层之前的前设证明，即new idea=useful idea。】
I have to admit that if I have a good idea for presentation, I will spend less time to prepare, to find （此处的find是与之前的spend并列的，可改为spend less time to prepare and find relative ...)relative materials on the internet. Once I take part in a case analysis competition with other four students. We discussed about this case but we have no good idea, even the similar one. Three days before the due day, our team leader thought a good solution ( 与第一段的问题一样，think不能直接接solution，建议说Come up with a good solution之类)to our case so that we can write a report for it before the deadline. However, I cannot imagine what will happen if everyone has no idea about the case before the deadline..【段落小问题：让步让得有点怪。。。此处不应当只提及good idea的好处而不提及其弊端。此处只描述其强大优势，就weaken了你自己的thesis。我觉得此处正常的让步应当类似于：纵然catch a good idea十分重要，blablabla,但是，我们依然应当早早开始准备，因为blablabla...】
It is commonly believed that all important things needs （前面是things 后面应该接need吧？）to be prepared as early as it could be ,from preparing a presentation to preparing studying abroad （我觉得此处用prepare for更好，因为准备出国，肯定应该接prepare for。prepare sth. 指准备某事，prepare for sth.指为某事而准备。例如：（1）I prepare the dinner.（2） I prepare for the dinner.两句的区别在于，第一句是 我准备晚餐,那就是我去做饭了.第二句是 我为晚餐做准备,指的就不一定是什么了,也许是穿的漂亮点去参加晚餐）, so that there will be enough time for it. Some people plan to study abroad when they come to university. They dream to have a chance to study in a famous private university like Stanford, MIT. They prepare for it for a long time, taking TOFEL ,GRE examination when they are in the second grade, being a exchange student in NTU one of the top 50 universities in the world in Singapore to enhance their background, getting high score in almost each subjects（each在此处的用法应当是加名词的单数形式）. They do all these to be well prepared for their important things. An important presentation works in the same way, only enough time will support it being well prepared.【段落小问题：类比略不当。窃以为准备出国留学的事项之繁琐（初至诸多申请材料之筹备、申请专业与院校之选择、申请具体环节之跟进blablabla，后至财政支持之完备、签证材料之筹划blabla，耗时常、往往以年为单位）与准备presentation差别太大。。。我觉得务实的写法，可以就presentation本身来写写：比如写准备presentation应该早早开始，因为分析观众人群、深化对topic的理解、设计presentation中的例子、演说方式、依托的媒体、大框架的设计等等的完善与加强需要长期的努力，方能趋于完美。】
If I work on the presentation right away so that I can work it a little bit every day. New ideas will come to my mind for I read lots of books, magazines, and news every day. An investigation shows that five thousand pieces of news happen per minute. It will take us a long time to learn them by heart. Some of these will build our mind and give us inspiration to the work if we consider the information, which will contribute to our presentation..
In brief, if I am assigned an essential presentation, I will work on it right away to give me enough time to find information even good idea will help accelerate our work.（1. 主语怎么从My work变到 our work 的？ 2. 本屌愚昧，不理解标红处是如何与前半句接上的——“I will A will B”的句型。或者，楼主是想说，good idea which can heip me to accelerate the completion of my work吗？）
结语：
楼主的文章写的很好。
1. 楼主有着和我一样的问题——单复数小混乱
2. 建议楼主在作文时，适用更多的连接词，使得句首词更为丰富些。以楼主的第三段为例，句首词依次为"It、Some、They、They、They、An", 或转折、或承接、或变换花样的次数少了些。当然，这是我吹毛求疵了。
最后，衷心祝愿楼主顺利110+！
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