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标题: [原创]美国MBA申请ESSAY重点论题精华句式与模板 第二版 [打印本页]

作者: ceeyee    时间: 2004-11-6 11:26
标题: [原创]美国MBA申请ESSAY重点论题精华句式与模板 第二版


针对MBA申请中的重点ESSAY文章做的文书用语模板总结。
在我两个月前的奖学金申请经验的用语栏目的改进版本。

归纳于Business Week, EEC等会员区的美国和加国的顶级商学院录取者
的申请文书。涵盖了商学院最常见的重点论题。希望本文可以帮助
非英语母语的申请者也写出动人流畅的申请文书, 展现自己光辉的一面。
在商学院奖学金的申请道路上和大家共勉。
我换了一个新的 MSN:  finance@cegw.com ,
有兴趣聊商学院申请,学习,或是金融市场的,来!



            目录



1. 职业规划与攻读MBA的动机


    1.1 Career Goal and Why MBA
    1.2 Plans after Degree
    1.3 Why our School


2. 职业背景与职业素质


    2.1 Professional Background
    2.2 Academic Background
    2.3 Leadership
    2.4 Teamwork and Communication
    2.5 Challenges and Lessons Learned


3. 学习计划与对MBA Program的贡献


    3.1 Study Plans in the Program
    3.2 Contribution to Classroom
    3.3 Diversity and Other Qualifications



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1. 职业规划与选择MBA的原因



1.1 Career Goal and Why MBA



This ______ reveals that while I have a strong background with respect to
leadership and management skill sets, I do not have a ______ knowledge
base in the field of ______ . My past successes
have been that result of effective employment of my ______ expertise in ______
and my leadership, management and team building skills.
From a ______ expertise or functional knowledge point of view, these experiences
and successes have little or no relation to neither ______ nor ______
management. This is a significant problem if I am to realize my career goals.
Now that I have identified the major roadblock to realizing my career goals
what do I do next?



I have developed a strong knowledge in the ______ and ______ through my
education and my work experience as a ______ .
Through this experience, I have also acquired excellent problem solving,
integrative, interpersonal, and communication skills.
I believe that at this point in my life, these skills will allow me to realise
the maximum educational benefit from the ______ MBA.
This combination of scientific experience and business training will help me to
make an informed and influential contribution to ______ .



I recognize the need to improve in many areas, especially as my responsibilities
require me to combine my both of my ______ and ______ skills and
[interact with functional organizations outside of technical and engineering
development, such as marketing and finance].
As I interact with other functional organizations within ______ ,
I realize I can better contribute in a collaborative environment if I have a
more thorough understanding of their needs and how these organizations run.



My primary career goal is to ______.
Prior to this I will complete an MBA in order to acquire the additional
knowledge and skills necessary in order to be a
successful entrepreneur and businessman.



I have chosen to apply to ______ because the strength and quality of both its
overall MBA program and its ______ concentration will provide the knowledge,
skill building and team experiences needed to achieve these goals.



The prospect of ______ is one of the key elements that attracted me to pursue a
______ combination/major.
I look forward to working with other students from diverse academic backgrounds.



Managing ______ for a ______ in the short-term, and starting an ______ company
in the long-term. I know what I need to achieve these goals: an MBA.



My ideal position would combine the strategic elements of ______, ______ and
______ with the ______ requirements of a ______ role in a creative industry.
A key role requiring a wide knowledge base and one that would stretch me to
develop further.



A ______ EMBA will build on my experience, and enable me to reach my goals.
Every aspect of my ______ education will be essential in helping me achieve this
dream,
beginning with my selection of ______ as my primary concentration.



As I look forward to a profession of combining my ______ background
with the business capabilities an MBA will provide, ...



General Highlights.



Continuing my education will give me the opportunity to receive formal and
informal training from faculty, guest speakers and fellow students that would be very
difficult to receive outside of a university setting.
In addition to learning new management strategies,
I will have the opportunity to learn from the faculty and students about their
perspectives on current issues in the business world.
I will also have the opportunity to practice my team management skills as I
partner with other students in case studies,
simulations and other team projects.



Networking with students and faculty from different disciplines and industries
will provide me with the opportunity to learn more about the business world in
general.
Sharing different perspectives as we address issues in the classroom will help
to expand my understanding of the different roles within our respective
companies and the roles of our companies in the overall economy.
In addition, these relationships could provide an ongoing resource to compare
developing issues in our businesses.



