issue 57求拍~

又见紫风铃

57. The main benefit of the study of history is to dispel the illusion that people living now are
significantly different from people who lived in earlier times.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement
and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position,
you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how
these considerations shape your position.

Is dispelling the illusion that huge gaps exist between people who lived today and those who lived at any other time in history the main advantage of history researching, as the author maintains? In my view the speaker unfairly generalized. I agree with the statement insofar as many aspects, especially spirits, of people who live at any time of the history remain the same. Yet strictly followed, when it comes to the way to practice according to these same spirits, it varies a lot during the recorded history.

Admittedly, some spiritual things--motivations or wishes and problems--social irresolvable diseases stay unchanged even from ancient time. Dated back to the time of William Shakespeare, the perseverance of chasing love can be easily found when thousands of hundreds of individuals tore for the misery that Romeo and Juliet suffered. So it is now that young lovers or couples constantly dream of their perpetual love. Another example is the effort to exploring the covered mystery, such as Columbus investigating the new continent, which is similar with scientist exploring the space outside the earth. On the other hand, our foible or some social drawbacks like crime never be eradicated even until now. From this point of view, the research of history does break our illusion that there are significant differences between past and present. The unchanged virtue is to be reserved, while the problem is to be solved by us.

However, although most of the spirits remain the same, in many other aspects including our way to chase our goals or dreams changedquite a lot, so are the social problems. To learn new knowledge, for example, we can easily click the button on the screens by surfing the Internet for much more information that a shelf of books was able to contain years ago. If we still using the conventional methods such as seeking the book in the library, much of our time may be wasted. And there are much more problems in front of us as well. Nuclear threatening, environmental pollution, overpopulation and numerous other social problems are not to be encountered in the past. All of these indicate that great difference does exist, thus requiring us to promote the good change while contain changes towards bad endings.

Actually, the benefit of history does not confined to whether we know the consistence or difference between the past and the present, nor does it to break down any delusions. History, setting as a principle to study the development of human beings, serves as "a mirror for us to know our gains and losses" just as one of the famous emperor during Tang Dynasty in ancient China put it. That is to say, learning our future direction through not only similarity but also difference between the past and now is the main benefit of the study of history.

In final analysis, the speaker's assertion that history is used primarily to let people know that people in one period of time are not significantly different from people who lived in the earlier time does has its value to some degree. But as a whole we should learn from the history as long as it is instructive no matter it is different or the same with now.

竹林中人

不错，感觉这种写法很好，结构安排比较好，加油！

skily22

层次很清楚 顶

jameszhm

楼主稍微回应下哈~~不要一言不发 很闷的说~~要探讨！！！~

普渡哥

the speaker's assertion that history is used primarily to let people know that people in one period of time are not significantly different from people who lived in the earlier time does has its value to some degree.

但是题目表达的是现代人和古代人有明显的区别， 你这里加了not就不是speaker的观点了。。。

大剑Jade

这篇文章写的很惊艳啊~错误很少，用词也够丰富，当然最主要的优点是结构清晰，可见作者是花了一番功夫写下来的吧。
句式从句不多但足够复杂，我个人很喜欢这样的表达，但有时一个句子略有些长作者就有些分不清句子结构了，有些句子中的细节比如短语搭配就会出现问题。还需要改进，比如：
Is dispelling the illusion that huge gaps exist between people who lived today and those who lived at any other time in history the main advantage of history researching,
这句话中应该是who live today
the benefit of history does not confined to whether we know the consistence or difference between the past and the present,
应为is not confined to
作者是采用的两面兼顾的写法，写的很周全，这点值得很多人学习。在思路方面，love，crime的例子很贴切，不过下一段的差异方面讲的就很泛泛了。提到了 Nuclear threatening, environmental pollution, overpopulation固然是好，但并没有展开，只是一些例子，就会觉得很空旷。issue很大的特点是需要develop，这也是作者为数不多的需要进步的地方。这个问题贯穿于全文，因为结尾的最后一句话也是让人比较失望，提到了no matter it is different or the same让人很兴奋，因为这是作者自己的观点，但作者却没有深入讨论下去为什么no matter，其实再扩充两句话即可，但却缺失了这必要的话，很可惜。
总体来讲，这篇是个美文，但要达到一流境界，作者还需努力。

李小含

楼主用词和结构上都不错~就是在内容上，我的想法和你有些差别。
i tend to believe that the study of history dispels the illusion that people living now are significantly different from people who lived in earlier time as the speaker claims.
but i cannot agree with the idea that it is the main benefit that study of history bings to us.
however之后我比较偏向于证明历史给人们带来的远不止题中指出的那么简单。
也就是说我会着重展开你actually后面的内容
仅供参考，楼主好棒~

franciszmy

挺好的，两点意见。
第一，是上楼普度哥提到的那个问题，我就不再重复了。
第二，句式很复杂，很好，但是上来第一句就是一个大长句，让我上来一读就有点闷住的感觉，可能是我语法不好吧，呵呵。
其他论点，引文，结构，例子都很好。

大剑Jade

挺好的，两点意见。
第一，是上楼普度哥提到的那个问题，我就不再重复了。
第二，句式很复杂，很好，但是上来第一句就是一个大长句，让我上来一读就有点闷住的感觉，可能是我语法不好吧，呵呵。
其他论点，引文，结构，例子都很好。

-- by 会员 franciszmy (2012/2/21 21:18:08)

to dispel the illusion that people living now are
significantly different from people who lived in earlier times. 其实这个就是说not significantly different的。。LZ写的没错的。。

jameszhm

喜欢第3、4段，觉得说话很有逻辑性。而且给出的意见别人能够容易理解，角度也很不错，可以供大家学习。我觉得这篇作文很不错的。楼主是否看过issue 5.5？里面的一些论证方法我觉得不错，估计楼主学到家了。