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Nowadays, there is a public controversy over the issue whether people should
spend their free time outdoors or indoors. From my point of view, it is more advisable to choose spending the free time on outdoor activities. My argument for this goes as follows.

Foremost, outdoor activities are more beneficial to our health. In everyday life, people spend most of their time in studying and working.  Long time work under pressure would make them exhausted and is not healthy . Outdoors exercises will refresh both people’s bodies and minds.  Some people like to hike(?) to enjoy the fresh air at higher altitude. Someone would go swimming to enhance the flexibility of their bodies. Others may love to play tennis to foster the abilities of reaction. Almost all the outdoor activities have the relaxing ability and make people working or learning more efficiently..

Next, in their spare time, people can have a travel such as go abroad .By
traveling universally, people can amplify their horizons and know other
civilization .For example, People may climb the Great Wall of China which
is one of the most marvelous constructions in the world. By standing the
Great Wall, people can deeply understand the outstanding wisdom of the
Chinese people and know the history of the period.
In addition, those who spend their free time outdoors have more
opportunities to make friends. For example, people may join parties; call
on their neighbors and so on. There is no denying that people can own
congenial friends by talking with each other face to face. The more friends
people make, the happier people feel. Furthermore, good suggestions and
information always come from good     friends.

Of course, somebody might prefer to stay inside to sleep, watch TV etc. Imagining to spend too much time in sleeping, watching TV or surfing online, it might relax your mind for a while.  However, the side effect of these activities would be more negative than its relaxing contribution in long term.  

Nowadays, there is a public controversy over the issue这个句子好像每个人都在用， 考虑稍微换换吧 whether people should
spend their free time outdoors or indoors. From my point of view, it is more advisable to choose spending the free time on outdoor activities. My argument for this goes as follows.

Foremost, outdoor activities are more beneficial to our health. In everyday life, people spend most of their time in studying and working.  Long time work under pressure would make them exhausted and is not healthy . Outdoors exercises will refresh both people’s bodies and minds.  Some people like to hike(?) to enjoy the fresh air at higher altitude. Someone would go swimming to enhance the flexibility of their bodies. Others may love to play tennis to foster the abilities of reaction. Almost all the outdoor activities have the relaxing ability and make people working or learning more efficiently..

Next, in their spare time, people can have a travel such as go abroad .By
traveling universally, people can amplify their horizons and know other
civilization .For example, People may climb the Great Wall of China which
is one of the most marvelous constructions in the world. By standing the
Great Wall, people can deeply understand the outstanding wisdom of the
Chinese people and know the history of the period.

In addition, those who spend their free time outdoors have more
opportunities to make friends. For example, people may join parties; call
on their neighbors and so on. There is no denying that people can own
congenial friends by talking with each other face to face. The more friends
people make, the happier people feel. Furthermore, good suggestions and
information always come from good     friends.

Of course, somebody might prefer to stay inside to sleep, watch TV etc. Imagining to spend too much time in sleeping, watching TV or surfing online, it might relax your mind for a while.  However, the side effect of these activities would be more negative than its relaxing contribution in long term.   

To summarize, it is clearly that people should spend more free time outdoors.

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PS；请问这个是哪个题目呢？

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