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Final exam is coming! There is still a lot of knowledge I have not reviewed yet. Whom should I turn to for help? In school time, it is not strange for us to hear that kind of worrying words. How should students solve this problem? Find a partner to study together.(这句话放在这里感觉不合适) However, who is better, a friend or a tutor？From my point of view, it is better to ask for assistance from a tutor.

First of all, tutors are more experienced and they are the authority of the certain subject. What is more, it is tutors who design the papers but not our friends. Suppose you raise a question for your friends.(这是一个没有完成的句子吧？..) Unfortunately, no one can answer that question nor they answer it with an opaque number,可以句号结束这句了。 and finally, still, you have to turn to your tutor for help. If it is your tutor who is the first you ask for answer, a large amount of time could be saved to review other subjects or to find some more tough questions. Assistance from tutor is not only of high accuracy but also efficient.

In addition, students are not tutors anyway. It is the words from tutors that can inspire you. 文章用了好多强调句..用多了感觉就失去意义，反而有冗杂的感觉了Usually, we can hear stories from our friends that after having only one class from Mr. Smith, Jo comes to be the top students of the whole grade! Though it is hard to imagine, that is where the intelligence of tutors lies.(这个例子感觉很牵强...) With mere several words or equations, the question becomes so clear and seems could not be easier, even the related one is no longer difficult to finish. When preparing for exams, time is limited, only with the concrete and inspiring words from tutors can we complete in finishing all the review work.

Maybe it is comfortable to talk to a friend and maybe study with a friend will not be so boring. Anyway, for me, it is the help from tutors that makes me feel confident and it eases my anxious. In all, It is better to ask help from your tutor when you find it is hard for you to pass the exam.

可能题目比较难写，包子字数最好再多一点嘿嘿
注意句子间的联系，可以尝试长短句运用~

包子不包子

5.10独立~
不知道为什么 越写越没底啊 求狠拍！！

In the modern world, situation is changing almost every day. New technologies, fresh market theories and brand-new human resources market are emerging continually. Consequently, competition in every filed is of extreme tension, especially, in the economy world. For each company, in order to make the greatest profits for their development, from my point of view, the most important investment should not only put to improve the efficiency and proficiency of its employees.

To begin with, a big company should pay enough attention and investment into keeping pace with the new things. As I have mentioned before, new things are emerging up in a high speed today, which cannot be compared with any other time in the history. Therefore, it is of great importance to track the changes in the market. Take Nokia for an example, this big company puts 15% of its found every year into the investigation of the market changes and new commands of consumers. Consequently, various colored, special functioned phones are created by the company every season, which is certainly for the necessity of the market. Imagine if the company only pushes its employees to produce thousands of old fashion products, how can the company keep living in the competitive economy world.

For another point of same value, make plan is not only useful for individual, but also will assist a company to gain great profits. Only with a clear understanding of the goals, can the company realize the next step of the investment work. Whether it is better to put effort into the enhancing of the function system or should the company change its production method. Once the company invests in doing research in accomplishing its annual plan, an actual guidance could probably be created to lead the company to a brighter future. Or all the thing that a company can do is struggling without direction and no one can pull it out of darkness.

Others may say that how can a company manage to achieve its aim with groups of lazy stuffs? Investment could be put into the improving of the efficiency of its employee but not the most important one. Besides that, market research and new technology investigations are waiting for the found to make devotion for the company.

To sum up, the most important investment of the company cannot merely be put into its employees. Due to the rapid conversion in modern economy world, it is safe to draw the conclusion that keeping track with the changes in the market and develop annual plans should be paid ample attention and investment to.

包子不包子

5.11 独立~
Family and friends to a person is what water to fish. People's life without families and friends are not complete. It can be understood that the first crucial task for a company is to gain profits. However, to pay employees high salary but require them to stay away from their families and friends is indeed not my preference.

To make the point bright, being separated from family and friend, people cannot live a normal life. Everyone comes up with problems and depression in their life every now and then, when that kind of things happened, an intimate person, friend or family member, is of great necessity rather than colleagues, because they understand and care about us. Courage, assistance and beliefs are provided by them. If that help is not in hand instantly, troubles will not leave, how can employees even spare effort to work? Even the mantel health of employees can be harmed, what can people do if they have a weak body? High salary is of little use now.

In addition, it is not possible for employees to spend all of their time in working with no connection with life. People have to work to make a living, but should not live to work. Enjoying dinner with family and friends after a whole day of busy working, sitting together with close friends to watch a movie at weekend or going on a trip with family in New Year Eve is what life should be like. All study no play makes Jack a dull boy explains the point perfectly. No life, only work, where can money be spent?  Even a millionaire prefers family to his money, needless to talk about normal people like me. Therefore, working is not the entire life despite of the high salary is offered.

