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沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2012-7-3 02:41:59 | 只看该作者
题目:6月28日(TPO13)  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to solve the problem of the present and the future, people should review the past

"In our life, we will encounter different kinds of problems. No one's life is always running smoothly; no one's life does not experience strife and conflict; and no one's life does not endure the period when he or she feels confused and frustrated. What will you do when you face these troublesome problems? There are different suitable methods to handle these troubles. Maybe you can ask your friend to give you an advice; you can also consult the teacher, parents or professional experts in the areas; or you can just try to solve the problem according to the sense of your perspective. Whatever method you try, I want to remind you that do not forget the method to review the past. Reviewing the past will give your numerous benefits.
A problem will always make one feel frustrated and worrisome. When your encounter the problem, I recommend you to Retrieve your memory in your brain and select a similar problem you endure at some time in your life. Believe it or not, people will be more efficient when they handle the similar problems. It is easy to recall the circumstance when your encounter a difficult problem in your last exam. If you do the same practice in your last assignment, you will be more confident to work out the test.
Reviewing the past will make one become more mature. As a person grows up, he will encounter large number of problem. If he is mindful enough, he will learn abundantly from experience, which is helpful to solve a new problem. Even facing a total new problem, he will make himself calm down, integrate the lesson that he has learned from past experience, and then find out a suitable method to solve the brand new problem. SO treat your precious experience more careful, do not just ignore it as a obsolete stuff. After all we can accumulate the valuable lesson from it.
Maybe you will say that reviewing the past will hamper our creativity to solve the problem. Admittedly, one who abides by the stereotype experience is lifeless while he is alive. A stereotype man's life is dull and spiritless. However learning and reviewing the past will also spark the creative and genius idea, which can make a person more thoughtful and deliberate. To retrieve the information in your memory and combine them together to generate a creative idea will also save lots of time. In the sense, so we can say that reviewing the past frequently will make one's life full of vigor and vitality.
To sum up, when you encounter a problem, whether it is a normal one or a brand new one, I suggest you to retrieve your memory and then find out an appropriate method to fix it before you ask a help from other persons. If you form a habit to summary the past frequently, you will benefit the best.
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2012-7-3 02:42:47 | 只看该作者
题目:6月30日(TPO15)  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the loss of friends

With the urbanization development in China and the globalization in the world, today it is very common to  
see that some of your friends lived in the same surroundings with you will have to leave you and go to  
another city or country. Some persons may feel frustrated and sorrowful and sometimes they may even sob  
and weep when they know that they will have to leave their intimate friends. As for me, however, I feel  
more positive to that circumstance. Even more, AS a youth, I am anxious to leave my hometown and stay in  
another city. You might call it unfeeling, but that was the way I felt. The reason why I feel in that way  
is as following:
Thanks to the modern transportation, well build internet and telephone net, and well organized society,  
Nowadays, we can communicate each other more conveniently compared to the times when the only method to  
Communicate information with each other is via writing letters. After I graduated from university, I found a job in  
another city which is far from my hometown where most of my old friends stay. After I settled down in the  
new city, I found that the connection between my old friends and me become more stronger. They will ask me  
numerous questions, such as what kind of life in the city is or how the local people behave. We talk via  
QQ, a tool of online chatting and we call each other more frequently than when we are in the same city.  
When I want to see my friends or when my friends want to see me, I will invite them to visit my new city,  
and take them to have a sightseeing. We can meet each other easily because of the high speed train  
operation in China.
Moreover, I will never feel alone when I stay in a new city. I can join into the local life very quickly,  
learning the local language and behaving the same way as the native people. At the very beginning of the  
life when I come to a new city, I will have more time to make myself came down and think about the life in  
the future, and it is not easy to do this when my surrounding are full of talktive friends. After I am  
familiar with the new city, I can make new friend in the city, sharing their opinion about life and  
exchange idea about various cultures. In the new city, I can dive myself into the unique culture and enjoy  
the special local cuisine. I can learn more and experience more in a new city when I am young.

Admittedly, in a new city which is far from my hometown, the opportunities  to have the face to face talking  
with my old friends are less than when I stay in my hometown. However, with the help of various tool for  
communication, the distance will not hamper and hurt our relationship. Considering that we can make a new  
friends in a new city and enjoy a different way of life, I would like to stay in a new city when I am  
young.

To sum up, moving to a new city is not always a bad thing for me. As a youth, I would like to experience  
more and learn more about different life and cultures. After all, we are not bound to live in a  
stereotype type of life, and we can try to live in new lifestyle which will help to broaden our vision of life.
地板
 楼主| 发表于 2012-7-3 02:43:40 | 只看该作者
题目 7月1日(TPO16) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Rather than help their children do schoolwork, parents should encourage their children do work independently.

