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4.9 独立
今天的作文终于上400啦~要庆祝下~~
As we all know, teacher is one kind of the most important people in our lives. They tech us how to be a useful person to society and how to make friends with others, and we absorbed much knowledge from them in the class. However, with the development of technology, there are more and more high-tech machine for us to touch the outside world and learn something we interested. Thus, I definitely agree with school to having more facilities than hiring more teachers.



To begin with, my main reason, pervasive and persuasive, associates with the point that Facilities with high-technology has helped open up many new avenues that previously were considered impossible. Take for example the simple LCD projectors. They give a visual feel of the subject that the student is studying helping him to learn not only quickly but also effectively. That’s to say, through the LCD makes some abstract definitions more specific to students.

At the same time, we should also be emphasized that this is a information era, a large part of our lives are based on the internet which bring so much convenience. A student sitting in a small town of India can access the latest course material released by MIT on his topic of interest. He can gain access to the latest info that his happening in physics and thus improve his existing warehouse of knowledge. He can browse through the previous papers in physics and dwell deeper and deeper in his specialized study. And how long does this all take? A click of a mouse. Compare with learning from teacher, the advantage is that you can study whenever you want.

At the traditional thought, some opponents might claim that teachers teach us in the class may attract more attention from student. They could solve some students’ problems at once. Persuasive as it seems to be, a close analysis would reveal how flimsy it is. In fact, some students don’t like the form of the studying in the classroom, it’s to tedious by contrast with high-tech teaching. Also, if students discover some question they need to answer, they could search the internet through google or others to find result by themselves. That can train their self-study skill, too.

Taking into account all these factors, we may safely draw the conclusion that teacher is not necessary, and hiring more teacher is waste funds of school. They could take advantage of their students by use these funds to having more facilities.

prodliu

As we all know(There is an universal acknowledge that), teacher is one kind of the most important people in our lives, because they(前后单复数不一致) tech teach us how to be a useful person to（in） society and how to make friends with others, and also we absorbed much knowledge from them in the class. However, with the development of technology, there are more and more high-tech machines for us to touch the outside world and learn something we interested. Thus, I definitely agree with the point that school to having more facilities than hiring more teachers.it is better for school to allot more facilities than to hire more teachers



To begin with, my main reason, pervasive and persuasive??什么意思？？, associates with the point that Facilities with high-technology has helped open up many new avenues that previously were considered impossible. Take for example the simple LCD projectors（把例子放在中间）. They give a visual feel of the subject that the student is studying helping him to learn not only quickly but also effectively.（太混乱了，These projectors offer students a visual effect of a subject that help students to have a better understanding of a theory and obtain skills both thoroughly and effectively） That’s to say, through the LCD makes some abstract definitions more specific to students.(Through these advanced technologies,  students can figure out an abstract and formidable definition,其实这句和前面重复了，建议写点别的内容 )

At the same time, we should also be emphasized that this is a information era, a large part of our lives are based on the internet which bring so much convenience.(Simultaneously, our society is flooded with information, and a majority of our lives or works will be conveniently performed based on the internet.) A student sitting in a small town of India can access the latest course material released by MIT on his its topic of interest. He can gain access to the latest info that his?? happening in physics, and thus improve his existing warehouse of knowledge. He can browse through the previous papers in physics and dwell deeper and deeper in his specialized study. And how long does this all take? A click of a mouse. Compare with learning from teacher, the advantage is that you can study whenever you want.

At the traditional thought, some opponents might claim that teachers teach us in the class may attract more attention from student. They could solve some students’ problems at once. Persuasive as it seems to be, a close analysis would reveal how flimsy it is. In fact, some students don’t like the form of the studying in the classroom, it’s to tedious by contrast with high-tech teaching. Also, if students discover some question they need to answer, they could search the internet through google or others to find result by themselves. That can train their self-study skill, too.

Taking into account all these factors, we may safely draw the conclusion that teacher is not necessary, and hiring more teacher is waste funds of school. They could take advantage of their students by use these funds to having more facilities.

写完后最后是检查一遍喽，有些语法和拼写的错误。养成好习惯，考试时候才不会犯错啊。好些拼写和语法错误会扣分很严重的。每段的观点很好，但是逻辑结构还是不明确。参考鸟姐的文章。就是说你支持或者反对的观点要有理有据。不要一句一句蹦出来。没有因果或者逻辑衔接，会让读者混乱的。

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4月10日综合 tpo6

According to the passage communal online encyclopedias have several important problems that make them much less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias. On the countary, the lecturer disagree with the point of passage with several reasons.

Firstly, the passage says too many internet user who are trained experts and nonspecialists inaccuracies in the communal online encyclopedias are result in the encyclopedias often lack academic credentials. However, the lecturer realized that the communal online encyclopedias and traditional encyclopedias are both have errors, and the former are more easy to correct. Maybe the traditional one needs decades to resolve its problems, yet.

What’s more, the theory made in the passage shows that it may unsafety on the internet to give unscrupulous users and vandals or hackers the opportunity to fabricate, delete, and corrupt information in the encyclopedia. But the narrator says the manager of Online encyclopedias have recognized the importance of protecting their articles from hackers. They have taken measures to make the encyclopedias reading only and monitor all changes have been made.

