11.7 独立写作,求拍砖,谢谢亲们~

lizchang1990

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The way of a person’s dress is an indication of his or her personality or character.





It is a truth universally acknowledged that we are used to cover themselves with clothes since we evolved from apes. There is a heated topic that whether our dresses can reveal our personalities or characters. From my perspective, it’s hard to say that our dresses can be an indication of our nature. My opinion can be supported by several reasons as following.



As we know, people in different cultural background always have different preferences about dress, we cannot know about a person only by his/her clothes, so it is unwarranted to state that one person’s dress is the reflection of his/her character. Nowadays, advances in media technology have great impact on the way people’s views about dress and fashion. Maybe it is the media hype that influence people’s dress style rather than their own personalities do. For example, in 2005, Super Girl was popular, and almost everyone watched such TV show. Because of its popularity, many young people started to follow their idol by wearing the identical style dress. Since then, hundreds of thousands of ladies in Chinese loved to dress themselves like a handsome boy or worn big black glasses. We can see how the fashion show changes people’s personal aesthetic view. Therefore, people’s dresses are not just out of their nature, outside elements sometimes have more important influence.



In addition, one person’s position also brings uncorrected evaluation about one’s personality or character. People in different level positions always have their particular styles. That’s why you can distinguish a boss from his/her employees quickly. But they will not just limit their roles in one position. Maybe in their daily life, they are not serious as they are in the highly position. If we evaluate their personalities hastily, maybe we will get a false result.



Different occasions may determine one’s dress as well in stead of one person’s own preference. Taking various parties as examples, in a formal raising fund party, man should wear tie and suit, woman should wear formal dress. However, in a family party or festival party, people can wear whatever they want, because such an occasion is informal and for fun. From this point, we may understand that people’s dresses are not necessarily the true indication of people’s own characters.



In such a society with multiple characteristics, we should know a person from a variety of aspects. Dress is no longer the pure factor for us to evaluate one’s personality and character. Only when we get more information about one person can we get a correct answer.

amissrosa

11.7日的作文題目是 College or University should have a better job preparation for students before they find jobs,樓主寫的是6號的題目,不過還是幫你改囉! 有錯的地方還請樓主見諒>"< 一起加油!!
11.6 獨立改


[注1]It is a truth universallyacknowledged that we [注2]have been are used to cover themselves (ourselves) with clothessince we evolved from apes. There is a heated (hot) topic thatwhether our dresses can reveal our personalities or characters. From myperspective, it’s hard to say that our dresses can be an indication of ournature. My opinion can be supported by several reasons as following.
[注1]词组 It is universallyacknowledged that
[注2] 句型S. +have p.p.,since S.+ Ved
As we know, people in (with) differentcultural background always have different(distinct/dissimilar) preferences about dress, . We cannot know about a person only by his/her clothes, so because it isunwarranted to state that (regard) one person’sdress (as) is the reflectionof his/her character. Nowadays, advances in media technology have great impacts on [注1]the way people’s viewsabout dress and fashion. [注2]Maybe it is themedia hype that influence [注3]people’s dress style rather than their own personalities do. For example,in 2005, Super Girl was popular, and almost everyone watched such (this) TV show. Because ofits popularity, many young people started to follow [注4]their idol (it) by wearing theidentical style dress. Sincethen, hundreds of thousands of ladies in Chinese (Chineseladies) loved to dress themselves like a handsome boys or worn bigblack glasses. We can see how the fashion show changes people’s personalaesthetic view. Therefore, people’s dresses are not just out of their nature,outside elements sometimes have more important influence (playan more important role).
[注1] have greatimpacts on the way that people +动词 (ex. judge/ comment)
[注2]建议可改成Because of the hype ofmedia, 可是句与句之间的关系更清楚
[注3]A rather thanB, A与B为平行结构：people dress inpopular style rather than in personal style
[注4]因前面无提到任何idols,突然跑出idol有点突兀
[注5]总觉得该段的论点(people withdifferent cultural background always have different preferences about dress)和例子(media impact ondressing style)没有相扣,楼主可考虑换此段论点,或例子
In addition, one person’s position also brings uncorrected evaluationabout one’s(the other one’s) personality orcharacter. People in different level positions always have their particularstyles. That’s why you can distinguish a boss from his/her employees quickly.But they will not just limit their roles in one position(转折的很好!). Maybe intheir daily life, they are not serious as they are in the [注1]highly formal position. If weevaluate their personalities hastily, maybe we will get a false result.
[注1]我懂楼主想表达的意思,但查过google后发现英文好像没有”highly position”的说法,所以建议用formal position


Moreover, Differentoccasions may determine one’s dress as well instead of one person’s own preference.Takeing various parties as examples, in a formal raising fund party (fundraising party), a man should wear tie and suit, woman should wear formal dress. However,in a family party or festivalparty (family or festival party), people can wear whatever theywant, because such an occasions is are informal and for fun. From this point, we may understand that people’sdresses are not the necessarily the true indication of people’s own characters.