Have you ever face a pile of schoolwork? Have you ever encounter a difficulty problem in your assignment? Or have you ever experience the circumstance that you have to stay up to finish the schoolwork. When you have faced these conditions what you will do, to ask a help from your parents or to handle them by yourself? In my view of point, I will choose the latter one. It is a good habit to do one's schoolwork independently, and one will benefit a lot from forming the habit.
Under the social and economic stress, fathers and even mothers have to engage themselves in the business, and the day when most of mothers stayed at home to treat their children will not come back again. After a tired day of working, parents will feel tired. To keep a physical vigor and vitality, many parents will choose to do excises in the gym house, or they may just make themselves fall asleep early to reserve the energy for the next day. When you put yourself in your parents place, you will recognize that it is better to finish the schoolwork by yourself rather than ask for a help from your parents.
Moreover, doing schoolwork independently can enhance one's ability to handle different problems, exploring more deeply to the knowledge and cultivating a sense of self-study which will be more important as one grows up. It is not so hard to recall the circumstance that last time when you feel confused with the tough question, you think and explore hard, and finally you work out it. How joyful it is to conclude the puzzle by yourself. The most important is that you will never forget the method and process to conquer the complicated question. Doing one's schoolwork independently is helpful to build up one's confidence, thus enhancing the ability to handle other difficulty problems.
Relying on the parents to do the schoolwork may hamper and hurt one's creativity and imagination. When one faces some problem, he just calls for help from the parents without trying to explore the question more thoroughly. If one forms this habit, what will happen in the latter test or the future study when the parents are no longer able to help him or her. Obviously, he will lose the sense to handle new question independently, and he cannot surpass his parents' intellectual level. So it is not a wise way to rely your schoolwork on your parents. After all we will encounter different problems which are beyond our parents’ ability to handle in the future.
From what has discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that it is better to do your schoolwork independently, which is helpful for our parents to save lots of time to reserve their energy. The most important is that it will enhance our sense of creativity and imagination, thus helping to build up our confidences.
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-7-3 04:14:07 | 只看该作者
题目:7月3日(TPO18)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave

After a busy day of study, what you will do when you arrive home. Some students will choose to turn on computers and play games or they will continue to study online, while most of students will choose to watch TV. With the fierce competition of TV operators, nowadays the Tv SET has more and more channels for people to choose. You name the theme, and you will find it out among the various programs. It is so popular to watch TV and the Tv set is so attractive that we had to consider the effect it will bring on our younger. Just as the saying goes "every coin has too sights". When we enjoy the joyful and fun time that the TV has given to us, we should also appraise their disadvantages. After I compared the positive effects with the negative ones, I can say it more safely that the programs or movies on TV will do more harm to the children's behave.
To earn a big profit in making the the movies, the film producer will choose the violation or pornography theme in their product which will be more attractive among the people who want to excite their nerve. This is why the action films are full of our screen. However, we know that the younger people do not get the sense to distinguish the good from bad stuff. They are born to be good actors, and after they see the action in the movies, they will imitate it in the reality, which will cause bad effects on their hearts if we do not guide them appropriately. In the 1990s in china, the cinemas were full of movies which perform the violation themes. The crime rate was also high at that time. A survey about the youth crime rate indicates that the crime rate in younger has highly positive correlation with the violation film number.
On the other hand, TV with the romantic and ideal themes will make the children to believe that they live in a paradise. When the reality contradicts what they have imagine in their thought which is influenced by the ideal themes in movies, they will try to escape reality and hide themselves in the cherish illusions. As they grow up, they will have to pay more time to rebuild the reality world in their hearts and they will have to experience more frustrated and depression. Maybe we can conclude that too much TV times will make Tom a dull boy.
Even worse than that, TV hours will rob the valuable studying time from children. For a younger person, the most important thing to do is to manage their time to learn more things or build up an interest in certain field. Spending lots of time on TV means that they have to sacrifice their time in study. Admittedly, movies or television can bring information which has not been filtered to the children. However, we can get more nutritional knowledge from reading books or listening more lectures.
To sum up, watching TV not only will bring more negative effect on the youth, but also it is a waste of time. To help younger people grow in a more harmonious atmosphere, it is better to encourage the children to reading more books than watching more movies.
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-7-4 00:34:23 | 只看该作者
题目:7月4日(TPO19)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past people eat more healthy food than what people have nowadays