Others may against that lots of things cannot be done if not enough money can be collected. Again, people, at least myself, do not live for money. They can do nothing when I am sad, when I need comfort, when I eager to talk to someone who is in close relation with me. High salary is indeed the passage to materials, to luxury life some people longing for. However, under no circumstances, can money bring a family to us.

To conclude, what a person need is life, not work in their whole living time. Compared with merely high salary, I will absolutely choose to stay with my friends and family. They are the engine of my life, which brings me braveness to carry on but not the money.

包子不包子

5.12 独立

Teamwork has become an indispensable part in people's working pattern gradually. Seldom can we see that Noble Prize is for only one person. Usually, it is the reorganization of the achievements in an entire team. Therefore, succeed in working in teams makes up an undeniable part of a person' success. Is it possible for people who cannot accept criticism succeed working in teams? From my point of view, it is not realistic. I will demonstrate my reasons.

To begin with, criticism's appearing in a team cannot be avoided, like people have to face difficulties in their life. If those things cannot be avoid, no excuse for us not to accept and make adaptation for them. The teamwork of designing software explains this point well. Two kinds of job positions in designing software, creating and testing, often has friction. People who creating software are usually imaginative and confident about their work so that bugs in their software cannot be fond easily by the creators, while people who does the testing work is critical and it is their job to identify the weakness of the software and give criticism to people who creates the software. In order to put the best functioned software into the market and make personal success, creating people have to accept criticism from their colleagues to improve and perfect their software work.

In addition, accept the criticism from others is a helpful for achieving higher standard. Bitter criticism is always helpful for your achievement; an old Chinese saying goes like that. Indeed criticisms does not make people feel comfortable, they usually against our will and always try to pick annoying mistakes from our work. However, have you think about the cheerfulness when you improved the work by eliminating the mistakes rising by others in your work? Besides, no one is perfect; people make mistakes every now and then. Criticism from team members is a channel for us to be perfect and to be succeeded. Accept them will assist people to success in teamwork.

Others may announce that not all criticism is helpful, maybe some of them come from jealous or envy. While, only after you accept those criticisms can you consider about their usefulness and accuracy. Never accepting, never listening to others opinion, needless to talk about being successful, how can this kind of people working in a team and communicate with his or hers colleagues?

According to the reasons displayed above, it is safe to draw the conclusion that people who cannot accept the criticism cannot succeed in working in a team.

张小心

5.11 independent writing 小心改
写在前面：鉴于题目是JJ，并不是完整的题目，个人觉得JJ题目的描述是有偏差的，是不是“Some jobs pay a high salary but require employees to leave their families. Some jobs pay less but close to families. Which job would you prefer? Why?”更make sence 一点？仅仅是一己之见哈。要不然就是agree or disagree with the company's requirement of leaving their family and friends with high salary? 反正这个题目老怪了。

Family and friends to a person is what water to fish.People's life without families and friends are is not complete. It can be understood that the first crucial task for a company is to gain profits. However, to pay employees high salary but require （木有主语，若解释to do 名词格做主题的话，也不能解释后面的require的主语）them to stay away from their families and friends is indeed not my preference.

To make the point bright, being separated（语法里讲being+被动语态都有点awkard，直接用separated就好） from family and friends, people cannot live a normal life. Everyone comes up with problems and depression in their life every now and then. When that kind of things happened, an intimate person, friend or family member, is of great necessity rather than colleagues, because they understand and care about us. Courage, assistance and beliefs are provided by them. If that help is not in hand instantly, troubles will not leave.How can employees even spare effort to work? Even the mantel health of employees can be harmed. What can people do if they have a weak body? High salary is of little use now.

In addition, it is not possible( impossible ) for employees to spend all of their time in working with no connection with life. People have to work to make a living, but should not live to work. Enjoying dinner with family and friends after a whole day of busy working, sitting together with close friends to watch a movie at weekend or going on a trip with family in New Year Eve is what life should be like. All study no play makes Jack a dull boy explains the point perfectly. No life, only work, where(how/ on which) can money be spent? Even a millionaire prefers family to his money, needless to talk about normal people like me. Therefore, working is not the entire life despite ofthe fact that the high salary is offered.

Others may against that lots of things cannot be done if not enough money can be collected. Again, people, at least myself, do not live for money. TheyMoney can do nothing when I am sad, when I need comfort, or when I eager to talk to someone who is in close relation with me. High salary is indeed the passage to materials, to luxury life some people longing for. However, under no circumstances, can money bring a family to us.
Dear, 此段没有TS。

To conclude, what a person need is life, not work in their whole living time. Compared with merely high salary, I will absolutely choose to stay with my friends and family. They are the engine of my life, which brings me braveness to carry on(move forward)butnotthe while money does not.

