ARGUMENT 118球拍啦~~谢啦

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118. Thefollowing appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"Arecent study rating 300 male and female advertising executives according to theaverage number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between theamount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of theadvertising firms studied those whose executives reported needing no more thansix hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. Onthe basis of this study, we recommend that businesses hire only people who needless than six hours of sleep per night."
Write aresponse in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in orderto decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based arereasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help toevaluate the recommendation.

The authorrecommends that business should hire only people who need less than six hoursof sleep per night. To support it, the author cites the survey of the time theyneed per night, covering 300 female and male advertising executives. the surveyshows that those whose executives reported needing no more than six hours ofsleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. However, thisargument if rife with holes and assumptions, and thus it cannot convince me.
Relying on the survey of 300 male and femaleadvertising executives, the author concludes the relationship between success ofa company and sleeping hours. It’s unfair to let 300 advertising executivesrepresent all people in all fields. What’s more the scope of the survey is sosmall that we can’t draw a firm conclusion based on it. Perhaps advertising isa hard job which cost a lot of time to accomplish it perfectly. Also, it ispossible that those 300 executives are more diligent and prefer to spend lesstime sleeping. The author has failed to consider these possibilities intoconsideration, thus the conclusion is unconvincing.
 Secondly, the author unfairly equals higherprofits and faster growth with less than six hours sleeping. A person havinghigher profit margins and faster growth depends on several factors. For example,whether he can finish the job efficiently or how well he can solve the job orhow creative he is. And the author overlooks the significance of the decisionof a leader, and the role of rivals. Of course, the success of a business alsohas something with fortune. If you are lucky, chance to be successful may behigher. Thus evidence is absent that the time of sleeping contributes to thehigher profits and faster growth.
 Even though the assumption that is right thatneeding less than six hours sleeping benefits the profits and growth, ofcourse, which is unsubstantiated. The recommends of hiring people needing lessthan six hours sleeping is questionable. But for it may be limited in theadvertising fields, the manager’s standards of hiring vary from person toperson. For instance, the manager prefers the employees with the ability ofcreating, cooperating and so on. If the person likes sleeping more but has otherextraordinary skills that is needed most in the job, will you let him go? Thus,the sleeping time cannot be the only judgments of hiring.
 To sum up, the suggestion is not wellsupported. To strength the argument, the author has to enlarge the scale of thesurvey, which covers different people from different fields. To evaluate theargument, the author has to provide more evidence to support the conclusionthat need of sleeping time has direct relations with higher profits and fastergrowth.

竹林中人

The author recommends that business should hire only peoplewho need less than six hours of sleep per night. To support it, the authorcites the survey of the time they need per night, covering 300 female and maleadvertising executives. the survey shows that those whose executives reportedneeding no more than six hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins andfaster growth. However, this argument is rifewith holes and assumptions, and thus it cannot convince me.

Relying on the survey of 300male and female advertising executives, the author concludes the relationshipbetween success of a company and sleeping hours. It’s unfair to let 300advertising executives represent all people in all fields. What’s more thescope of the survey is so small that we can’t draw a firm conclusion based onit. Perhaps advertising is a hard job which cost a lot of time to accomplish itperfectly. Also, it is possible that those 300 executives are more diligent andprefer to spend less time sleeping. The author has failed to consider thesepossibilities into consideration, thus the conclusion is unconvincing.这一段里面你说了几个点，这样不好。It’sunfair to let 300 advertising executives represent all people in all fields.What’s more the scope of the survey is so small that we can’t draw a firmconclusion based on it.这两点最好分开说。而且逻辑顺序是先质疑调查本身，再去说调查是否代表所以行业。
我对这个题始终有个疑问是，睡眠少于6小时，是不是不管这个人其他的时间干什么，只要睡眠时间少于6小时，就可以了。
Secondly, the authorunfairly equals higher profits and faster growth with less than six hourssleeping. A person having higher profit margins and faster growth depends onseveral factors. For example, whether he can finish the job efficiently or howwell he can solve the job or how creative he is. And the author overlooks thesignificance of the decision of a leader, and the role of rivals. Of course,the success of a business also has something with fortune. If you are lucky,chance to be successful may be higher. Thus evidence is absent that the time ofsleeping contributes to the higher profits and faster growth.这段比较关键的一个点是，调查的观察和对照组的问题，假如调查的两组人，其他的情况都差不多，就睡眠时间上有差别，结果倒还可信，如果没有说明这种对照，那么结果是不可信的。你要点破，否则你列举的其他的可能带来profit的因素是没有依据的。

Eventhough the assumption that is right that needing less than six hours sleepingbenefits the profits and growth, of course, which is unsubstantiated. 这句话是不完整的。Therecommends of hiring people needing less than six hours sleeping isquestionable. But for it may be limited to theadvertising fields, the manager’s standards of hiring vary from person toperson？？. For instance, the manager prefers theemployees with the ability of creating, cooperating and so on. If the personlikes sleeping more but has other extraordinary skills that is needed most inthe job, will you let him go? Thus, the sleeping time cannot be the onlyjudgments of hiring.最后这一段感觉意思不太明确

To sum up, thesuggestion is not well supported. To strength the argument, the author has toenlarge the scale of the survey, which covers different people from differentfields. To evaluate the argument, the author has to provide more evidence tosupport the conclusion that need of sleeping time has direct relations withhigher profits and faster growth.

普渡哥

To evaluate the argument, the author has to provide more evidence to support the conclusion that need of sleeping time has direct relations with higher profits and faster growth.

这句话怎么翻译啊？ evaluate还是改进呢？