I am applying for an MBA precisely because I would like to develop my knowledge
and skills in other organizational functions.
Learning and understanding the various cross-functional aspects of running a
business is a major part of my overall career plan to become a CEO of my own
corporation one day.



An MBA program will help me achieve my goals by providing me with the
opportunity to continue my formal education, network with students from different
disciplines and compare current business practices with people from other professional
environments.


An MBA will also show the level of commitment I have to my professional growth
and will be recognized by my peers as an additional set of skills and
experiences that I could bring to the company.



Classroom and team settings will also provide the opportunity to compare and
contrast different managerial styles,
decision-making processes and business practices.
As each student brings his or her unique perspective and business practices to
the classroom,
we will be able to compare what our own companies are currently doing and
present our management teams with alternatives and new ideas.
Sharing our experiences will result in an increased understanding of the factors
that can drive success or failure.



Participating in an MBA program will illustrate the commitment I have to my
professional development and will highlight the experiences and skills that I
can bring to a new role in my company.
As ______ continues to grow, the company's need for well-trained and experienced
managers and directors will increase.
Participating in an MBA program will highlight the commitment I have to
developing my skills and experiences.



Besides the educational component, an MBA will allow for greater opportunities
for internships and full-time positions that otherwise may be unavailable to me
without the degree.



I am applying to the Executive MBA Program because I am confident the program is
ideally suited to my personal and professional development needs.


1.2 Plans after Degree


After I complete my MBA degree from the ______ I will pursue a career in ______
with, ______;
______; or ______. The position will be challenging and include ______ .
I will be able to apply my skills learned during my graduate experience to make
an immediate impact.
I will have the opportunity to interact with managers from various ______;
______; ______; and ______.



In the short-term I am interested in pursuing a new and increased role in one of
______ business segments.
This new role will provide me with the opportunity to learn more about one of
our businesses and will include ______, ______ and ______ responsibilities.
While in this role I will learn as much as possible about the business, its role
within ______ and the total company's role in the marketplace.
I will take advantage of the opportunities presented to become involved in
______ and ______, ______, and the varied aspects of ______.
This new role will also provide me with the opportunity to ______.



Ultimately, my aim, after completion of my MBA at ______, is to embrace an
______ career and work for a worldwide corporation at a decision level.
I want to experience management and decision making in an ______ environment,
particularly as a ______.
This will grant me with the background and business connections necessary to
leverage my ambitions of setting up an ______ company developing ______ for the
______ market.



I seek an MBA degree from ______ because it will empower me to improve the level
of professionalism and management in the nonprofit world,
I plan to build relevant ______, ______ and ______ skills through business
studies.
I intend to gain a better understanding of the ______ sector and apply it
directly to the unique issues and politics of ______.
MBA training will dramatically broaden my scope of business vision and I will be
able to apply this new knowledge immediately.



On completing my MBA, there are two directions I envision myself taking. The
first fuses my past experience and my new MBA skills by heading towards a senior
position with an ______ sector company.
In particular, I would like to join such a company as ______.



My intent would be to stay within one business segment of ______ for ______ to
______ years so I can learn the business in detail.
After that time I will consider looking for a new position in another business
within ______.



In the long-term I will continue to progress on my career path, going as far as
my education, talent and experience will take me.
My long-term goals include becoming the ______ or ______, then moving into a
higher management position (vice-president or CFO).
Upon retirement I would like to ______.



I've been working in the ______ industry, in particular, ______. My aspiration
is to remain in the same sphere, both for the short and for the long run.



While working towards the degree I plan to do a summer internship and
immediately after the degree work full-time in ______ .



After earning my MBA, I would love to work for ______ .



Over the long term, however, the only "job" that will harness and parlay all of
my passion and energy is one that I design from the ground up.
Starting my own company is the ultimate challenge.



However, an alternative direction also attracts me: the entrepreneurial path.
Given an interesting opportunity and the right confidence in the market, I know
I would be very tempted by this.



That is part of the MBA's appeal: while it boosts my projected career, it also
expands my potential to make the most of unforeseen opportunities: building
flexibility into my future.



1.3 Why our School


The ______ MBA Program has been designed to connect a range of disparate
business management topics.
This can be illustrated from the configuration of the Clusters that make up
______ of the course.
The Innovation section in ______ leads on to a part of the course that
introduces ______ .
Finally there is a section about _____.