In such a society with multiple characteristics, we should know a personfrom a variety of aspects. Dress is no longer the pure (only) factor for us toevaluate one’s personality and character. Only when we get more informationabout one person can we get a correct answer.

文章中evaluate出现的次数频繁,可以多用其他同义字取代~

lizchang1990

谢谢rose,thanks, 一起加油.

amissrosa

您好~不客氣!大家一起互相幫忙!
再麻煩你批改我的作文喔!感激不盡

lizchang1990

11.7 独立

College or University should have a better job preparation for students before they find jobs





As we know, nowadays our country has changed dramatically from citizen’s daily life to the development of our technology. All these changes also lead to a more competitive labor market. People need to equip themselves with more abundant preparations to obtain an edge. So, from my perspective, college or university should have a better job preparation for students before they get jobs.


More preparations can horn students’ qualities and help them get satisfied jobs. Now, many universities have started to provide a large number of various useful sources to students, such as vocation-oriented training and professional speeches about strategies of finding a job. Such practical knowledge is very important for students in the future real-world work environment. Only when students have acquainted with these problems and acquire some indirect experiences from senior professors can they perform better in their fields. As a result, it will be an undeniable fact that students can find jobs easily.


More preparations also can help a college or university gain good reputation, then school can enroll more excellent students next year, therefore college should have a better job-centered education for students. I believe that everybody wants to attend an institute with higher reputation. People always try to improve themselves from different aspects in order to obtain an admission of a good university. If a college can attract hundreds of thousands of students from different places by good reputation, then it will have more excellent alumnus, so maybe these people will donate more money to help the college development in the near future. This is a virtue recycle. From this point, a better jib preparation is a bonus for both students and school.


Taking these reasons as I mentioned above into consideration. No matter a preparation from the short-term factor for students’ career or from the long-term factor for a college’s future bloom. We may safely state that job education is necessary for students, and an institution should provide such a curriculum for students to train them. When all students find their pleased positions and work hard, our society will have a more tremendous change and people will have better life.

lizchang1990

11.7 作业TPO23 综合


The speaker distracted these three hypotheses in the reading passage about why yellow cedar has been declining for a long time. He pointed out the inaccuracies in each of explanation as following.


Regarding the first cause, the lecture said that it was impossible for beetle to lead to the decline of yellow cedar. Because the health trees could resist the insect parasites by themselves. In addition, the bark of the tree was poisonous, so if the beetle ate the outer layer of yellow cedar, they would die. Therefore, such a cause from beetle or insect parasites was fairly unwarranted.


The professor in the listening material also argued against the reason brown bears were responsible for the decline. He demonstrated that many yellow cedars grew in the island of North America
. There weren't any bears in that island. So the cause from brown bears was highly doubt.

What's more, the speaker rejected the third hypothesis that gradual changes of climate should blame. He explained that many tree also died in the lower elevation areas where was warmer. Generally speaking, the climate in the high elevation was colder and low elevation was warmer. So the frost would only bring damages to trees in higher level rather than in a lower level. Many yellow cedars grew in low elevation, therefore the frozen climate would not kill the trees.

小滋滋

等待11.9综合

lizchang1990

11.9 独立  spending money on travel ＆vacation vs. saving for future

Many people are familiar with the film Titanic, there is a scene that when the ship was sloping and sinking, a fat woman was regretting that she hadn’t eaten up the chocolate cake on the table in that morning because of worrying about high calorie would make her shape worse. Actually myriad facets tell us that an acknowledged adage “life is short, please seize the day”. So, I consider that spending money on travel is more essential for us to enjoy the short and beautiful life than saving capitals for future.

For one thing, travel itself can benefit us a lot, such as broadening our horizons and relieving our mental pressures. These advantages are huge bonus for a colorful life because in today’s fierce competitive labor markets, versatile characteristics are extremely important for our future success. Better yet, vacation can help us obtain such qualities and acquire extra experiences to horn our skills. Therefore saving money we just get a record of bank account but nothing.