Thanks to the modernization of agriculture and industry, humankind has made a big progress in the food supply. Taking china for example, it has generally solved the problem of hunger and exposure and the people live more rich lives than ever before.  However we still have to face a big problem, the increasing food unsafe issue. We have taken many measures to prevent and eliminate the problem, but none of them take a great effect.
With the modernization of agriculture, while we double the output of rice per acre, we also have to bear the loss of the nutrition in food. White rice is the world's most popular form of rice. In modern milling process, many nutrition elements in the rice may be removed. As a result, people who eat a poor diet based on white rice may not get enough Vitamins A. The World Health Organization once did a survey about the while rice, it found out that Vitamins A deficiency is a big problem,  especially in Asia and Africa. Halt of the children with the problem will die with one year of losing their sights.
There are many other factors that will influence the food safety. To increase the output of vegetable and fruit, many chemical fertilizer and additive have been brought to the modern farm. The producer only care about how to maximize their profit in growing and processing the food. To meet their aim, they will use more agricultural chemicals to make the vegetable grow well, and they will also adopt the chemical additive to keep the food look fresh and get a nice taste. While they doing this, the chemical contamination which will cause human sick and disease will remain in the vegetable or fruit. When people eat it, they will get sick.
Admittedly, food safety commission has paid more attention to food safety than ever before. They adopt various strategies to guarantee the food safety. They will lay down strict rules for the manufacturer to follow; they will install the monitor cameras in the factories to improve the food security. or they will routine or temporarily test and scan the quality of food in the supermarket. However, one of the big problems when people get sick from food is that what did the people eat that make them sick. Even more, most of the tasks carried out by government or health care organization only receive limited effect compared to more and more intense food unsafe situation we face.
From what has discussed above, we can safely conclude that now the food we eat are becoming unhealthier than before. There will be a long way for humankind to completely solve the issue of food safety.
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发表于 2012-7-4 07:52:09 | 只看该作者
7月3日(TPO18)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave

After a busy day of study, what you will do when you arrive home. Some students will choose to turn on computers and play games or they will continue to study online, while most of students will choose to watch TV. With the fierce competition of TV operators, nowadays the Tv SET has more and more channels for people to choose. You name the theme, and you will find it out among the various programs. It is so popular to watch TV and the Tv set is so attractive that we had to consider the effect it will bring on our younger. Just as the saying goes "every coin has too sights". When we enjoy the joyful and fun time that the TV has given to us, we should also appraise their disadvantages. After I compared the positive effects with the negative ones, I can say it more safely that the programs or movies on TV will do more harm to the children's behave.题目给的是the young但是这段T写的是students和children包子也不知道准确来说可以不 不过开头还是很好哒

To earn a big profit in making the the movies, the film producers will choose the violation or pornography theme in their product which will be more attractive among the people who want to excite their nerve. This is why the action films are full of our screen. However, we know that the younger people do not get the sense to distinguish the good from bad stuff. They are born to be good actors, and after they see the action in the movies, they will imitate it in the reality, which will cause bad effects on their hearts感觉像心脏病的意思哈their pure heart can be contamonate if we do not guide them appropriately. In the 1990s in china, the cinemas were full of movies which perform the violation themes. The crime rate was also high at that time. A survey about the youth crime rate indicates that the crime rate in younger has highly positive correlation with the violation film number. survey举例很好啊

On the other hand, TV with the romantic and ideal themes will make the children to believe that they live in a paradise. When the reality contradicts what they have imagine in their thought which is influenced by the ideal themes in movies, they will try to escape reality and hide themselves in the cherish illusions. As they grow up, they will have to pay more time换成被动更地道些~ to rebuild the reality world in their hearts and they will have to experience more frustrated and depression. Maybe we can conclude that too much TV times will make Tom a dull boy.这个TS蛮特别 包子想不到...

Even worse than that, TV hours will rob the valuable studying time from children. For a younger person, the most important thing to do is to manage their time to learn more things or build up an interest in certain field. Spending lots of time on TV means that they have to sacrifice their time in study. Admittedly, movies or television can bring information which has not been filtered to the children. However, we can get more nutritional knowledge from reading books or listening more lectures.让步可以重起一段 显得逻辑更严密 论述更准确

To sum up, watching TV not only will bring more negative effect on the youth, but also it is a waste of time. To help younger people grow in a more harmonious atmosphere, it is better to encourage the children to reading more books than watching more movies.

观点很好很好 可以只写两个观点 最后一段让步论述
表达的时候还是有些中式英语啊 注意哦
其他都蛮好~
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 楼主| 发表于 2012-7-5 04:33:15 | 只看该作者
谢谢包子同学的意见和修改
9#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-7-5 04:34:19 | 只看该作者
题目7月5日(TPO20)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? High school students should take a course on basic economics.