______ MBA Program provides a full analysis of the fundamentals of management
and technology,
and then integrates the models and theories that have emerged during the
high-tech age as a result of innovation,
technology and globalisation.



______ MBA course provides a strong academic framework with an emphasis on the
international nature of business,
which is further demonstrated by the internationally diverse student body and
faculty staff.
The high practical content of the course will enable me apply academic knowledge
to real life situations.
I have also selected this business school to work with the caliber of
professionals that are attracted to a top ______ business school,
and am looking forward to developing my interpersonal and communication skills
in the numerous workshops and team exercises.
Overall, the MBA will play an integral part in my development and I am certain
that it will provide me with the tools I need to successfully ______ .



My ambition is to acquire more knowledge in ______,
______ and build strong relationships with successful leaders and innovative
thinkers worldwide.
And I want to learn from the school renowned as the best for the quality of its
faculty members and teaching methods.
______ is my first choice because it uncompromisingly addresses real life
aspects of business.
The way the learning model is organized through interactive means as study
groups, analysis of actual real life business cases,
classes and workshops provides the ideal learning environment for people with an
experience to share.



At ______ , the emphasis is put on the students.
Curriculums, perfect combination of theory and practice, are updated with
current techniques and technologies, and moreover, can receive inputs from
students.
The strong notion of community is also decisive in my choice.
Furthermore, the commitment on ethics as an intrinsic part of the learning
process is compliant with my conception of business.
To me, business is about trust and honesty. And there is no way around it.
Finally, the city of ______ is a serious plus that will put me in the heart of
one of the world's business capital.
The proximity to the financial and cultural city of ______ gives to the students
at ______ a much richer set of opportunities.



In choosing ______ as a perspective MBA program I considered many factors.
First, it goes without saying that ______ has an impeccable reputation for
producing top-notch MBAs.
Further, ______ is clearly making a run up the rankings in recent years.
I intend to focus my MBA on marketing, however, I also wish to develop general
management,
finance and entrepreneurial skill sets as well as to learn how to leverage
information systems technologies
within the marketing arena. These areas play right into ______'s strengths.
Developing these skills will enable me to understand how marketing fits into the
larger corporate picture,
utilize entrepreneurial knowledge to compete within an organization as well as
on my own and hone the
leadership and management skills required of future leaders in industry.
______ gives me the best chance at attaining these skills and developing them to
such a level that
I will be able to achieve my long term-career goals.


Second, ______ 's location in the ______ and its diverse student body are assets
of which few schools can boast.
The resources and opportunities that exist in this area are unparalleled and
growing everyday.
The southwest offers a plethora of opportunities for expanding both your
professional and personal horizons
in a very diverse environment. ______'s efforts to embrace that diversity, both
on and off campus,
ensure the students a truly robust learning environment, one in which the free
exchange of ideas is encouraged.
The ______'s environment gives me the best chance to experience culture and
ideas in a truly diverse environment.


Lastly, I have chosen ______ because it is hard. I do not have the traditional
background that is required of
most MBA students. ______'s MBA program is not a cakewalk for anyone, and that
will be especially true of me.
However, I will succeed and I will contribute and I will make ______'s MBA
program a better experience for my classmates.
Earning my MBA from ______ will be an accomplishment I will be supremely proud
of and it gives me the best chance to
realize my personal and professional goals.



I expect that the ______ MBA will best help me to develop the business
foundation necessary for me to achieve my career goals.



Integrating the theories has a number of important effects that I think benefit
the course. Firstly, from a purely curricular point of view,
an MBA is no longer complete without an analysis of current business trends.








2. 职业背景与职业素质



2.1 Professional Background



As an ______, I am a part of ______'s Leadership team, tasked with undertaking
one of the most aggressive growth plans in the ______ industry.
In a short period, I ______. As an ______ I am responsible for managing ______.


Over the course of about six years on _____ I climbed from _____ to _____ with
______ intermediary steps in between.
I have consistently received work performance bonuses and promotions throughout
my career.
In my current position _____ I was hired permanently after ______.
I also received __award__.



Throughout my career at ______ and other ______ companies, I have managed
multiple projects simultaneously, which has required me to balance my workloads
to meet deadlines,
and to keep in close communication with my supervisors and subordinates to
ensure I have enough resources to complete projects within the designated
parameters.
During this experience, I have successfully ______ .



