6.29 综合

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The reading material makes the point that rare and important fossils are now being sold to private ownership for millions of dollars, which is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public. However, the professor demonstrates a contradictory idea that though fossils trading has some disadvantages, the benefits of commercial fossil trade overweight the disadvantages.
To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that fossil trade makes it harder for the public to see fossils, leading to a decline in public interest in fossils, the professor says that it is the trade that makes great opportunities to the public enjoy the fossil exhibition and people have great exposure to those fossils. For example, public schools and libraries are able to buy these fossils and exhibit them to the public.
In addition, the writer shows that scientists are likely to lose access to some of the most important fossils and thereby miss out on potentially crucial discoveries about extinct life forms. The speaker, on the other hand, holds a different view by saying that scientists will not lose the access to the fossils. All the fossils will be firstly identified by scientists, even some of them will be examined and tested by experts before merchants purchase them.
Finally, the author states that commercial fossil collectors often destroy valuable scientific evidence associated with the fossils they unearth, which challenges the standpoint made by the lecturer who says that if the commercial fossil trade does not exist, less fossils would be discovered by scientists with the information of location and environments.

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6.29 综合
The reading material makes the point that rare and important fossils are now being sold to private ownership for millions of dollars, which is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public. However, the professor demonstrates a contradictory idea that though fossils trading trade has some disadvantages, the benefits of commercial fossil trade overweight the disadvantages.

To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that fossil trade makes it harder for the public to see fossils, leading to a decline in public interest in fossils, the professor says that it is the trade that makes greater opportunities to the public to enjoy the fossil exhibition and people have great exposure to those fossils. For example, public schools and libraries are able to buy these fossils and exhibit them to the public. 很好啊 说理很流畅~

In addition, the writer shows that scientists are likely to lose access to some of the most important fossils and thereby miss out on potentially crucial discoveries about extinct life forms. The speaker, on the other hand, holds a different view by saying that scientists will not lose the access to the fossils. All the fossils will be firstly identified by scientists, even some of them will be examined and tested by experts before merchants purchase them.感觉对文章的叙述有些多了 重点应该在听力内容

Finally, the author states that commercial fossil collectors often destroy valuable scientific evidence associated with the fossils they that unearth, which challenges the standpoint made by the lecturer who says that if the commercial fossil trade does not exist, less fossils would be discovered by scientists with the information of location and environments.

总体很好啊 语言简练高效 学习学习
小错误机会有 对听力侧重多一些就更好啦~

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Tpo13 综合写作

框架修改和意见



The reading material makes the point that rare and important fossils are now being sold to private ownership for millions of dollars, which is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public. However, the professor demonstrates a contradictory idea that though fossils trading trade has some disadvantages, the benefits of commercial fossil trade overweightthe disadvantages.

To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that fossil trade makes it harder for the public to see fossils, leading to a decline in public interest in fossils, the professor says （contradicts）that it is the trade that makes greater opportunities to the public to enjoy the fossil exhibition and people have greater exposure to those fossils. For example, public schools and libraries are able to buy these fossils and exhibit them tofor the public.


In addition, the writerpassage shows that scientists are likely to lose access to some of the most important fossils and thereby miss out on potentially crucial discoveries about extinct life forms. The speaker professor， on the other hand, holds a different view by saying that scientists will not lose the access to the really important fossils. All the fossils will be firstly identified by scientists, even some of thembecause in order to to identify fossilsthey will be examined and tested by experts before merchants purchase them.（理解有少许偏差）

Finally, the authorprofessor states that commercial fossil collectors often destroy valuable scientific evidence associated with the fossils when theythat unearth them, which challenges the standpoint made by the lecturer who says that （这个写的是相当的到位~~）if the commercial fossil trade does not exist, less fossils would be found，then many fossils would simply go completely undiscovered，needless to say the information of location and environments.



值得肯定的是已经有框架了~~~这个没想的那么容易掌握，对吧？大部分的知识点能够写出来，那么大部分的分数也就到手了~下面的工作就是熟练的运用框架，并进一步完善知识点。加油！！

不过仍然有些问题：

1.综合写作非常关键的地方时突出passage和lecture的关系（同意还是不同意），虽然简单，但是每段都要体现，这是采分点。

2.适当采用自己的语言转述（比较难呀~~~）

3.注意理解的正确性。（更难呀~~）

总之，写的还是不错的，能看出作者很用心。一起努力吧。