In the third place, author theory contends the communal online encyclopedia take more attention to the news, the internet user often cannot decide what’s important and what’s not. Nevertheless, from the lecture, we know that internet have no limit volume, so we needn’t care about the information whether are too large to save or not. Nonstandard academic theory also can prove people’s interest.

Herisson0509

因为我本身听的就不好所以就照着听力原文给你改的哦
According to the passage communal online encyclopedias have several important problems that make them much less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias. On the countary, the lecturer disagree with the point of passage with several reasons.

Firstly, the passage says too many internet user who are trained experts and nonspecialists inaccuracies in the communal online encyclopedias are result in the encyclopedias often lack academic credentials.我觉得你这里描述的和原文有出入直接就可以说the inaccuracy information in online encyclopedia due to those contributors who often lack academic credentials. However, the lecturer realized that the communal online encyclopedias and traditional encyclopedias are both have errors, and这里应该是转折用but the former are more easy to correct. Maybe the traditional one needs decades to resolve its problems, yet.

What’s more, the theory made in the passage shows that it may unsafety on the internet to give unscrupulous users and vandals or hackers the opportunity to fabricate, delete, and corrupt information in the encyclopedia. But the narrator says the manager of Online encyclopedias have recognized the importance of protecting their articles from hackers. They have taken measures to make the encyclopedias readingonly 这样表达不合适presented in a read-only format and monitor all changes have been made.

In the third place, author theory contends the communal online encyclopedia take more attention to the newsa depth, on trivial and popular topics, the internet user often cannot decide what’s important and what’s not. Nevertheless, from the lecture, we know that internet have no limit volume, so we needn’t care about the information whether are too large to save or not. Nonstandard academic theory also can prove people’s interest.加上这句The diversity of use in topics that online encyclopedias offer is one of their strongest advantages



写的不错呢应该是听懂了不像我全部一头雾水的说

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4月12日 综合TPO08
In the passage, the author displayed many events seems unreasonable about Chevalier de Seingalt in his life. But the lecturer strongly disagree with him. And bring out several reason to opposite passage’s theory.

First of all, the passage says if the Chevalier had really been very rich, he would not have needed to borrow money. However, the speaker point that Chevalier is a merchant, and when he trade with someone, he had to wait a period of time for the money back. So during this time, he may need to borrow some money from his friends.

Second, the author’s theory realized that it’s impossible for chevalier to remember exact phrases from extended conversations held many years earlier. To against this, the lecturer highlight that when people having an important meeting, they definitely hire some people to take notes, so do Chevalier. That’s no doubt Chevalier was directly detailing meeting in journal.

At last, even though Chevalier have many powerful friends like passage says, he didn’t escape from the prison in this way, yet. From the narrator, we could guess that Chevalier must escaped through the hole in the ceiling made by him, because there is a roof repaired record in government files.

感觉细节有点少，可是就听到这么多T.T

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4月12日101009 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.

With the development of China in past decade, rural people have shown an increased interest in moving into the apartment in city. So the population of city have a ascending trend with a geometrical type growth. However, in my opinion, city may not be the best choice for people to living. At same time, rural areas will provide a more comfortable place for human.

My main reason, pervasive and persuasive, associates with the point that fresh air is good for our health. Because lots kinds of plants grow outside of house, they can offer much oxygen gas human need and absorb carbon dioxide which we produced in photosynthesis. This process promote the quality of environment around us. On the countary, living in city, we might breath in much automobile exhaust or dust floating in the air. Lung disease may be caused by air pollution like this. Everyone hope families are healthy.

At the same time, it should also be emphasized that rural areas don’t have skyscraper just as cities have generally. So we could have a good sight to appreciate such a beautiful natural scenery in our country. That will make us feel relaxed after a hard day work. Just imaging that, after supper, take a walk with your wife hand in hand on the avenue and look to the sunset. What a amazing day it is. But it seems doesn’t realizable for someone living in the city.

Undoubtedly, some opponents might contend that city life make our days pretty convenient. Shopping mall, supermarket, subway and so on let rural areas cannot compare with in such ways. Persuasive as it seems to be, a close analysis would reveal how flimsy it is. In fact, city are developing, and village are developing, too. More and more high technologies and convenient services are introduced into rural areas. So to say, developed villages are as convenient as cities.

Taking into account all these factors, we may safely draw the conclusion that people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families. Furthermore, with the construction in villages, it would be more and more fit and comfortable for their lives.

Herisson0509

With the development of China in past decade, rural people have shown an increased interest in moving into the apartment in city. So the population of city have a ascending trend with a geometrical type growth. However, in my opinion, city may not be the best choice for people to living. At the same time, rural areas will provide a more comfortable place for human.

My main reason, pervasive and persuasive, associates with the point that fresh air is good for our health. Because lots好像不能这样用啊换many吧kinds of plants grow outside of house, they can offer much oxygen gas human need and absorb carbon dioxide which we produced in photosynthesis. This process promotes the quality of environment around us. On the countarycountry, living in city, we might breath in much automobile exhaust or dust floating in the air. Lung disease may be caused by air pollution like this. Everyone hopes families are healthy.