I have had good exposure working with people from departments outside the
boundaries of ______.
Because of this, I was exposed to the basic operations ...
Also, while assigned to ______ project, I worked closely with the ______
Department to ______.
And most importantly, I am currently running a small entrepreneurial venture
called ______ ,
exposing me to all management issues involved with a start-up, from initial
financing to execution to day-to-day operations.



While at ______ I transitioned from ______ to ______.


The ability to [define the needs of the organization], [providing the ______
that were previously lacking],
and knowledge of ______ allowed me to successfully execute this project.



To ______ , I proposed a complex plan to use .



To fully analyze ______ , I would consider several factors, grouped into _____
sector: ....



My role as ______ included ______ .



I did everything from ______ to ______ .


2.2 Academic Background


I have consistently excelled in a variety of subjects at every institution of
higher learning that I have attended.
I obtained a ______ undergraduate GPA while working ______ hours per week.
Following college graduation, I attended a top-______ ______ school and
graduated in the top quarter of my class.
More recently, I have attempted to prepare for business school by further
developing my quantitative background.
I took a ______ course __when__ and obtained a ______ GPA.
I am currently juggling part-time ______ work with ______, ______, and ______
courses and am maintaining an "A" average in each of my __how_many__ classes.


>> Leadership



This experience and my solid record of accomplishments has been powerful in
confirming to myself that not only do I enjoy leading but that I am a successful
leader.
And in the true mark of a leader, I have discovered that I have the innate
leadership qualities necessary to ______ .



I have even had opportunities to practice my leadership and business skills
through ______.
Elected to the ______ , I helped to ______ .
In addition, I leveraged my business skills to ______.
These volunteer efforts have reinforced my desire to ______, and intensified my
passion for ______.



My main challenge was to bring together a group of ______ individuals, all
______s with different needs and to focus on the individual as well as the team.
Most of the ______ were older than me and that only added to the challenge of
earning their respect.
In a short time we managed to have the team running like a well oiled machine.
Everyone knew their role, everyone became motivated to do their best and, most
importantly ...



I can honestly say that the experience of being a leader in ______ has given me
great confidence,
taught me to amass knowledge and to share it and to teach it,
and honed my skills in motivating and empowering people.



The Leadership Lessons Serving as ______ of the ______ has been a defining
leadership experience for four distinct reasons ...



In ______ , you cannot force the ______ to complete a task, you have to inspire
the ______ to be all he or she can be.



A company's success is defined by its people. As a ______, I will need to
motivate my team and ensure each person feels important.
Patience, listening, and the ability to appreciate different viewpoints are
required for managerial success.



After this experience I understood that to be a leader you must not only give
orders,
but also motivate people showing them how to achieve a common goal working
together.
I was also able to strengthen my managerial skills that will be useful for the
rest of my career and life.



Each person is an individual and has distinctive character traits.
A successful team leader should know how to deal with each person in an
appropriate and unique way.
One individual would show application and do well if left to work independently
while another would need constant supervision.
Effective leadership is a blend of camaraderie and authority, and is also the
ability to strike a balance between them.
It needs advance preparation, an understanding of human psychology, and some
diplomacy.
Any work can be made important and interesting to people by making them
understand its relevance and significance,
and above all, by granting them due importance and recognition.



I enjoyed working with motivated people, as did I enjoy the challenge of leading
a team of excellent people.



Many people believe that leadership is simply being the first,
biggest or most powerful. Leadership in organizations has a different and more
meaningful definition.
Very simply put, a leader is interpreted as someone who sets direction in an
effort and influences people to follow that direction.



After spending a semester reviewing leadership theories, I see leadership as a
building relationships, fostering growth and change,
and working for agreed upon, common goals.  A leader needs to possess strong
communication and problem solving skills.
They should also be trustworthy and have the respect of their followers.



These experiences have also instilled characteristics in me that will allow me
to become a successful leader.
I believe that excellent leaders are knowledgeable, compassionate and flexible
team players. My experience in such compassionate communities will allow me to create and
maintain a strong and cohesive unit to work toward our ultimate team objectives.
My ability to challenge others and examine multiple viewpoints will be
especially important when motivating others and finding the appropriate
leadership style for any situation.
This overall distinctiveness, combined with my unique industry experience, will
not only influence my success as a leader,
but will also allow me to become a valuable member of the ______ community.


