写作小分队第三期 今天新人加入 为9.23 而战 基础差 求猛拍

hdf1990

刚才前缀没有选 重发 今天开始加入小分队  找到队伍 找到方向了 作文不能在十几分了！！！！！求监督 求拍砖

hdf1990

第一篇  9.4独立写作


Some people believe that an efficient leader will always try to make everyone feel that he is in part of a decision making. I agree. Since an efficient leader must be responsible for his company. The relationship between the leader and other employees and the belongingness of the employees are two crucial factors for a successful company. Therefore, an efficient leader will always try to make everyone feel that he is in part of a decision making.

Firstly, by trying to make others feel that they take part in decision making can promote the relationship between the leader and group members. Because if an efficient leader can listen carefully to his group members’ ideas and adopt their advice that is beneficial to the group, the group members will feel respected and have a sense of achievement. In this case, the work will be done much easier，because the group that the leader leads can work more cooperatively. Take the case of my own experience; I am working as a departent minister in our college’s Students Union. There is once time when my team and I were planning a new item. I accepted one of my team members’ creative ideas, then they become more active and we worked within a good atomsphere.

Secondly, it can increase the belongingness of the group if members feel involved them in the decision making. There is no doubt that people doing their own things much more careful than doing other people’s things. For instance, Tom, a friend of mine, working in a company that develops some APPs for users of iphone, told me that his leader always let him participate the most core item, and he feel that he belongs the company and has more energy to work for his leader.

In conclusion, an efficient leader will always try to make everyone feel that he is in part of a decision making in order that the company can succeed.

hdf1990

9.4 综合写作

The reading passage is about the issue that fuel-cell engines because of several advantages will soon replace internal-combustion engines. The professor in the lecture focuses on the same issue. The professor admits that internal-combustion engines produce some pollution and petroleum is a finite resourse. However, the professor thinks that the fuel-cell engines cannot solve those problems.

Firstly, the reading material noted that petroleum is a finite resourse, which is one of the main problems of internal-combustion engines. The professor agrees with the statement about petroleum. However, the professor thinks that the fuel-cell engines are not good replacements. Because the sourse of  hydrogen are gas and water，which have difficult in producing and storing .The conditions that deal with them are too strict.


In addition, the author of the reading passage thinks that fuel-cell engines can solve some pollution problems. However, the professor in the lecture argues that buring coals and oils will produce much more pollution.

Finally, the reading passage noted that fuel-cell engines would be economically. Since the cost of operating a fuel-cell engine is less than the cost of operating a internal-combustion. However, the speaker thinks that fuel-cell engines are expensive, because they are made by a kind of precious metal. There are no other cheaper materials that can replace this metal.

jijismile

9.4 综合写作

The reading passage is about the issue that fuel-cell engines because of several advantages will soon replace internal-combustion engines. The professor in the lecture focuses on the same issue. The professor admits that internal-combustion engines produce some pollution and petroleum is a finite resourse resource. However, the professor thinks that the fuel-cell engines cannot solve those problems.

Firstly, the reading material noted that petroleum is a finite resourse resource, which is one of the main problems of internal-combustion engines. The professor agrees with the statement about petroleum. However, the professor thinks that the fuel-cell engines are not good replacements. Because the sourse source of hydrogen are gas and water，which have difficult in producing and storing（这么写可能会歧义，改为 and hydrogen is hard to be produced and stored in liquid如何）.The conditions that deal with them are too strict.


In addition, the author of the reading passage thinks that fuel-cell engines can solve some pollution problems. However, the professor in the lecture argues that buring burning coals and oils will produce much more pollution.（这段没有抓住professor的主要意思，in order to get pure hydrogen, purification process must be necessary, but without using coals or oils it could not be finished.）




Finally, the reading passage noted that fuel-cell engines would be economically. Since the cost of operating a fuel-cell engine is less than the cost of operating an internal-combustion engine. However, the speaker thinks that fuel-cell engines are expensive, because they are made byof a kind of precious metal. There are no other cheaper materials that can replace this metal.



第二条原因没有说清楚，其他都还好，个别小错误，看了第一条才知道原来自己没有听出来是储存的问题！

hdf1990

thank you  你托福已经104了 还要考？？

jijismile

谁说我托福104了？

hdf1990

你之前发的帖子啊 说拿到offer了

jijismile

哦，那是我女朋友的 她在rice university，我现在也准备考试，就先用她的ID了  
我看到你给我改评的作文了，呵呵，我还真没学过gmat啊

hdf1990

原来如此啊   我基础很差的 之前复习一段时间GMAT 好好看了看语法  对阅读写作还是有帮助的

jijismile

我也很差，主要是好多年都没有学过英语了，语法什么的完全不行，一起努力吧！~  还有就是如果一个man 多大的勇气敢用jijismile当id使啊！~呵呵