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Joanna0225

2012年7月12日 独立
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that colleges or universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working.


【结构】
一、表明态度：Agree
二、原因：
1. 学校应该教会学生如何写简历、如何搜寻工作岗位、如何面试等基本技能以帮助学生找到更好的工作
2. 学生应该在工作前具备基本的职场知识，以免在工作岗位上走弯路
3. 通过实习等机会让学生提前体会职场氛围，实践所学知识
3. 有些人认为不需要这方面的课程因为上大学的目的不是为了找工作而是为了开拓视野，获取知识，但我认为需要这方面的课程，因为大部分的学生在完成学业后还是会选择直接参加工作的
三、总结：Agree


【正文】
It is definitely true that colleges give students the chance to acquire the knowledge of their majors. But it is necessary to consider if students should also be prepared before they enter into workplace. As for me, I prefer to take more courses about taking a job before I start working.

Colleges should make students capable of the basic skills of finding jobs, including how to write an exquisite resume, how to seek a proper position and how to accomplish an impressive interview. Those are essential but very important for students to get decent jobs. If colleges can’t assist students with these skills, students will feel confused and have to ask for help by themselves which will be tedious, complicated and time-consuming.

In addition, college students should be able to take jobs which means they need some general professional knowledge (此处想表达“职场技能”，不知道是否合适) to get themselves ready, such as how to treat colleagues, how to communicate with boss and what moral disciplines they should follow. These situations are barely met by students in their college lives, therefore students need to take courses in case that they make huge mistakes after they get jobs.

Fortunately, some universities have already realized the significance of preparing students for the future and given students internship between semesters. Internship is a rare chance to experience what real work is like and take what they have learnt on class into practice.

Some people may, nevertheless, insist that students attend colleges in order to broaden their horizons and gain knowledge, not to get jobs. However, from my point of view, most college graduates choose to get jobs immediately after they attain diploma. Thus, students need to learn how to find jobs and how to do better in workplace at the same time of studying their majors.

Considering the main mission of colleges is to foster excellent talents for our society, I believe it is better to offer more courses to prepare students for their future before they go to work.

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kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

It is definitely true that colleges give students the chance to acquire the knowledge of their majors. But（其实这个不是转折就用also就行了） it is necessary to consider if students should also be prepared before they enter into（我怎么都觉得enter和into重复额） workplace. As for me, I prefer to take more courses about taking a job before I start working.

Colleges should make students capable of the basic skills of finding jobs（make the basci skills of finding jobs capbale for students?）, which including how to write an exquisite resume, how to seek a proper position and how to accomplish an impressive interview. Those are essential but(and?) very important for students to get decent jobs. If colleges can’t assist students with these skills, students will feel confused and have to ask for help by themselves which will be tedious, complicated and time-consuming.

In addition, college students should be able to take jobs which means they need some general professional knowledge (此处想表达“职场技能”，不知道是否合适) to get themselves ready, such as how to treat colleagues, how to communicate with boss and what moral disciplines they should follow. These situations are barely met by students in their college lives, therefore students need to take courses in case that they make huge mistakes after they get jobs.

Fortunately, some universities have already realized the significance of preparing students for the future and given students internship between semesters. Internship is a rare chance to experience what real work is like and take what they have learnt on class into practice.

Some people may, nevertheless, insist that students attend colleges in order to broaden their horizons and gain knowledge, not to get jobs. However, from my point of view, most college graduates choose to get jobs immediately after they attain diploma. Thus, students need to learn how to find jobs and how to do better in workplace at the same time of studying their majors.

Considering the main mission of colleges is to foster excellent talents for our society, I believe it is better to offer more courses to prepare students for their future before they go to work.

后三段不错，整体处理的也很好。对于不确定的词或词组，可以google下，不就可以了么。

Joanna0225

非常感谢！

kchszy061ban

多谢joanna修改作文。 错误真的好多。 嘿嘿。 写完以后我也觉得自己写的是要不要增加课程了。 所以就在小句子里提下工作的什么。不过没处理好。