2.4 Teamwork and Communication



To ______ , it was imperative to understand the expectations of the ______, in
addition to collaborating with ______.
Frequently, information and feedback from these sources would appear to be
contradictory,
and in order to resolve the discrepancies, open and continual communications
were essential.



I helped my new teammates master the fine points of the ______ ; in return, they
taught me ______.
We successfully delivered the project and I earned the highest possible rating
for my performance that term.
But I am most proud of the fact that through the caring, patient application of
my skills I was able to contribute to the development of my team.
Overcoming the challenge of others by helping them reinvent themselves would,
for me, be a key source of emotional fulfillment.



A current professional colleague, would describe me as being a valuable member
of the team, a good mentor and an effective team leader.
He would describe my strengths as my knowledge, experience and friendly demeanor
because I am approachable and always willing to help.
I am approachable and willing to help for two reasons: I like people and, I am
happy to help anyone in areas in which I have expertise.
After all, it is important that as a team, we get along and, help one another,
if we are to achieve our objectives.



I tend to look for win-win situations in which every member gets his share.
This constant aim has focused my short and long term objectives in every new
venture.
If there is anyone involved in the project who does not benefit from it,
then something has to be revised and corrected. Every participant should have
his incentive.



A good group member must understand his/her strengths as well as weaknesses,
and therefore focus on strengths and allow other people to work on their
strengths.



An ideal group member will always work for the group's best interest, and
understand that occasionally group member will make mistakes.



My experience at ______ taught me an important lesson about teams. You rarely
get to select your fellow teammates,
so you must make the most of the team you have. To maximize team performance, I
have learned to identify gaps in team processes and skills and then fill these
gaps.
Whether the team is lacking in leadership, knowledge, support, or communication,
I must strive to somehow meet this need to ensure successful teamwork.



I have the ability to voice my ideas and opinions, even when they differ from
those of the group.
If I believe that a project is misdirected, I will let the team know, even if I
am not the team leader.
I voice my ideas at meetings without timidity.
As a student, my classmates can expect spirited discussion that may challenge
their conclusions or help them learn from my mistakes,
successes, and experiences and improve their thinking or processes .



At work, I absolutely know how to communicate with ______ as with ______.
Undoubtedly I have made good use of this skill.



As a team member, I respect and try to learn from the expertise of others in the
group.
At the same time I encourage and listen to the ideas of other teammates.
I believe that differences and new ideas are essential to discover the
innovative solutions in team environment.



By appreciating differences and encouraging new ideas,
I will be able to contribute to a team-based learning environment in which
innovative solutions to problems can be discovered.
This holds true in a work environment as well.



People have diverse styles of learning and it is necessary to have the ability
to adapt to each person's particular style.
It is also important to be able to convey a sense of what information is vital
and what information is supportive.
Instructing others has helped me develop both my ability to look at problems in
different ways and my ability to decipher what information is most significant.
I feel this experience will prove to be very beneficial in both my business and
my academic careers.



In my view teamwork is a key element for success in today's world.
It facilitates interaction between students and helps absorb information and
retain knowledge.
It also acquaints students with different approaches to business problems.
In addition, the exposure to outstanding people from all areas of life does not
only enrich but also helps forge friendships that remain for life.
By that I do not only mean students but also Professors who are at the forefront
of knowledge.
Hence, they can become role models, influence, and drive students for success.



After a lot of debate on the best schedule, we came up with an extremely robust
plan, one that everyone agreed to.
These intra-team interactions generated a strong team spirit that proved very
helpful when the going was difficult.



2.5 Challenges and Lessons Learned



At a personal level, this project helped me to discover myself as a leader of
men and someone who thrives on challenges.
It enhanced my self-confidence, improved my communication skills, and elicited a
much more analytical approach to tackling difficult situations,
both in my personal and professional life.



Working and being with ______ has enriched my life in such a way that I am able
to not only understand the background of others,
but to truly look with a global view at my behavior and assumptions.



I believe that those experiences give me an advantage for successful completion
of my business education.



My experience and study at ______ will help me chose an area of emphasis. My
areas of interest are ______ and ______.



These experiences have deeply shaped who I have become, and influence my choices
every day of my life.



The scenario depicted above would not be a unique experience in my career.