Our lives fill with various economic issues. When you go to bookstore to buy a book, you are connected to the economic; when you resister your new semester and pay your tuition, you will involve in it; when you open a new account in the bank to deposit your money, you are engaging the economic transaction. we can safely say that economics will happen in our daily life and  we will accompany with it for the whole life. It is so popular that we should pay more attention to it. Even among high students, I support the idea that the high school had better add a basic economics in the curriculum. The sub-points to support my point are as following:

To begin with, the high school students should learn to judge and manage the economic issues that happened on their daily lives. Nowadays in china, most of the families will give their children a weekly or monthly allowance. SO children will gain the responsibility in handling money. In this case, if the children are blindness to the basic economics, they will not be able to manage the money well, and they do know how to maximize use of the money. On the contrary, if a student understands the basic economic knowledge, he will know the market principle well, and he will know the different definitions between price and cost. When they buy a computer, they will compare the price provided by different vendor, and basing on their basic knowledge, they will finally choose the high cost performance one.

In modern high speed economic development age, a high school student who possesses the sense of economics accommodates himself to the society better than others. We endure a period of economic inflation and the high soaring house cost, we should care more about the economic and know how the economic runs like that way. When the high school student graduates from school, they will face these economic issues. If they know the basic principle of the economic operation, they will solve their trouble more efficiency, and they will have more opportunities to live a better life. Most of all, they are more likely to make a economic plan for their future, such as whether to take a post-graduate degree or whether to join the job, When to buy a house; how much they should save each month for buying an IPHONE at the end the year.

Admittedly, the first and foremost task for a student in high school is to learn the core curricula and get a high GPA, which will decide the admission of pursuing a college degree. However, the basic economics subject will not take up much time in the study. Even more, the new subject will inspire the students to know more knowledge about the economic society, which will encourage them to study hard in their core curricula. So the basic economics should be a critical component of the high school curriculum.

From what we have discussed above, I can safely say that a basic economic subject will benefit more to the high school students. Not only does it help the students to manage and maximize use of the money, but also boarder their economic vision and encourage them to study hard on the core curricula.
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发表于 2012-7-5 18:36:17 | 只看该作者

to T不死 七月4号 独立作文修改

红色为修改部分,高亮为精彩部分

Thanks to the modernization of agriculture and industry, humankind has made a big progress in the food supply. Taking china for example, it has generally solved the problem of hunger and exposure and the people live more rich lives than ever before.  However we still have to face a big problem, the increasing food unsafe issue.(是想说 食品安全问题吧? 我查了一下:food safety problem) We have taken many measures to prevent and eliminate the problem, but none of them take a great effect.


  With the modernization of agriculture, while we double the output of rice per acre, we also have to bear the loss of the nutrition in food. White rice is the world's most popular form of rice. In modern milling process, many nutrition elements in the rice may be removed. As a result, people who eat a poor diet based on white rice may not get enough Vitamins A. The World Health Organization once did a survey about the while rice, it found out that Vitamins A deficiency is a big problem,  especially in Asia and Africa. Halt of the children with the problem will die with one year of losing their sights.(不通顺,die with one year 这个短语有点不知所云哈,还有从逻辑上讲,死于失明,有点说不通)

There are many other factors that will influence the food safety. To increase the output of vegetable and fruit, many chemical fertilizer and additive have been brought to the modern farm. The producer only care about how to maximize their profit in growing and processing the food. To meet their aim, they will use more agricultural chemicals to make the vegetable grow well, and they will also adopt the chemical additive to keep the food look fresh and get a nice taste. While they doing this, the chemical contamination which will (建议删去,因为后面有个will,而且删去后,现在时表示一种客观事实,会具有说服力些)cause human sick and disease will remain in the vegetable or fruit. When people eat it, they will get sick.

Admittedly, food safety commission has paid more attention to food safety than ever before. They adopt various strategies to guarantee the food safety. They will lay down strict rules for the manufacturer to follow; they will install the monitor cameras in the factories to improve the food security. or they will routine or temporarily test and scan the quality of food in the supermarket. However, one of the big problems when people get sick from food is that what did the people eat that make them sick. (亲,这句话,我是真心有点晕,get sick from food? 虾米意思? 还有陈述语气中,应该为what people eat)Even more, most of the tasks carried out by government or health care organization only receive limited effect compared to (与···比较 compare with )more and more intense food unsafe(食品安全问题,修改同上) situation we face.
From what has discussed above, we can safely conclude that now the food we eat are becoming unhealthier than before. There will be a long way for humankind to completely solve the issue of food safety


文章总体流畅数据例子翔实,值得学习哈~!
可是,这篇文章强调了食品安全问题,最好再紧接着说,食品安全问题会造成人们吃的食物不健康。
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