issue 10,求拍 各种感谢

山依格紫

I basically agree with the claim"Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain". Of great environmental, historical as well as scientific value, preserving remaining wilderness areas is indeed of crucial importance , however, it is not mutually exclusive with economic interests, and a win-win success could be made if we handle properly.


Firstly, protecting wilderness areas is not only essential but compursory. On one hand, wilderness areas are home to most wild animals and plants ---places for wildlife to live and multiply on and once destroyed, it would seriously threaten the lives of these wildlife. In addition, any wildlife is one of the most important links in natural's food chain, once out of existance, the whole wildlife chain would be hit hard even it would have a serious impact on the ability of remaining species, including human, to survive. On the other hand, most primitive tribes, cradle of human civilization, live there. Their living styles, traditional ceremonies, religious rites.etc all have a great historical value and are treasures to our modern society. So preserving them is a necessity.

In addition, while protecting these wilderness areas, we human, also can benefit a lot from it. First, the various biological resources in wilderness areas could provide opportunities for science researching. For example, without an organic molecule from willows, aspirin cannot be invented. Likewise, without bats radar cannot be designed, either. Therefore, preserving wilderness areas means protecting our research resources. Second, used for recreation, wilderness can inspire people's emotions and feelings and numerous illustrious works are created in the process of enjoying the wilderness. Consider Li Bai, one of the greatest poet of China. It is his rich experience of wilderness that made him feel to be part of something larger than himself, then quantities of immortal classics were born. So preserving the recreational value requires us to protect the integrity of the wildness.

However, preserving wilderness areas and economics are not mutually exclusive. And the yellowstone national park is a good instance. Its establish, not only is beneficial to then protection of biodiversity, but bring colossal interests to The U.S. Travel Service. Therefore, preserving wilderness is not necessarily needing to sacrifice economic gain. We could make a win-win success if handling properly.

Summed up, preserving wilderness areas is our liability and obligation. And the acquisition of economic gain is also available. It is highly suggested that governments should be trained to have a strong decision-making ability.

1.保护原生态地区重要性 1.1 生态方面 1.2 原始部落方面
2.保护原生态地区给人类也带来巨大好处 2.1  科学价值 2.2 文学价值
3.但是，原生态的保护和经济利益并不矛盾  例子 黄石公园

普渡哥

第三点，应该是and关系，和前两点没有转折关系。。。。

竹林中人

嗯，这种写法有进步了，不错啊，这是我很欣赏的一种写法，从两个事物中找到统一的地方，就提升了自己认识问题的深度。关于提纲中的第三点，你可以在文中再充实下

jurat911

山依格紫

第三点，应该是and关系，和前两点没有转折关系。。。。

-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/3/7 12:14:40)

想来想去，however不知道用哪个词代替，可是去掉的话，上来说两者并不矛盾是不是太突兀了？

普渡哥

用also, 或者and, 开启。

zsl2011

同楼上，你的第三点不是转折，还是在说同一个事，最好是两面都要写，可以写一些不支持的原因

山依格紫

同楼上，你的第三点不是转折，还是在说同一个事，最好是两面都要写，可以写一些不支持的原因

-- by 会员 zsl2011 (2012/3/8 6:28:35)

呵呵 谢啦 你说的不支持的原因是不是指只追逐经济利益而不保护原生态地区的坏处?

普渡哥

用你现在的论据就是要重新组织。不然老外读了会摸不着头绪。

好在老外虽然跟老中有文化差异，但是逻辑基本还是一致的。

大剑Jade

最后一段似乎总结的不给力啊。
文中穿插的例子没有扩展呢，感觉不充沛啊。。