This talent will continue to aid me in fostering innovation within my
organization and among my staff members as my career progresses.



The first major challenge we face is to ______ .


The next challenge is to ______ .


It remains more critical than ever to ______ .



The most significant challenges I face in my immediate job are ______ .



However, ______ was a difficult management and technological project and has
been my toughest professional challenge thus far.



This project posed both management and technical challenges.



______ was pivotal to our proposal.



When I was the ______ for the______ I faced regular difficulties ____ing ______.
This was due to ______ .



Accomplishing this task has been harder than I could have ever imagined.



______ is a difficult exercise in ______ .



I recognize the need to improve ______ .



My time as ______ has been instrumental in teaching me how to  ______



This experience has taught me how to ______



Completing my degree in ______ has given me a strong ______ foundation in
______.



I realize ______ may very well be a part of my job description. When ______ ,
it is important to be able to ______ in more than one light.



3. 学习计划与对MBA Program的贡献



3.1 Study Plans in the Program


Should I be accepted into the ______ MBA program, I will be active in the
classroom, with student organizations and where other opportunities arise.
In and out of the classroom I am one who is always willing to raise his
hand or disagree or simply add a new perspective to the discussion.



The rigor of a ______ education demands both teamwork and trust in your
teammates.
These are critical lessons for every manager. At times, as the leader of my
______ team, I will manage the overall project and delegate assignments.
Other times, as a team member, I will contribute toward our end goal. Practicing
teamwork in an educational environment offers the opportunity for analysis and
introspection.
Due to the hectic pace of the business world, it is difficult to find the time
to examine the inner workings of a team.
Studying for two years at ______ will enable me to study team dynamics and
reflect on my role as both a leader and a participant of a team.



MBA courses I'd like to gain an inner point of view from the leading country of
the industry.
Second and related, during my experience in the MBA courses I hope I will meet
other people who have had the opportunity to work in this field and to share
with them experiences, ideas and opinions.
I want to go deeper from an already interesting academic point of view to the
point of view that the mixture of firsthand experience and knowledge can give
you.
Last, I think an MBA is a clear signal that you can give to inform others of
your knowledge and capability.



By the end of my MBA course I want to have a broad understanding of the key
functional disciplines,
the role of ______ and the opportunities and challenges of the global arena in
business.
I believe the key to problem solving is effective teamwork and management of
resources and I am looking to develop these skills to an exceptional standard.
In addition to this, I require career management skills to ensure that I place
myself in a role that is going to challenge and excite me.



In the short term, I need to broaden my understanding beyond the functional
areas I mastered at ______ and at several entrepreneurial companies where I was
the ______.
I want to expand my point of view as ______ and bring my unique perspective to
bear on issues that face the whole company.
I also want to improve my ______ and ______ skills so that in the long term as
______ I can lead the whole company toward a common goal.



At the same time, I will be open to the assistance my classmates can give me
from their particular
undergraduate field of study. I will enjoy the opportunity to work with highly
talented and motivated students.
Sharing ideas and experiences will give me the chance to improve myself while
helping my peers.



While at ______ , I hope to not only share my experiences and perspectives, but
also learn through the experiences and perspectives of others.
I hope to challenge my classmates to look within themselves to understand how
building diverse relationships can help them grow as well.



As I share and relive my personal and professional experiences with others,
I will gain new insights to these experiences and will be able to better
internalize them.



I hope to develop lifetime friendships and forge professional relationships that
extend well beyond the completion of the program.



At the same time, I will be open to the assistance my classmates can give me
from their particular undergraduate field of study.
I will enjoy the opportunity to work with highly talented and motivated
students.
Sharing ideas and experiences will give me the chance to improve myself while
helping my peers.


3.2 Contribution to Classroom



I will definitely bring different ______ point of views and creative
perspectives to the widespread classroom discussions.
I hope that my complete development as a person and personal experiences will
have effects on other's minds and feelings.
Every member of the ______ community should benefit from this wonderful
contribution.



I will bring to ______ my [diverse background and the same level of persistence,
self-confidence, and belief in bettering others] as I have demonstrated in the
past.
As a [female, Vietnamese, Chinese, and Asian American], I will provide my
[multicultural] perspective and add to the school's diversity.
With my [persistence and self- confidence], I will challenge others to excel
academically and enrich the entering class with my personal and professional
life and experiences.
Most importantly, I will continue to live my belief of bettering others by
assisting with student organizations on campus, especially the __group__.



