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Do you agree with: the friends that you can have fun with is more important than the friends that you can get help from?

It is often said that a friend in need is a friend in deed. When it comes to the topic that whether we should choose people who we can have fun with as our friends or those who can help us when we need them as friends, there will be a lot of discussions. As far as I am concerned, I will make friends with people who can help me, and further illustrate my reasons as follows:

First and foremost, more often than not, those people who can help us when we in difficulties are our real friends. In my point of view, there are a lot of people we can have fun with, but just a few that we can share sorrow with, and I regard these people as my best friends. Taking me for example, when I first prepared for GMAT, the task became so hard for me that I cannot understand the logical chain and even the long sentences. I was rather upset and almost lost heart. My friend Li Yang saw me one day and she inspired me by saying that if I could not overcome this task, how could I survive in the States and make my dream come true. And she suggested that I should make a well-organized plan to divide my goal into several litter parts, which are attractive and attainable. And just like that, I gradually had a faith in conquering this. Since Li Yang helped me surmount the GMAT, we have become best friends. So I think real friend can come to give you a hand when you are in trouble rather than just stand aside.

Furthermore, when we have trouble and need help, a hand from the friend will definitely makes situation better. For example, Yu Minghong, the CEO of New Oriental, and Niu Gensheng, the CEO of Mengniu Dairy, are friends since they were very young. However, Yu set up his company and became successful earlier. When Niu wanted to establish a dairy company Mengniu, Yu actually helped him a lot by providing financial support and giving many constructive suggestions. After some years, Mengniu became the biggest dairy company in China. Every time when Niu talks about Yu, he always says “How lucky I am to have such a friend." From this case, we can see how important friends' help is.

In conclusion, friends are the most valuable treasure in our lives. So it is important for everyone to choose right friends. And based on the reasons above, the real friends are those who can facilities us in proper ways, but not just entertain us.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.





In modern society, movies and televisions are indispensable parts of daily life. Some people may claim that movies and televisions have more positive effect than negative effect on the way young people behave. Some other people hold the opposite view about that. However in my opinion, to some extends, the advantages of the effect of movies and televisions for behaviors of youngsters out weight the disadvantages.



First and foremost, as the development of society, there are more and more educational programs appearing on our televisions. For example, in my country, there is a television program called Celebrity, which introduces some great celebrities in the history of China and record their legends by watching several old pictures and documents. By learning a lot of good virtues from the ancient celebrities and understanding the valuable traditional culture, our young adults can gain much more knowledge from this program which became increasing prevalent nowadays than that in the textbooks. So from the example above we can easily reason that educational programs in the televisions have some benefits in young people.

Furthermore, with the rapidly development of technology, movies and televisions can broaden our horizon to comprehensive the different culture and events about other countries. Enjoying all kinds of foreign television programs or some foreign movies, youngsters are able to come to visit various places in the world through the movies and the televisions which would help them use diverse angles to see the world and then affect their mind and behaviors. Take me for instance, apart from doing exercise in the outdoor, when I have free time, no matter go to cinemas or just at home, I like watching movies, especially foreign movies. To watch foreign story films such as ForrestGump, The Sound Of Music and Once Upon a Time in America, I could know about the local customs and culture and even some life philosophy. To enjoy such foreign science fiction films as Star Wars, Transformers and Spider-Man, I came to visit a fantastic world and learn a few of knowledge which cannot appear on textbooks.

Admittedly, certain movies and televisions have negative effect on behaviors of young people. Many violent contents, which would harm the mind and behavior of youngsters, may arise in films and television programs. Besides, an increasing number of entertainment programs appear in our sight that would make the youngsters imitate the popular stars and impact the normal study life. If our government and institutes could not supervise the entire movie and television industry well, these movies and televisions would have adverse impact on young people. In consideration of the most movies and television programs have little negative effect, so why not watch as many good films and televisions as we are young?



From what have been discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion that the positive effect of movies and televisions outstrip the negative effect of that.

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都说好作文要字数多，可是我觉得这是相对的？别一味的追求字数多吧。。。。我看范文里面310个字，照样有5分的啊。。。。。