For another thing, spending cashes on holiday can boost a country’s economy. I believe this is also the reason why many banks have introduced credit cards for citizens. If everyone only saves their salary into a bank or other places, people are not willing to spend them, how does our cash flow in the whole world? How does our economy prosper with frozen capitals? When people are taking their trips, they will spend money on souvenirs, board and lodging and transportation, this series of consumption can bring profits to local residents and improve their material life .From this point, I tend to believe that spending money on travel is a crucial and indispensable for the development of local tourism and the economy of our country.

Finally, vacation is the keystone for people to communicate, especially for international cultures to blend. Such a significant activity, we should try our best to uphold and delicate to it. For instance, every year, there will be hundreds of thousands of foreign friends come to China, they want to experience the special and long Chinese culture. Only when they truly enjoy such an interacted cultural journey can they spread our characteristic traditions to the whole world. Then more people will know about China and come to our lands.

Facing these convincing reasons above, we may admittedly state that spending money is better than saving it because taking a trip can contribute to not only individuals but also our society. Such multiple advantages are enough to push us go to other places and have a good time. So, why not have a journey and feast your limited life soon?

lizchang1990

TPO25 综合作文
The lecture and the reading passage held opposite opinions toward whether the ancient vessels that found in Iraq could prove ancient people use electric batteries. However, the professor illustrated that the equipment was applied as ancient electric batteries.

The reading mentioned that if such vessels were used as batteries, there would be some metal wires near the vessels. The speaker contradicted this point by saying that these devices were found by local residents not archaeologist, maybe inhabitants had used the original equipment but the archaeologist overlooked.

In addition, regarding the second argument the reading materials claimed, that the copper cylinders inside the jars looked like those copper tools in Seleucia and had the same use, was also rejected by the lecturer. He demonstrated that no evidence was provided that the shape of original scrolls, the same shape was not necessary for the identical purpose. What’s more, when copper was mixed with iron, they usually produced electricity. The original copper used for one purpose, while adapted copper for another purpose. Therefore, we can see how groundless the reading’s reason.

Finally, the professor rebutted the statement that the reading clarified, he explained that small electricity could produce wild short when we touch it. That’s why many ancient people said they had magic power when using batteries. Because modern doctors use electricity to heal legs and pains and stimulate muscles, maybe ancient doctors also use it for the same purpose.

amissrosa

11.9 獨立改 抱歉來晚了>_<
红色错误 橘色建议 黄色精彩
Many people arefamiliar with the film, Titanic, and there is a scene that when theship was sloping(slop专指液体晃荡) and sinking, a fat woman was regretting that she hadn’t(didn’t) eaten up the chocolate cake on the table in that morning because of worrying abouthigh calorie would make her shape worse. Actually, myriadfacets tell us that an acknowledged adage “life is short, please seize theday”. So, I consider thatspending money on travel is more essential for us to enjoy the short andbeautiful life than saving capitals for future.

For one thing,travel itself can benefit us a lot, such as broadening our horizons andrelieving our mental pressures. These advantages are huge bonus for a colorfullife because in today’s fierce competitive labor markets, versatilecharacteristics are extremely important for our future success. Better yet,vacation can help us obtain such qualities and acquire extra experiences to horn (earn?) our skills (若再举例会更精彩). Therefore(用however语意会较顺畅), saving money we just get a record of bank account but nothing by saving money.

For another thing, spending cashes on holiday canboost a country’s economy(很新颖的论点!). I believe this is also thereason why many banks have introduced credit cards for citizens. If everyoneonly saves their salary into a bank (banks) or other places, people are not willing tospend them(删掉后感觉比较简洁有力), how does our cash flow in thewhole world? How does our economy prosper with frozen capitals? When people are taking theirtrips, they will spend money on souvenirs, boardand lodging andtransportation,. this (These) seriesof consumption can bring profits to local residents and improve their materiallife(非常有说服力).From this point, I tend tobelieve that spending money on travel is a crucial and indispensable for thedevelopment of local tourism and the economy of our country.

Finally, vacationis the keystone for people to communicate, especially for international cultures toblend (experiencing/exchanging foreign cultures). Such asignificant activity, we should try our best to uphold and delicate (?) to it. For instance, every year, therewill be hundreds of thousands of foreign friends (foreigners) come to China, and they want to experience the special and long (historic) Chinese culture. Only when they truly enjoy such an interacted culturaljourney can they spread our characteristic traditions to the whole world. Thenmore people will know about China and come to our lands (country).



Facing theseconvincing reasons above, we may admittedly state that spending money ontraveling is better than saving itfor future becausetaking a trip can contribute to not only individuals but also our society. Such multiple advantages are enough to push us to go to other places and have a good time. So, why not have a journey andfeast in your (our) limited life soon?