I will be willing to help my classmates with any ______ aspects I am familiar
with from my experience as a ______.
I will be able to apply my background of ______ to helping my classmates with
______information covered in ______ course work.



A background in ______. The ability to ______, An understanding of ______.
I will bring these qualities to the Business School program and ultimately to my
career in _____ management.



My academic, personal interests, and professional background and understanding
in the latest business and technology form will make me
additive to the overall learning environment of the ______ Business School and I
would make a valuable asset for classroom discussion.



______ University's classroom will assuredly be enhanced with my whole set of
working situations and experiences ranging from ______ to ______



Only now can I realize how much these experiences have added value to my
personal and professional life, and in what a manner will they continue to
mould me and enrich ______ 's classroom.



I will be willing to help my classmates with any ______ aspects I am familiar
with from my experience as a ______ .
I will be able to apply my background of ______ to helping my classmates with
______ covered in ______ course work.



At ______ , I think my openness to varying viewpoints will encourage effective
teamwork and collaboration



In sum, I will be able to enrich the ______ community because my thoughtfulness,
strong loyalty and unyielding commitment to community will allow teammates to
grow personally and professionally,
and my flexibility and genuine compassion will allow me to become a credible and
successful leader.



I look to share all of these experiences with my peers and be further enriched
from their own life lessons as well.


I believe my contributions and participation will benefit the experience for the
other participants.


I will bring my real-world challenges and experience to classes.


3.3 Diversity and Other Qualifications



Besides ______, other relevant information for the Admissions Committee to take
into
consideration are [my work ethic, the diversity of my work background, my active
participation in the community and my anticipated
active participation in both the classroom, student organizations and other
aspects of the ______ community].



My overall work experience has been quite diverse having had exposure to many
business sectors,
both private and public sector, including [academia, student services, medical
research, healthcare, finance, banking,
legal and currently entertainment].



I have a few personal characteristics that have led me to this career choice and
that will ultimately allow me to be successful.
I posses a ______ that prepares me for success.


References: Business Week, Bebeyond, EEC ...



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                                                            2004年秋,华盛顿

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作者: agk99    时间: 2004-11-6 11:37

才看一半,就知不頂不行了


作者: snow_mountain    时间: 2004-11-6 11:49
非常感谢!
作者: cranberry    时间: 2004-11-6 11:54

多好的人啊,哈哈


作者: rhod    时间: 2004-11-6 13:50

Very good sharing! Thank you!


作者: dullpen    时间: 2004-11-6 21:17
严重感谢!
作者: blackhorse    时间: 2004-11-6 21:47
essay也有模板,那岂不是中国人的都一样,那老外一看就可能起反感了吧,我表示怀疑?
作者: HRperson    时间: 2004-11-6 23:04

?


[此贴子已经被作者于2004-11-6 23:53:00编辑过]

作者: ceeyee    时间: 2004-11-7 00:02

这是句式的总结,是作为在有时候觉得一句话不知道怎么说的时候,可以参考。

不是说像考试那样的照搬照套。主要是起辅助作用,特别是点题句,要确保语言的正确性。

里面的很多空格不是只是填一两个词的,那里应该有很大的发挥。

同时的作用是学习意群中句子逻辑是如何过渡和连接的。


作者: yanying76    时间: 2004-11-7 00:17

真有人觉得这东西好吗?我怎么一看头就大?如果自己思如泉涌,为什么要参考这个来写呢?


作者: cheesedream    时间: 2004-11-7 00:50

牛哥哥!牛哥哥!谢谢啦!

不晓得哪位牛哥哥能再上个phdps的魔板,那就太美了。。。


作者: cmtn    时间: 2004-11-7 13:44

thanks a lot


作者: ddx26    时间: 2004-11-7 14:19

有参考价值,多谢!!


作者: freeflying    时间: 2004-11-8 11:48
thank you so much.
作者: skypacerzhou    时间: 2004-11-8 19:22
Essays produced out of such template has slim chance to get into top MBA program.
作者: wcai    时间: 2004-11-12 04:51
Thank you so much!
作者: wangyu73cn    时间: 2004-11-12 10:52
谢谢了。
作者: katie_shi    时间: 2004-11-25 09:49

楼主GG在读GWU的B-school吗?看了你的msn,瞎猜一下,对不对啊?