At the same time, it should also be emphasized that rural areas don’t have skyscraper just as cities have generally. So we could have a good sight to appreciate such a beautiful natural scenery in our country. That will make us feel relaxed after a hard day-work. Just imaging that, after supper, take a walk with your wife hand in hand on the avenue and look to at吧 the sunset. What a amazing day it is. But it seems doesn’t 这里是不是应该是not to be realizable for someone living in the city.

Undoubtedly, some opponents might contend that city life make our days pretty convenient. Shopping mall, supermarket, subway and so on let rural areas cannot compare with 加个cities in such ways.这句表达较中式化你看这样说行不？Rural areas cannot compare with cities because of those facilities such as shopping mall, supermarket, subway and so on. Persuasive as it seems to be, a close analysis would reveal how flimsy it is. In fact, city are developing, and village are developing, too. More and more high technologies and convenient services are introduced into rural areas. So to say, developed villages are as convenient as cities.

Taking into account all these factors, we may safely draw the conclusion that people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families. Furthermore, with the construction in villages, it would be more and more fit and comfortable for their lives.

Crystaljoy

In the passage, the author displayed （displays用来引出文章教授观点的V用现在时，他们观点里面的内容可以用原文时态）many eventsseems (which seem) unreasonable about Chevalier de Seingalt in his life. But the lecturer strongly disagree(disagrees) with him. And bring (and points这是一句嘛~) out several reason (reasons) to opposite(可以用作V？ refute) passage’s theory(each theory一般无生命的所有格用of, 有生命的‘s ).

First of all, the passage says if the Chevalier had really been very rich, he would not have(删除) needed to borrow money. However, the speaker point（mentions） that Chevalier is a merchant, and when he trade (traded) with someone, he had to wait a period of time for the money back.(he was to wait for much more capital return.)So during this time, he may need to borrow some money from his friends.( ??? You can not be too creative in comprehensive writing喵喵~~~)

Second, the author’s theory realized that (从哪抄的句子啊，这么奇怪？) it’s impossible for chevalier to remember exact phrases from extended conversations held many years earlier. To against（attack用个动词） this, the lecturer highlight（highlights） that when people having(have) an important meeting, they definitely hire some people to take notes, so do Chevalier. （喵喵你太可爱了吧，去再听听吧）That’s（删除） no doubt Chevalier was directly detailing meeting in journal. （看不懂了was able to write down the conversation in details）

At last, even though Chevalier have（has） many powerful friends like(as因为as接句子，like接短语) passage says, he didn’t escape from the prison in this way, yet.（我怎么记得even though和yet不能同时出现呢~）From the narrator, we could guess that Chevalier must escaped（escape） through the hole in the ceiling made by him, because there is a roof repaired record in government files.（此刻我已经笑倒了，你可以当导演了。教授没你这么生动哇~~~）



喵喵，

强烈建议你趁现在有时间完整看一本语法书，这不仅提高写作水平，对于你以后考G也会有帮助。相信我！

听力也要加强了，因为有些信息确实不太属实啊。但是综合作文是总结教授观点与文章观点关系，不能加个人观点的。建议你先把文章看懂，记笔记，听力时候对照着理解，大不了多听几遍嘛~~~

开始会辛苦一点~~~坚持！！！

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4月18日20101105 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Spending money on travelling and vocation is better than saving for future.

Recently, a proverb is widespread on the internet-reading or travelling, one of your body and soul must on tour. As it is, money cannot be worth as it’s value after several years later. Moreover, saving money couldn’t bring the experience and knowledge from the bank account. In my opinion, spending money on travelling and vocation is absolutely better than saving for future.

My main reason, pervasive and persuasive, associates with the point that money is devaluing in the marketing economy all the time, making food and clothes expensive, raising cost of people’s daily life. From the official statistic of Chinese GDP an CPA of this year, we could realize that if we save all of money we have into the bank, one year later, it will devalue 0.7%.that’s to say one thousand yuan will value only 993 yuan next year. Why do we make a unworthy deal which is so obvious?

At the same time, it should also be emphasized that using it to improve your knowledge and experience rather than make the money devalue. All of us need knowledge and experience to face the cruel reality. The more places you visit and people you see, the calmer you will be. What makes the elder seems so brilliant? None other than they faced more affairs. So going outwards to visit somewhere you are attracted, it could teach you something special.

At the first thought, some opponents might claim that if we have some problem surprisingly such as traffic accident. Saving money can help us to solve it. Persuasive as it seems to be, a close analysis would reveal how flimsy it is. In this modern time, finance are developing fast all over the world. Insurance and credit could help us to solve most kinds of economic problem. That’s to say, worring about unpredictable troubles is unnecessary.

In a nutshell, taking into account all these factors, we can safely draw the conclusion that drawing your money from bank, and using it to have a perfect tour. Experience and knowledge are more valuable than it just looks like outside.