总结：
1. 因为题目本身的原因，第一段和最后一段的论题不一样了。到底是站在企业角度还是站在雇员角度来讲preference?
2. 例证不够充分。
3. 有画龙点睛之笔，有些句子用得很地道。学习了！

包子不包子

5.13 独立
又感觉不好写 例证啊例证
批改的童鞋辛苦了！


Different attributes belong to various toys of job. There are obvious differences between an artist and a super movie star. Their working environment, working properties and goals of their job lead to the vast gap between their job effective. We cannot jump to the conclusion that my job has more effect on my happiness than my social life. It depends on my occupation to some extent.

If I am working like a writer, which means the achievements of my work is the most influential thing to my career rather than my interpersonal ability, my job will produce more impact on my happiness than my social life. As a writer, my success lies in the wide recognition from the public of my novels or articles. Once I receive that recognition, it is normal for me to be happy and say' oh, I am so glad that people love my books and it pays my hard working'. Maybe the sense of happiness and satisfaction will assist me carrying my work even further. All the things mentioned above are related to personal feelings, happiness and satisfaction. How can my social life change due to the achievement in my writing skills? Under no circumstances will I attend parties or feasts in a dramatically increasing number of chances.

On the other hand, the opposite situation appears when I am a celebrity like Lady Gaga. More impacts on my social life will be brought by my job. Imagine the celebrity wearing extremely fancy clothes to meet the queen of U.K. for a formal social event, what will happen? Absolutely, the day after, all the front pages of the major newspaper in U.K. will display the unrespectable attitude of the celebrity to the most important person in their country, and that is far from the end of the story. Maybe all the performance of the celebrity in U.K. will be canceled and famous people and studio in U.K. would rather not to meet the celebrity any more. Less working opportunity and fewer parties or meetings to know new people will also follow. In this way, great impact from my job property has been put into my social life.

To sum up, different types of job cloud lead to opposite influence in social life and the sense of happiness. It all depends. No conclusion so absolute can be reached.

包子不包子

5.14独立

超时了啊啊啊啊啊。。。

Honest, as a virtue of human, has been discussed by thousands of scholars and normal people for centuries. Up till now, people still use their life time to chase for this quality to maintain their relationships with friends .However, is it possible for people to be completely honest with friends? From my point of view, it is impossible.

To begin with, unfortunates in life are inevitable and we need white lies to ease the unfortunate. People are weak in both mantel and physical when they encounter bad fortune. As their friends, no doubt we will pull them out of the darkness or the troubles even though we have to lie to them. Imagine those who has cancer. There exists the possibility for them to recover, only if they believe strongly that the tumor in their body is merely a meat ball. How can they strengthen that kind of belief? With our assist, as a friend, indeed. Apparently, nothing true about their illness can be provided to them but the beautiful lies-it is only a tiny tumor, everything will be okay in several days. Under this situation, a lie overweighs the truth, honest is useless now.

Another point of the same value is that nothing is absolute and to be honest with our friends in a complete way could cause the loss of the relation with a friend. Maybe you just do not want to hurt their feelings by telling the truth. Maybe you want to have a joke with them after a long day of tedious working. Or maybe things happen out of expectation accidently. Life is unpredictable, like the words told to Frost Gump by his mother when he was a little boy, you can never know what taste of chocolate you will have the next time. Due to this ‘disadvantage’ in people's life without exception, to lie or not to be honest can be regarded as a possible approach that enables us to protect the relation with friends. Whether it is a joke or an unintended line, those lies could help us to maintain the relationship with friends.

Some people may announce that if people are not able to be honest with their friends, what will they behave to face their family? Ignore their existence to hide the truth or even do not regard them as your family members? Both of them are not wise choices. At least in certain situation, telling lies can be understood, and it is another thing to lie in other situation such as whether you steal your friends for pocket money. From a possible stand of point, no one can be absolutely honest with friends around him/ her.

In all, to be honest with friends in an absolute way is of least possibility to achieve. For infortune happens in people's life every now and then. Besides, nothing is absolute in the true world, no one can ensure his/hers behavior.

探险者

Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life.
（补充：觉得更准确的表述是 Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does.）
楼主，你好。关于昨天的独立作文，我的理解和你的是一样的，英文的表述是相同的。那么这句话翻译过来是不是这样：工作对个人幸福的影响比你的社交生活对幸福的影响更大。这就不是你说的social life 对career的影响了

包子不包子

what intrinsically influences our job performance is our relationship with our clients.应该是job影响relationship啊
这个是想说relationship影响job么

探险者

昨天的作文的确写得不好，主要是没有点题。我想说的是social life对人们的happiness有更大的影响，因此说了人们的social life包括在工作中和客户、同事、领导的关系，在平常和朋友的关系，在家中和亲人的关系。由此来说明对幸福的影响，然后自己的点题不够，所以理解上费劲了。
那句话，是想说工作中很重要的是relationship，这影响工作的质量，进而影响自己的情绪好坏