因为自己准备申请gwu,水深火热,想找个大虾指点一下。


作者: 幸福的盒子    时间: 2004-11-29 00:06

作者: 小剪刀    时间: 2005-7-10 14:28

thanks for sharing


作者: 小女公子    时间: 2005-7-10 17:21
第一版在哪里??thanks!!
作者: jackwoo111    时间: 2005-7-11 00:13
标题: One comment

Really doubt that this will be helpful for china applicants. There are many negative effectives such as similarity. This will give the committee memebers a impression that all chinese applicants use the template for essay.


作者: maxiaoha    时间: 2005-7-11 09:10
A good material. Thank you for sharing.
作者: jackychew    时间: 2005-7-11 16:13

还是确认一下重要性的好!


首先楼主的东东肯定是值得深谢的好参考资料。


但是小弟实在是很迷茫:究竟是内容意境为主,还是清晰八股为主呢???(同在准确表达的前提下,小弟也加了“为主”两字);还是听天由命的押宝式各个风格都行呢?望指导,谢谢。


作者: Joypan    时间: 2005-11-19 18:48

非常感谢!!


作者: hongred    时间: 2005-12-17 05:08
I think this is very very useful. You don't have to use exactly words as stated. But the insight of it can benefit us (especially me) the most.
作者: linchechin    时间: 2005-12-17 13:48

作者: 叮当    时间: 2006-11-8 17:18

Very useful!!!


作者: robinst    时间: 2006-11-8 18:54

汗一滴下来了。...这个也能有模板,牛~


作者: ustc9718    时间: 2006-11-8 23:18

Thanks for your sharing!!


作者: babosa    时间: 2006-11-8 23:21
他山之玉,强烈欣赏lz的rp!!!!
作者: MayFair    时间: 2006-11-9 01:24
first up, next read
作者: expert    时间: 2006-11-9 10:42
3x。顶一下
作者: 苞米    时间: 2006-11-9 10:49

彻底服了,中华文化真是博大精深,不仅将GMAT这样的专业化考试戏弄于鼓掌之间,现在居然发展到将申请文章这一最个性化的东西程式化,真是化神奇为腐朽呀,佩服佩服。依我看,不需要多长时间,必定会有高人更上一层楼,将整个MBA PROGRAM制作成 《美国MBA课程重点内容考试精华与摸板》或者什么《美国MBA课程十日通》之类的经典之作。到后我辈中人GMAT考试用机经一个月搞定,GMAT ESSAY用摸版半个月搞定,GMAT课程用十天搞定。。。。。。说来说去还是没有办假证的快----半天搞定!!!!

(本文内容纯属虚构,如与事实雷同,纯属巧合,请勿对号入座)


作者: inlovesummer    时间: 2006-11-10 03:02
请问第一版在哪里呢  thanx
作者: super_pig    时间: 2006-11-10 09:31
这个都有魔板


太~强了


作者: polarsun    时间: 2007-6-20 06:03

Niu!!


作者: echo613    时间: 2007-6-20 11:49
见仁见智,不知道如何下手的人,未尝不是一个参考呀
作者: Huangzizeng    时间: 2007-6-20 15:18

就是自己没有时间思如泉涌啊.


作者: Sharrie    时间: 2010-3-25 13:40
感谢,同时崇拜那位思如泉涌的童鞋
作者: 狗猫家的懒虫    时间: 2011-8-7 23:06
很棒~
作者: zhualei1982    时间: 2012-10-19 07:56
谢谢楼主!
作者: jeariel    时间: 2013-5-29 16:39
深深地赞楼主!!!
作者: shanshan91999    时间: 2013-6-2 02:09
thanks!!!!
作者: valentine85    时间: 2013-6-3 17:49
Thanks so much for sharing!
作者: cynthia_dyu    时间: 2013-6-8 08:07
感谢楼主的分享。
作者: davidking007    时间: 2015-2-2 06:52
thanks a lot...
作者: Kitty0613    时间: 2015-5-4 04:34
mark~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
作者: MM2015    时间: 2016-4-17 23:27
ceeyee 发表于 2004-11-6 11:26
针对MBA申请中的重点ESSAY文章做的文书用语模板总结。在我两个月前的奖学金申请经验的用语栏目的改进版本。 ...

Mark一下!               
作者: cicily-hou    时间: 2023-9-15 21:56
看一下!               




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